Comment from nancyrabbrose

Excellent

This is a lovely piece, very true and helpful to one who may be feeling lost, out of True Perspective, etc.
Well done.
I find nothing to correct.
The illustration you chose is excellent and fits my feelings, that is, we are God's "children". I do believe that it is an interdependent relationship and that God is in me and all around me. Sorry, but I had to add my current belief. If I didn't believe that God is within me, today, when my sweetheart might be dying of cancer, I would be lost. But I have the strength that Jesus, through God, his father, gave us the great example.

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2016

Thank you for the kind words about the writing. I appreciate you sharing your insights and testimony about your beliefs. God bless.

Comment from nancyjam

Exceptional

This is so well done. You managed to do a cleave in
Acrostic form - that seems impossible to me. But you
accomplished it while offering beautiful advice.
You also added rhyme. wow.
good luck in the contest. This should do well.
Nancy

 Comment Written 29-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2016

Hi Nancy,
Thank you for the generous six stars and your analysis of the poem. I appreciate the good luck wishes, too.
Debi

Comment from Writingfundimension

Exceptional

Great contest entry, Debi. You really met the challenge of this complex poetic form. The poem is powerful no matter what direction its read. Especially so here, for me:

'Lift your voice for Heaven hears.....Deliverance has won'

Good luck in the contest, my friend.

:) Bev

 Comment Written 29-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2016

Hi Bev,
I appreciate your continued support. Thank you for pointing out the line you found most powerful. I appreciate the good luck wishes, too. Thank you!
Debi

reply by Writingfundimension on 03-Mar-2016

Hi, Debi. You're welcome. I discovered this is a member contest, so you got my vote.

:) Bev

reply by the author on 03-Mar-2016

Thank you. I appreciate it. :)

Comment from lindafisher

Exceptional

This poem has everything. The cleave poem stands alone but you have made it into an acrostic and it rhymes. This has got to be a winner. Definitely a six star piece. Regards Linda

 Comment Written 29-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2016

Hi Linda,
Thank you for the wonderful six stars! I appreciate the analysis of the form and the writing. Thank you for the kind thoughts about the writing.
Debi

Comment from Mastery

Exceptional

Hi, debi. what I like about your acrostic is thge lines don't appear or read like they are "forced" in order to accomodate the first letter of each line. Looks like a real winner to me. Good luck in the contest, my friend. Bob

 Comment Written 29-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2016

Hi Bob,
Thank you for the kind comments about the writing. I appreciate you mentioning that the lines seem to flow well. Thank you for the good luck wishes.
Debi

Comment from foxangie123

Excellent

You rocked this one out and made it your own. That is such an amazing picture. The Lord is cut out when you look at it on the leveling/review page. I looooovvvvvee this truly. Exceptional and I wish I wasn't out of sixes to give.

 Comment Written 29-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2016

Thank you for the virtual six star rating and the encouraging comments about the poem. I love the picture, too. Angelheart does amazing work. Love your comment, "You rocked this one..." Thank you for stopping by and offering your encouragement.

Comment from rspoet

Excellent

This is a very fine cleave poem for the contest
The two smaller acrostics are strong individually
as well as together forming one larger one
Interesting how the two phrases are identical in length
each line follows and illuminates the theme nicely
moving to the final line of deliverance
Excellent picture to match
Very well done
This should be a contender
Best wishes in the contest

 Comment Written 29-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2016

Thank you for the kind comments about the writing and about the poem being a contender in the contest. I appreciate your analysis of the form as well.

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Nice artwork.
-I like how you added the acrostic as the fourth element to the cleave.
-I like this poem very much.
-No matter which way you read it, only the left or the right or both together, it is good.
-I think reading it together works very well.
-Very good messages written with good imagery:
* "Turn your crimson white and true"
* "In His hands, all hearts renew"

 Comment Written 29-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2016

Thank you for pointing out the parts you like, especially, "Turn your crimson white and true." I liked that line but wondered about including it. I appreciate the validation. I appreciate your thoughts on the form and how it works. Thank you.

reply by Pam (respa) on 03-Mar-2016

You are welcome. I guess it goes to show that your instinct is right--it was a very good line. Thanks for the very positive reply.

Comment from dmt1967

Excellent

This is a very clever poem. I liked the poem being side by side as well and the spelt out words. This is a very entertaining poem and very well written. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 29-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2016

Thank you for the comments about poem. I am pleased you found it clever and entertaining. Thank you for the good luck wishes.

Comment from Bill O'Bier

Excellent

I very much enjoyed your poem. The language and rhymes worked well. The artwork work was great for the theme of the poem.

Good luck in the contest.
Thanks so much for sharing
Bill

 Comment Written 29-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2016

Hi Bill,
I am pleased you enjoyed the poem. Thank you for mentioning the rhymes and language. I love the artwork, too. Thank you for the good luck wishes.
Debi