Wild Clover
Wild clover seems to have an energy to it.17 total reviews
Comment from RodG
Yes, I have seen this on a small hill in our local park. I really like how you have personified the clover as being a child somersaulting down a steep hill. When the clover is fully in bloom it does look exactly like what you described. Nicely done in only 17 syllables.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Yes, I have seen this on a small hill in our local park. I really like how you have personified the clover as being a child somersaulting down a steep hill. When the clover is fully in bloom it does look exactly like what you described. Nicely done in only 17 syllables.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Thank you for seeing what I see.
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You're very welcome.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a fun poem on a great observation. Good job on the syllable count per line.
I believe you need to make somersault & land both end in 's'. Your subject is singular & needs singular verbs. Perhaps clover can be both singular & plural. But I would add the s to both words.
Thanks for sharing. Best wishes in the contest. Jan
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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This is a fun poem on a great observation. Good job on the syllable count per line.
I believe you need to make somersault & land both end in 's'. Your subject is singular & needs singular verbs. Perhaps clover can be both singular & plural. But I would add the s to both words.
Thanks for sharing. Best wishes in the contest. Jan
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Clover is plural as well as singular so I made the verbs plural. Thank you for your positive comments.
Comment from mvbrooks
The last line of "land topsy-turvy" offers an explanation for the scattered nature of these blooms. The poem offers a visual element of a mountainside with purple hues.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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The last line of "land topsy-turvy" offers an explanation for the scattered nature of these blooms. The poem offers a visual element of a mountainside with purple hues.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Thank you for seeing what I see.
Comment from MaggieF
Your poem made me smile. With very few words you have painted such a vivid picture. Where I live in northern Ireland we have fields of purple clover, though unfortunately I've never seen them somersault! MaggieF
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Your poem made me smile. With very few words you have painted such a vivid picture. Where I live in northern Ireland we have fields of purple clover, though unfortunately I've never seen them somersault! MaggieF
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Thank you for sharing the same sights I see.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-I like your choice of topic.
-Format is good.
-You do not need a picture
to convey this clover to the reader.
-I could see it after reading the first line.
-I like your other vivid descriptions, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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-I like your choice of topic.
-Format is good.
-You do not need a picture
to convey this clover to the reader.
-I could see it after reading the first line.
-I like your other vivid descriptions, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your detailed thoughts.
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You are quite welcome.
Comment from DonandVicki
Another poem that jostled my childhood memories. I loved the springtime when I was a child, the cloves and my fishing pole.
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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Another poem that jostled my childhood memories. I loved the springtime when I was a child, the cloves and my fishing pole.
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Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Thank you for sharing your memories and for the positive review.
Comment from ronnie k
Homerun, I read and stopped to look out of my window to see what you saw and the moment of joy was so worth the five stars that fell from my poetic treasure chesLOL
WONDERFULL POEM
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Homerun, I read and stopped to look out of my window to see what you saw and the moment of joy was so worth the five stars that fell from my poetic treasure chesLOL
WONDERFULL POEM
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Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your enthusiastic words.