Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Lance

= Excellent poem for the contest.
= Uniquely said, with a great choice of artwork.
= Patiently she waits ... and waits. Good luck with this super entry.

(*<*) A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-Down (*>*)
Cheers & Blessings ... Jacqueline ~ Jackie ~ Jax


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 Comment Written 24-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016

Thank you very much.

Comment from judiverse

Exceptional

This is excellent, and certainly deserving a 6. The cinquain form is carried out beautifully, with correct syllable count. Also, you do a great job with the parallel structure, with the infinitive phrases and then the subject-verb sentences. It works great. This poem reads very smoothly, too. Subject a wistful subject--the woman who's grown old waiting for her love. The years have passed, but still she waits. You need an apostrophe on love--For love's return. Really beautiful. judi

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016

Thank you very much, Judi. It is a bit sad, I hope the judges don't mind.

reply by judiverse on 25-Jul-2016

You're welcome, lancellot. Sometimes it's the emotional appeal that gets to them. judi

reply by Anonymous Member on 27-Jul-2016

You're welcome, lancellot. Sometimes it's the emotional appeal that gets to them. judi

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

Lance, this is a very good cinquain for the contest. Good luck in the contest. The picture you painted with your words tell the story of the photo. Patricia

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 Comment Written 24-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016

Thank you very much.