A Day at the Beach
A short poem of remembrance.16 total reviews
Comment from foxangie123
You just won the gold with this two four two. It does not get any more real than this. Way to go my friend. Wow-ah. This rocks for real.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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You just won the gold with this two four two. It does not get any more real than this. Way to go my friend. Wow-ah. This rocks for real.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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Your praise is overwhelming ... thank you. Good luck in your own writing.
Comment from SAO'Connor
This work is striking in it's visual effect and poetic content.
I cannot really identify anything that I would say could be improved upon. I have no way of knowing if the author took the photograph or was simply inspired by it but either way it is especially timely.
I wish it was available for purchase.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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This work is striking in it's visual effect and poetic content.
I cannot really identify anything that I would say could be improved upon. I have no way of knowing if the author took the photograph or was simply inspired by it but either way it is especially timely.
I wish it was available for purchase.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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The picture came from FanArtReview and they are for sale (I think my search word was WWII). Thank you for the appreciation and fine rating. Good luck in your writing.
Comment from rspoet
There are many days etched into our minds
Pearl Harbor, Sept. 11th, and D-Day, and more
You've done well with this short form
Excellent ironic title
As good a poem as can be written
in eight syllables
Perfect presentation
Well done
Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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There are many days etched into our minds
Pearl Harbor, Sept. 11th, and D-Day, and more
You've done well with this short form
Excellent ironic title
As good a poem as can be written
in eight syllables
Perfect presentation
Well done
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 03-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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Thank you for your kind words and nice rating. Good .luck in your own writing
Comment from kiwisteveh
Not easy to get a three-way rhyme that works as well as this.
You have used the trick of writing on a story that everyone already knows to get around the limitations of only having 8 syllables to work with - good thinking. I also like the irony of your pleasant sounding title, which is dispelled by your words and even before that by the sombre picture.
This should fare well in the contest, but with this form it's a bit of a lottery, so good luck.
Steve
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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Not easy to get a three-way rhyme that works as well as this.
You have used the trick of writing on a story that everyone already knows to get around the limitations of only having 8 syllables to work with - good thinking. I also like the irony of your pleasant sounding title, which is dispelled by your words and even before that by the sombre picture.
This should fare well in the contest, but with this form it's a bit of a lottery, so good luck.
Steve
Comment Written 03-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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Glad you appreciated the poem. Thank you for the rating and good luck in your own writing.
Comment from robyn corum
As much as we see or hear about it, these many years later - none of us can imagine what it must have been like to BE there. Only those brave fighting men - young boys, really -- can know what that dreadful place was like. A great entry for the contest. Good luck!
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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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As much as we see or hear about it, these many years later - none of us can imagine what it must have been like to BE there. Only those brave fighting men - young boys, really -- can know what that dreadful place was like. A great entry for the contest. Good luck!
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Comment Written 03-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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Your appreciative words and fine rating are most welcome. Good luck in your own writing efforts.
Comment from RodG
Boy, have you perfectly paired picture & poem.
You have graphically defined the essence of that tragic day in lines 1-2.
The last day says it all so succinctly, reminding us what we need to do June 6.
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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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Boy, have you perfectly paired picture & poem.
You have graphically defined the essence of that tragic day in lines 1-2.
The last day says it all so succinctly, reminding us what we need to do June 6.
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Comment Written 03-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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Very glad you appreciate my effort. Thank you for the nice rating ... and thank you for your understanding of
that amazing historical day.