Comment from Pantygynt

Exceptional

A fine piece of free verse narrative, full of praise for a fine animal and devoid of false sentimentality. I was particularly impressed with the way the death of this animal was handled. The significance of the penultimate stanza is pointed up by the uniquely short lines that begin and end the stanza.

You paint life in the wilderness how it is, how it has to be.

 Comment Written 22-May-2016

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reply by the author on 22-May-2016

Well thank-you very much for your review and comments, much appreciated. There are times that when I write I don't think about the form or anything other than the words that go into the verse, don't know if this is good or bad or otherwise.
Cheers.
Kev.

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi there,

This is a good solid piece.
The key is in the descriptiveness of the work, especially in the opening verse. The rhythm works well to.

GMG

 Comment Written 22-May-2016

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reply by the author on 22-May-2016

Thanks so much for your review.
Cheers.
Kev

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Exceptional

Bravo! Sad but beautiful tale of a special horse. He met a tragic end, but his life was full and, I imagine, happy for a horse that loved his work and did it well.

I had a horse once, myself. So did my daughter. Wonderful animals, if you get a good one. I assume you are a good trainer. Sounds like you live in a wonderful place, too. :)

 Comment Written 22-May-2016

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reply by the author on 22-May-2016

Thank-you Phyllis for your review and comments, much appreciated.
My days of training are behind me now and the scars of damage to my body from the some times arduous work keeps my life a bit tempered, so I travel with my ute and van around this great land, capturing what I feel and see with pen and camera.
Cheers.
Kev

Comment from William Ross

Excellent

A wonderful write on your horse frosty, great rhyming, rhythm a wonderful story in a poem, I'm sorry he had to be put down. Thanks for the share and have a good day

 Comment Written 22-May-2016

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reply by the author on 22-May-2016

Thanks William, a bloody good friend and mate gone before his time.
Cheers.
Kev

Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your poem. To me, I found it to be a wonderful tribute poem like an ode to your horse. Well thought out and nicely written. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes. Nice memories. Great storytelling skills. God bless you always. Peace :)

 Comment Written 14-May-2016

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reply by the author on 20-May-2016

Thanks very much for your review, much appreciated. Cheers Kev

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

Horses are brave and soft hearted animals. Sorry about Frosty's misfortune. Sometimes bad things just happen to good people and animals.

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 Comment Written 05-May-2016

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reply by the author on 05-May-2016

Thanks Sandra, need to polish it up a bit but thanks for your review. Cheers, Kev

Comment from Briergate

Needs Improvement

This is such a lovely story being told, and yet the language lets it down from time to time. For example, a missed apostrophe for 'Frosty' on the last line. It feels as if there is a gem here, and with some polishing it will shine. And, who is 'Dusty'? did the names get muddled up?

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 Comment Written 05-May-2016

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reply by the author on 05-May-2016

Yea have to check it out and polish it up a bit, thanks for the review and comments. Cheers, Kev