Ode to the Wind
I find the facets of the wind intriguing.20 total reviews
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Great poem. The wind is a wonderful thing. Hurricanes, not so much. Here in Florida hurricane Matthew just blew through. No fun.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2016
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Great poem. The wind is a wonderful thing. Hurricanes, not so much. Here in Florida hurricane Matthew just blew through. No fun.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2016
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Thank you for your encouraging review.
Comment from robyn corum
This was a really fun poem! Thanks for helping to introduce children to the wind and its many vagaries. *smile* I enjoyed this very much. My favorites lines were:
He says goodnight in a gentle voice
then tiptoes away without any noise,
Thanks again - and good luck!
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2016
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This was a really fun poem! Thanks for helping to introduce children to the wind and its many vagaries. *smile* I enjoyed this very much. My favorites lines were:
He says goodnight in a gentle voice
then tiptoes away without any noise,
Thanks again - and good luck!
Comment Written 18-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2016
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Thank you for your very positive words.
Comment from royowen
Well done with this entry in this ode poetry competition, the repeated last line forms the base for the ode, which is continued throughout the work, it completes a fifth line in each stanza, which is an adjunct to a aabb rhyming quatrain. Beautifully written, slightly uneven syllable count makes the meter a little uneven, but the descriptive, articulate language, rescues it, and makes this an excellent work, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2016
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Well done with this entry in this ode poetry competition, the repeated last line forms the base for the ode, which is continued throughout the work, it completes a fifth line in each stanza, which is an adjunct to a aabb rhyming quatrain. Beautifully written, slightly uneven syllable count makes the meter a little uneven, but the descriptive, articulate language, rescues it, and makes this an excellent work, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 18-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2016
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Thank you for your expertise and positive comments.
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Most welcome
Comment from RYME4U
This is a delightful ode to read. I love poems about wind...the personification is great, Very descriptive covering each season, I really enjoyed this.Good luck
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2016
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This is a delightful ode to read. I love poems about wind...the personification is great, Very descriptive covering each season, I really enjoyed this.Good luck
Comment Written 18-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2016
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Thank you for such positive words.
Comment from Quantum Traveler
This is an "Outstanding" Poem for Children.
You will have to visualize it with me.
A Group of Youngsters gathered around a Storyteller.
Each and everyone one plays a part.
He stays still, sometimes he runs free.
He hums along to their whistled words.
He makes the tree shake their leaves.
Leaves fall to the ground.
He shouts and roars with an icy blast.
He says goodnight in a gentle voice.
Then tiptoes away without any noise.
This makes for an action packed storytelling Poem.
An Excellent read with so many possibilities.
Very Well Done...Quantum Traveler...Phil.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2016
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This is an "Outstanding" Poem for Children.
You will have to visualize it with me.
A Group of Youngsters gathered around a Storyteller.
Each and everyone one plays a part.
He stays still, sometimes he runs free.
He hums along to their whistled words.
He makes the tree shake their leaves.
Leaves fall to the ground.
He shouts and roars with an icy blast.
He says goodnight in a gentle voice.
Then tiptoes away without any noise.
This makes for an action packed storytelling Poem.
An Excellent read with so many possibilities.
Very Well Done...Quantum Traveler...Phil.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2016
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Thank you for such detailed and positive words. I appreciate your comments.
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My Pleasure...This is a great Poem to work with I can see lots of fun here...Quantum Traveler...Phil.
Comment from Sis Cat
This is a phenomenally beautiful and elegant children's ode to wind. You touch all of the seasons with your descriptions of wind as an invisible friend you cannot see. The poem is inventive and has a Western feel about it through your repeated refrain. Wind also represents freedom here. Thank you for sharing. After the contest, submit this to a children's publication. I wish you success.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2016
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This is a phenomenally beautiful and elegant children's ode to wind. You touch all of the seasons with your descriptions of wind as an invisible friend you cannot see. The poem is inventive and has a Western feel about it through your repeated refrain. Wind also represents freedom here. Thank you for sharing. After the contest, submit this to a children's publication. I wish you success.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2016
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Thank you for your very positive review.
Comment from prettybluebirds
Excellent. It might be irregular but it is lovely and well written. Any child would love to have this read to them. I didn't spot any errors. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2016
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Excellent. It might be irregular but it is lovely and well written. Any child would love to have this read to them. I didn't spot any errors. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2016
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Thank you for all the positive words and support.
Comment from foxangie123
This is one of the a most absolute best pieces of writing out there in my opinion. It is so free flowing and delicately embraces the reader with many smooches indeed. It truly is uplifting and so excellent.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2016
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This is one of the a most absolute best pieces of writing out there in my opinion. It is so free flowing and delicately embraces the reader with many smooches indeed. It truly is uplifting and so excellent.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2016
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Thank you for such wonderful words of praise. I truly appreciate you.
Comment from tfawcus
Your ode is a delight to read aloud. It takes us through the seasons, following the wind's various moods. Children, too, have their moods and so that might be a point of identification for them. Nicely written. You avoid the wilder excesses of this wild, wonderful wind, and that is perhaps wise!
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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2016
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Your ode is a delight to read aloud. It takes us through the seasons, following the wind's various moods. Children, too, have their moods and so that might be a point of identification for them. Nicely written. You avoid the wilder excesses of this wild, wonderful wind, and that is perhaps wise!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2016
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Thank you for your very positive words.
Comment from RodG
This ode will delight readers of all ages, but especially children who do see the Wind as a person. Wonderful personification; his multi-faceted personality is vividly described for each season. I especially like this imagery: when snow blankets the ground, he makes no sound,/in that sleepy hush he just hangs around. Your refrain also emphasizes why this is an ode. An exceptional poem with flawless meter and rhyme. Loved it! Rod
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2016
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This ode will delight readers of all ages, but especially children who do see the Wind as a person. Wonderful personification; his multi-faceted personality is vividly described for each season. I especially like this imagery: when snow blankets the ground, he makes no sound,/in that sleepy hush he just hangs around. Your refrain also emphasizes why this is an ode. An exceptional poem with flawless meter and rhyme. Loved it! Rod
Comment Written 18-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2016
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Thank you. Your review and the extra star have made my day.
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I am delighted I could do so.
