dandelions paint
5/7/5 A Flower20 total reviews
Comment from Janet Foor
dandelions paint
yellow blobs on winter scene
Spring's artful brush stroke
This is a lovely reminder that spring is here or at least, coming soon.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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dandelions paint
yellow blobs on winter scene
Spring's artful brush stroke
This is a lovely reminder that spring is here or at least, coming soon.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Thanks for that lovely accolade zanya
Comment from Pantygynt
And we are so glad to see them then suddenly there are too many of the damn things. They are beautiful really but doomed to destruction by being so prolific.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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And we are so glad to see them then suddenly there are too many of the damn things. They are beautiful really but doomed to destruction by being so prolific.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Yes -thanks for reading zanya
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I like this one. The imagery is very sharp and vivid. Nice to see wees depicted for their own sense of beauty as well.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Hi there,
I like this one. The imagery is very sharp and vivid. Nice to see wees depicted for their own sense of beauty as well.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Thanks for the critique zanya
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
Do dandelions bloom in winter where you live? They don't here and we're in a really nice zone. I also don't get the time of year you're referring to since you have winter AND spring mentioned. I think you need to revise. Thanks and good luck!
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reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Dear Mystery Writer,
Do dandelions bloom in winter where you live? They don't here and we're in a really nice zone. I also don't get the time of year you're referring to since you have winter AND spring mentioned. I think you need to revise. Thanks and good luck!
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Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Well spotted - and thanks for reading zanya
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem. The yellow color of the dandelion is attracting many people's attention that seems to bring sunshine to a winter scene.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem. The yellow color of the dandelion is attracting many people's attention that seems to bring sunshine to a winter scene.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Thanks for the critique zanya
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is well written I love the scene you have painted when dandelions spread all over fields they would be like yellow blobs well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Yes this is well written I love the scene you have painted when dandelions spread all over fields they would be like yellow blobs well done regards Jill
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Great -thanks for reading zanya
Comment from MaggieF
I'm really starting to get into haikus, you can convey so much in a few words, the picture helps. I love the fact that Spring is sprinting around painting bright scenes over winter's drabness, good personification. Enjoyed. MaggieF
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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I'm really starting to get into haikus, you can convey so much in a few words, the picture helps. I love the fact that Spring is sprinting around painting bright scenes over winter's drabness, good personification. Enjoyed. MaggieF
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Lovely image -thanks for reading zanya
Comment from tfawcus
I generally associate dandelions with summer but I guess that you are right, they begin to get a hold in spring. Lovely to look at, a deep-rooted bane if one is a gardener, but the wherewithal for making a most intoxicating homebrew! All in all, one of nature's more interesting plants. You either love them or hate them! Yellow blobs sums them up rather nicely!
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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I generally associate dandelions with summer but I guess that you are right, they begin to get a hold in spring. Lovely to look at, a deep-rooted bane if one is a gardener, but the wherewithal for making a most intoxicating homebrew! All in all, one of nature's more interesting plants. You either love them or hate them! Yellow blobs sums them up rather nicely!
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Yes they have many aspects but are a welcome sight when they appear -thanks for reading zanya
Comment from dragonpoet
I always thought dandelions wre pretty even though they are weeds. They are so bright and cheery.
Good luck and keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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I always thought dandelions wre pretty even though they are weeds. They are so bright and cheery.
Good luck and keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Yes -thanks for reading zanya
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You're welcome.
Joan
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Well, I must say Spring has painted my yard all over with yellow blobs. I enjoyed your poem. The picture/art is perfect. I like the personification of Spring.
Suggestion:
dandelion paints 5 syls.
yellow blobs on winter scene 7 syls.
Spring's arty stroke 4 syls--needs to be 5
[Spring's artsy brush strokes]
Best wishes in the contest. Jan
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reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Well, I must say Spring has painted my yard all over with yellow blobs. I enjoyed your poem. The picture/art is perfect. I like the personification of Spring.
Suggestion:
dandelion paints 5 syls.
yellow blobs on winter scene 7 syls.
Spring's arty stroke 4 syls--needs to be 5
[Spring's artsy brush strokes]
Best wishes in the contest. Jan
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Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Yes they are a pretty sight -thanks for reading zanya