You Don't Know Me
Trying to make them understand37 total reviews
Comment from Benny Beeharry
Hi friend, this is a very beautiful write in its own right. There is so much od simplicity ,honesty , greatfullness and gratitude for what one has or get.
I really love it.
You are the winner!
Danny Jock
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Hi friend, this is a very beautiful write in its own right. There is so much od simplicity ,honesty , greatfullness and gratitude for what one has or get.
I really love it.
You are the winner!
Danny Jock
Comment Written 29-Mar-2017
Comment from Thomas Bowling
A very good contest entry. I hope you do well. It is hard to win contests. The writing is so arbitrary. It takes skill and some luck.
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A very good contest entry. I hope you do well. It is hard to win contests. The writing is so arbitrary. It takes skill and some luck.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2017
Comment from kiwisteveh
A positive outlook on being poor from a child's perspective. Your poem rhymes well and the abcb rhyming stanzas flow smoothly.
Good luck in this contest.
Steve
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A positive outlook on being poor from a child's perspective. Your poem rhymes well and the abcb rhyming stanzas flow smoothly.
Good luck in this contest.
Steve
Comment Written 29-Mar-2017
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
This was an unusual write for a children's poem, in my opinion, but it would certainly open a great line of discussion on the blessings a lot of kids have. Great idea! Good luck!
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Dear Mystery Writer,
This was an unusual write for a children's poem, in my opinion, but it would certainly open a great line of discussion on the blessings a lot of kids have. Great idea! Good luck!
Comment Written 29-Mar-2017
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem for children. It is not always the money and items that glitter that makes one a better person. The ones who have nothing have sometimes more character than any other.
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A very well-written poem for children. It is not always the money and items that glitter that makes one a better person. The ones who have nothing have sometimes more character than any other.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2017
Comment from Mustang Patty
Thank you for sharing this well structured poem. I think it would make a lovely poem for children that feel so disenfranchised simply because they come from broken homes, or homes that don't have much money. I appreciated your author's notes - I know what it is like to be from a family in need,
~patty~
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Thank you for sharing this well structured poem. I think it would make a lovely poem for children that feel so disenfranchised simply because they come from broken homes, or homes that don't have much money. I appreciated your author's notes - I know what it is like to be from a family in need,
~patty~
Comment Written 29-Mar-2017
Comment from MelB
This is a well written poem. It makes me sad that kids would not like another, just because they don't have lots of money. She is not letting it make her hard, and continuing to treat others as she wants to be treated. A great life lesson there.
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This is a well written poem. It makes me sad that kids would not like another, just because they don't have lots of money. She is not letting it make her hard, and continuing to treat others as she wants to be treated. A great life lesson there.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2017
Comment from Bill O'Bier
In my experience, poor people are the world's greatest entrepreneurs. Every day, they must innovate in order to survive. They remain poor because they do not have the opportunities to turn their creativity into sustainable income. Thanks for your well-crafted poem.
Bill~
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In my experience, poor people are the world's greatest entrepreneurs. Every day, they must innovate in order to survive. They remain poor because they do not have the opportunities to turn their creativity into sustainable income. Thanks for your well-crafted poem.
Bill~
Comment Written 29-Mar-2017
Comment from oliver818
Nice poem! I enjoyed the rhythm and flow , and the childhood imagery is really enjoyable. Thanks for sharing and have a great day
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Nice poem! I enjoyed the rhythm and flow , and the childhood imagery is really enjoyable. Thanks for sharing and have a great day
Comment Written 29-Mar-2017
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Mystery Poet:
I managed a produce department for many years. This poem reminds me of all the donations we made daily to the local food bank. We'd save the culls that we couldn't sell and everything that was still in good shape would go to less fortunate families in the community. Thanks for painting the picture of optimism and dignity with your poem. Lack of funds has become such a stigma in our society.
Good luck in the contest.
Kim
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Hi Mystery Poet:
I managed a produce department for many years. This poem reminds me of all the donations we made daily to the local food bank. We'd save the culls that we couldn't sell and everything that was still in good shape would go to less fortunate families in the community. Thanks for painting the picture of optimism and dignity with your poem. Lack of funds has become such a stigma in our society.
Good luck in the contest.
Kim
Comment Written 29-Mar-2017