Consequences
Actions have consequences41 total reviews
Comment from LisaD123
This is beautifully written and the way that you have broken up the fourteen lines gives added resonance to the ideas presented. The metre and rhyme are accurately captured and at no time does either of these feel forced. The first two stanzas are full of the sadness that we so often feel as we are batter and bruised by life; yet the mood is lifted at the end and the optimistic final couplet reminds us that there is always hope. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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This is beautifully written and the way that you have broken up the fourteen lines gives added resonance to the ideas presented. The metre and rhyme are accurately captured and at no time does either of these feel forced. The first two stanzas are full of the sadness that we so often feel as we are batter and bruised by life; yet the mood is lifted at the end and the optimistic final couplet reminds us that there is always hope. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Thank you Lisa for your kind and thoughtful review.
Blessings
Comment from LIJ Red
I believe you have in fact written a sonnet that meets the requirements of the prompt, fourteen lines of iambic pentameter with a volta in place. Excellent.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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I believe you have in fact written a sonnet that meets the requirements of the prompt, fourteen lines of iambic pentameter with a volta in place. Excellent.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review.
Blessings
Comment from lindafisher
This is beautifully written. The rhyme does not falter and the rhythm takes no effort as it flows so smoothly. It is a rather sad tale of the consequences of past actions.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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This is beautifully written. The rhyme does not falter and the rhythm takes no effort as it flows so smoothly. It is a rather sad tale of the consequences of past actions.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Thank you Linda for your kind and thoughtful review.
Blessings
Comment from robyn corum
Yet, life's not over till I've breathed my last
Reflecting shameful sins I still recall
There's time for introspection unsurpassed
To pray for peace and mercy meant for all.
A lovely sonnet with a fine sentiment! I wish you much luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Yet, life's not over till I've breathed my last
Reflecting shameful sins I still recall
There's time for introspection unsurpassed
To pray for peace and mercy meant for all.
A lovely sonnet with a fine sentiment! I wish you much luck in the contest!
Comment Written 17-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Thank you robyn for your kind and thoughtful review.
Blessings
Comment from Amy Greta
You created such a wonderful sonnet with all the structure and rhyming pattern seamlessly executed.
The first stanza introducing the sad and broken heart, unforgiven sin, which is further explored in stanza two.
"Yet"...the turn-around beginning stanza three.
There is still time to reconcile via prayer.
Finally, the release of sin...into the light...peace on His wings of forgiveness...glorious!
Amy
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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You created such a wonderful sonnet with all the structure and rhyming pattern seamlessly executed.
The first stanza introducing the sad and broken heart, unforgiven sin, which is further explored in stanza two.
"Yet"...the turn-around beginning stanza three.
There is still time to reconcile via prayer.
Finally, the release of sin...into the light...peace on His wings of forgiveness...glorious!
Amy
Comment Written 17-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Thank you Amy for your kind and thoughtful review.
Blessings
Comment from foxangie123
Love your artist you picked. I think it is important foe people to realize that consequences come that are good as well. They aren't all bad. Consequently are the result of. Not all bad. A sweet new baby is a good consequence of breeding. Thanks. Good.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Love your artist you picked. I think it is important foe people to realize that consequences come that are good as well. They aren't all bad. Consequently are the result of. Not all bad. A sweet new baby is a good consequence of breeding. Thanks. Good.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Thank you for your kind and very thoughtful review. Your are right, there are many happy consequences.
Blessings
Comment from MacMhuirich
Wonderful writing, a nicely crafted sonnet for the contest. Good form and wording and good flow. Our God is a merciful and forgiving God - take flight indeed. Best wishes for the contest.
Bless you
John
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Wonderful writing, a nicely crafted sonnet for the contest. Good form and wording and good flow. Our God is a merciful and forgiving God - take flight indeed. Best wishes for the contest.
Bless you
John
Comment Written 17-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Thank you John for your kind and thoughtful review.
Blessings
Comment from Leineco
This is a strong contender in the contest! The meter is on point and the
rhyme scheme is well met. :-)
The turn at the third stanza introduces the hope that relief can still be found - introspection and prayers for all are the path that will free her.
The final couplet nicely summarizes the positive effect this change will accomplish.
Nicely done :-)
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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This is a strong contender in the contest! The meter is on point and the
rhyme scheme is well met. :-)
The turn at the third stanza introduces the hope that relief can still be found - introspection and prayers for all are the path that will free her.
The final couplet nicely summarizes the positive effect this change will accomplish.
Nicely done :-)
Comment Written 17-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review.
Blessings
Comment from flylikeaneagle
When broken vessels are put back together, there still are cracks. These cracks will shine the light when a candle is placed inside. Jesus came to set us free from sin so you are already forgiven. I like the last two lines with the brokenness released into the light and take flight. Yes, keep flying. Beautiful poem! The Lord delights in you! flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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When broken vessels are put back together, there still are cracks. These cracks will shine the light when a candle is placed inside. Jesus came to set us free from sin so you are already forgiven. I like the last two lines with the brokenness released into the light and take flight. Yes, keep flying. Beautiful poem! The Lord delights in you! flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 16-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review. I loved your analogy of the cracked vessel. Very nice and comforting.
Blessings
Comment from Authorsue
A moving sonnet. I think we all feel that way sometime.
I couldn't find anything I would change. And that's a feat in itself. (smile) I'm a picky critic.
Keep writing,
Authorsue
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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A moving sonnet. I think we all feel that way sometime.
I couldn't find anything I would change. And that's a feat in itself. (smile) I'm a picky critic.
Keep writing,
Authorsue
Comment Written 16-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Thank you Authorsue for your kind and thoughtful review. I'm pleased that you didn't find a flaw. I like a picky critic. It makes us better. :))
Blessings
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Blessings to you, too.
