Seashore and Sunset
Sunset on the beach is a calm transition from day to night.14 total reviews
Comment from DonandVicki
A very well composed 5-7-5 about a sunset. Your poem has no need of artwork as your words build and image by themselves. Very well composed and doesn't feel forced.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2016
A very well composed 5-7-5 about a sunset. Your poem has no need of artwork as your words build and image by themselves. Very well composed and doesn't feel forced.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2016
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Thank you for your very positive comments.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
I live in Florida. This describes every night for me. I came to Florida thirty years ago, fell in love with the sea and never went back. It was paradise.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2016
I live in Florida. This describes every night for me. I came to Florida thirty years ago, fell in love with the sea and never went back. It was paradise.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2016
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You are lucky to have such a way of life.
Comment from rspoet
This is a fine entry for the contest
with exact syllables at 5-7-5
Excellent use of alliteration
that reinforces the tranquil feel the seashore
when the the weather is calm
Nicely done
Good luck in the contest
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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2016
This is a fine entry for the contest
with exact syllables at 5-7-5
Excellent use of alliteration
that reinforces the tranquil feel the seashore
when the the weather is calm
Nicely done
Good luck in the contest
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Comment Written 20-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2016
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Thank you for such detailed comments and positive review.
Comment from tfawcus
This is so evocative of one of those calm evenings by the sea when the very waves themselves seem almost to be nodding off at the close of day. The use of 'sandman' is rather good in the context!
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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2016
This is so evocative of one of those calm evenings by the sea when the very waves themselves seem almost to be nodding off at the close of day. The use of 'sandman' is rather good in the context!
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Comment Written 20-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2016
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Thank you for such observant comments.