Embrace the New Year
ABC contest entry14 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written ABC poem with an excellent message to all. Embrace the New Year and accept others for who and what they are.
Happy New Year.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
A very well-written ABC poem with an excellent message to all. Embrace the New Year and accept others for who and what they are.
Happy New Year.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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Hi Sandra,
Thanks for taking the time to read and review. You understood the message perfectly. The problem I see is that very few seem to realize that it applies to one and all. (without exempting themselves)
Happy New Year!
Kim
Comment from ciliverde
I like that you wove the ABC's into your poem, and the biblical example of Eve and her apple tree. You make some interesting and apt points here, about tolerance and labels. None of us are perfect, so why can't we find middle ground? I so wish we could! Good luck in the contest, and Happy New Year!
Carol
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
I like that you wove the ABC's into your poem, and the biblical example of Eve and her apple tree. You make some interesting and apt points here, about tolerance and labels. None of us are perfect, so why can't we find middle ground? I so wish we could! Good luck in the contest, and Happy New Year!
Carol
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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Hi Carol,
I have two more verses I'm just now adding. Seems I'm always a work in progress lol I appreciate your viewpoint and you got it exactly! Why can't we find middle ground? Thanks for taking the time to read and review.
Kim
Comment from GracieAnn
DOVEY,
This ABC Poetry Contest entry fulfills the requirements of the contest with the alpa order of words. You worked hard on the rhyme endings and the message is clear with a strong testimony. All the best in the contest! :0 GracieAnn
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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
DOVEY,
This ABC Poetry Contest entry fulfills the requirements of the contest with the alpa order of words. You worked hard on the rhyme endings and the message is clear with a strong testimony. All the best in the contest! :0 GracieAnn
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Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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Thank you, GracieAnn, for taking the time to read and review. I appreciate the comments and well wishes.
Kim
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Very clever girl Kim not only 3 verses of ABC's but all with the same rhyme scheme. Well done, and you still managed two great life lesson questions to finish verses 2 and 3. Nicely done, and good luck in the contest.
cheers,
valda
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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
Very clever girl Kim not only 3 verses of ABC's but all with the same rhyme scheme. Well done, and you still managed two great life lesson questions to finish verses 2 and 3. Nicely done, and good luck in the contest.
cheers,
valda
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Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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Hi Valda!
I have 2 more verses, wasn't sure of adding them all. Perhaps, you could help me decide? Here they are:
One?s often defined by his ancestries.
Please, can?t we recognize, as future foresees
quite often when our positivity flees
respect for our brethren is thrown to the breeze.
I?ll offer my whim, born by wind through the trees.
A doctrine spread by religious ministries
bears the same weight as those whose theories
counter another?s idiosyncrasies.
Diverse populations are what we achieve,
by respecting what others in our lives believe.
Shall I add them, or not?
Thanks!!
Kim
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I would Kim, just get rid of the question marks in amongst the words. What you are saying is -live and let live- and I think you say it well in these verses. I think all 5 verses compliment each other. Go for it.
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The ? marks were apostrophes before I cut and pasted lol Thank you so much!! I will add them.
Kim