Little Poems
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Comment from foxangie123
Such another great picture and write to go along with. You are amazing you are and so artistic in many, many, ways. Thank you for that.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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Such another great picture and write to go along with. You are amazing you are and so artistic in many, many, ways. Thank you for that.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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Thank you foxangie. I appreciate the compliment.
Comment from Ricky1024
vegan mr. Santa this is Ricky 1024 if you don't remember me from last time remember me calling you mr. Santa and you said you did actually do that once but I am mr. Santa your other name is too hard to pronounce for me I thoroughly enjoyed your peace about the tree as I went today on my bicycle to my friend Joe for breakfast I noticed these they look like pistachios on the ground and he actually said they are the cons of a silver oak their little bit bigger than pistachios and you could see that they were starting to roof where the where the supposed pistachio meet with the ground and I said that is so sweet a little tiny silver oak tree we have Red Oaks we have been told and we have those folks also so the Silver Oaks I don't know I have to wait to see the tree and leaf Village and see if I like it maybe this overly looking leaves you might know since you wrote about this oak tree and I do have to fight with in my house couple big pieces in the center of a table that weigh about 50 pounds for each piece or two of us is Mother Nature's Miracles like Italian term would Tombstone and how do you tell turn coal into diamonds you know amazing how the Lord works in mysterious ways and I say these things in the name of Jesus the Christ amen thank you
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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vegan mr. Santa this is Ricky 1024 if you don't remember me from last time remember me calling you mr. Santa and you said you did actually do that once but I am mr. Santa your other name is too hard to pronounce for me I thoroughly enjoyed your peace about the tree as I went today on my bicycle to my friend Joe for breakfast I noticed these they look like pistachios on the ground and he actually said they are the cons of a silver oak their little bit bigger than pistachios and you could see that they were starting to roof where the where the supposed pistachio meet with the ground and I said that is so sweet a little tiny silver oak tree we have Red Oaks we have been told and we have those folks also so the Silver Oaks I don't know I have to wait to see the tree and leaf Village and see if I like it maybe this overly looking leaves you might know since you wrote about this oak tree and I do have to fight with in my house couple big pieces in the center of a table that weigh about 50 pounds for each piece or two of us is Mother Nature's Miracles like Italian term would Tombstone and how do you tell turn coal into diamonds you know amazing how the Lord works in mysterious ways and I say these things in the name of Jesus the Christ amen thank you
Comment Written 22-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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Thank you very much Ricky. Yup, I do remember you, indeed. These are red oaks.
Comment from Pantygynt
I think you have absolutely created a new and valid sonnet form here. It has everything that a good sonnet should have and the volta is created by changing one word "I" to "So" then into the imperative that changes the whole POP. Very subtle. This is definitely worth a six.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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I think you have absolutely created a new and valid sonnet form here. It has everything that a good sonnet should have and the volta is created by changing one word "I" to "So" then into the imperative that changes the whole POP. Very subtle. This is definitely worth a six.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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Thank you Pantygynt. I am very pleased and surprised with that assessment.
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Petrarch, Shakespeare, Melton etc al. Surely you'ld give them a six for their inventions so why not Tom?
Comment from I am Cat
"So now I come to you...
with Oaken arms...
hoping you'll see
what you love means to me
oaken arms..."
like that? ;)
my sister used to sing... 'broken arms' instead of 'open arms'... that was good too.
just being silly.
This is a lovely form, Tom... I like it. I'm taking Ray's sonnets 101 class right now... we're currently writing Spenserean Sonnets (I much prefer yours, by the way) lol ;)
and of course, iambic tetrameter is much preferred by me, than pentameter. ;)
we've been through shakesperean, petrarchan, and now spensearean. ;)
we should study this one as well... are there no other rules than the rhyme scheme and meter? no voltas? no theme development? (even better!) ;)
lol
well done, I enjoyed it.
Cat
(great photo as well, Tom)
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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"So now I come to you...
with Oaken arms...
hoping you'll see
what you love means to me
oaken arms..."
like that? ;)
my sister used to sing... 'broken arms' instead of 'open arms'... that was good too.
just being silly.
This is a lovely form, Tom... I like it. I'm taking Ray's sonnets 101 class right now... we're currently writing Spenserean Sonnets (I much prefer yours, by the way) lol ;)
and of course, iambic tetrameter is much preferred by me, than pentameter. ;)
we've been through shakesperean, petrarchan, and now spensearean. ;)
we should study this one as well... are there no other rules than the rhyme scheme and meter? no voltas? no theme development? (even better!) ;)
lol
well done, I enjoyed it.
Cat
(great photo as well, Tom)
Comment Written 22-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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That Volta is required. Mine was subtle, yet still there. My theme was they are there, they aren't ugly, but beautiful., don't ignore them, appreciate them.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A great sonnet and the triple rhyme does have a great effect on the feeling and flow of the poem. The tree frames the world with their oaken arms.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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A great sonnet and the triple rhyme does have a great effect on the feeling and flow of the poem. The tree frames the world with their oaken arms.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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Thank you Sandra. Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from LIJ Red
A poetic style planned and executed accordingly. Firm rhymes and
meter, and considerable imagery described in the words. Excellent.
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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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A poetic style planned and executed accordingly. Firm rhymes and
meter, and considerable imagery described in the words. Excellent.
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Comment Written 22-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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Thank you Lij Red.
Comment from brenda bickers
Hi TREISCHEL
This poem is so pretty. I love trees and the more gnarly they are the better.
You have chosen a different take on the normal sonnet and this makes an interesting read.
Thank you for explaining the format requirements.
Brenda
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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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Hi TREISCHEL
This poem is so pretty. I love trees and the more gnarly they are the better.
You have chosen a different take on the normal sonnet and this makes an interesting read.
Thank you for explaining the format requirements.
Brenda
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Comment Written 22-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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Thank you very much Brenda. Yes, the more gnarly the better. Glad you had an enjoyable read.
