When Blood Collides
Viewing comments for Chapter 67 "Sisters Out of Sync, Part I"A family's love is tested.
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Comment from mermaids
I very much enjoyed reading this post, the differences between you and your sister are interesting. She seems like she was a girly girl yet she was very intelligent. I am looking forward to your next post.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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I very much enjoyed reading this post, the differences between you and your sister are interesting. She seems like she was a girly girl yet she was very intelligent. I am looking forward to your next post.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Girly girl. I think that fits. For all her intellect, she loved those romantic harlequin novels. Also, the idea of being a beautician appealed to her.
Comment from Glasstruth
Sounds like a pleasant rivalry. Not much jealousy. Funny, how a year and a half can make such a difference. Two sisters quite different, but then it seems the both of you adjusted and accepted each other for who you were. This chapter clearly examines different personalities in an interesting way. Well crafted. Les
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Sounds like a pleasant rivalry. Not much jealousy. Funny, how a year and a half can make such a difference. Two sisters quite different, but then it seems the both of you adjusted and accepted each other for who you were. This chapter clearly examines different personalities in an interesting way. Well crafted. Les
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Thanks, Les. It's amazing how siblings can be so different. Yet, we had enough in common--maybe just the same blood is enough to bond two people.
Comment from Leen1
Yes, this chapter does continue to hold my interest. Your narrative gives the reader the information needed to understand the circumstances surrounding the sister's rival. One thing I must admit that puzzled me was the fact regarding the college choices. I understand that with your sister's grades she would perhaps get a scholarship but the statement of "free" college even back in the day confuses me. What "free" state college?
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Yes, this chapter does continue to hold my interest. Your narrative gives the reader the information needed to understand the circumstances surrounding the sister's rival. One thing I must admit that puzzled me was the fact regarding the college choices. I understand that with your sister's grades she would perhaps get a scholarship but the statement of "free" college even back in the day confuses me. What "free" state college?
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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In some states you don't have to pay tuition if you've lived there for a long time. But don't quote me on that. Room and Board and textbooks, even used ones, cost though. My parents sold their dream house and bought a less expensive one so that we could go to college. Talk about sacrifice!
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
I really enjoyed this narrative of your life with your younger sister. Sometimes you need dialogue. Sometimes you don't. This is fine just as it is. :)
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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I really enjoyed this narrative of your life with your younger sister. Sometimes you need dialogue. Sometimes you don't. This is fine just as it is. :)
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Your opinion means a lot to me, Phyllis. Thanks a lot. Appreciate the exceptional rating more than you know. :-)
Comment from sibhus
Actually I thought it was very interesting. I'm always curious about how people lived during that time period. It maybe left over from when I was a kid and the grandparents use to gather us around and talk about the good ole days. I think that's why the movies today suck, because they don't really have a story, they are nothing but a series of explosions followed by tits then some more explosions. Good stuff there, Spitfire.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Actually I thought it was very interesting. I'm always curious about how people lived during that time period. It maybe left over from when I was a kid and the grandparents use to gather us around and talk about the good ole days. I think that's why the movies today suck, because they don't really have a story, they are nothing but a series of explosions followed by tits then some more explosions. Good stuff there, Spitfire.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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LOL. I do love your analysis of the movies today. Back in the fifties, musicals were big as well as happy endings.
However, I recently rented two flicks with unexpected endings--therefore the best. Only verbal explosions in each one and not with the limited cuss vocabulary. Try Southern Man with Mark Withers. And the other is Scenic Route. Not familiar with the actors. Both are psychological thrillers, my favorite genre.
Glad you enjoyed this chapter, husky.
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I will check those out, because I finally saw Rudderless, which you recommended, and it was a really good movie.
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Let me know what you think about the ending of Scenic Route. I went on the net to make sure I got it. Glad you liked Rudderless. Great music in it for one thing.
Comment from Eigle Rull
I remember at 18 years of age I had a job and wasted my money all the time. My 9 year old sister always had her allowance saved up. I'd borrow from her giving her interest of $10 each loan. She made a bundle off me.
This was a chapter that really interested me. The growing up of two sisters, side by side. I had no problem enjoying it, even without dialog. It was exciting to hear the differences in the two girls. I enjoyed reading this chapter. It was great. Best wishes to you, my friend.
Always with respect. Have a great Thanksgiving.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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I remember at 18 years of age I had a job and wasted my money all the time. My 9 year old sister always had her allowance saved up. I'd borrow from her giving her interest of $10 each loan. She made a bundle off me.
This was a chapter that really interested me. The growing up of two sisters, side by side. I had no problem enjoying it, even without dialog. It was exciting to hear the differences in the two girls. I enjoyed reading this chapter. It was great. Best wishes to you, my friend.
Always with respect. Have a great Thanksgiving.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Appreciate your telling me what you liked about this chapter. Your sister sounds like a loan shark! LOL
Happy Turkey Day to you too.
Comment from judiverse
First of all, congratulations on winning the "Visit to the Dentist" contest. Great work, and I certainly wouldn't want to visit the establishment you described. It seems that Barb put off seeking medical care until it was too late. There were certainly warning signs. I like your memories of what is was like for you and your sister growing up together, with Barb grabbing the spotlight. You highlight your differences. My sister and I were totally different, but that didn't affect us, because she was 10 years younger, and things had changed considerably by the time she was a teenager. Great insights into family relationships in this. judi
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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First of all, congratulations on winning the "Visit to the Dentist" contest. Great work, and I certainly wouldn't want to visit the establishment you described. It seems that Barb put off seeking medical care until it was too late. There were certainly warning signs. I like your memories of what is was like for you and your sister growing up together, with Barb grabbing the spotlight. You highlight your differences. My sister and I were totally different, but that didn't affect us, because she was 10 years younger, and things had changed considerably by the time she was a teenager. Great insights into family relationships in this. judi
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Our half-sister, Anne, was ten years older and married at nineteen. So she was out of the picture too. Barb did make a name for herself in the Academic world on the university level. Not my thing at all. What interested her bored me and vice versa. Still, we have found common ground in some things.
I was thrilled to finally win. Entrants were not allowed to vote at all which made it doubly good. I remember you had a spot in it too.
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Great work with your book. Congratulations again on your win, but I wouldn't want to visit a dentist like the one you wrote about. judi
Comment from ProSongwriter
Hi Shari ...
I can empathize with your nephew's announcement about his mother. I was diagnosed with stage 3 cancer about 3 weeks ago. Kind of a chilling moment.
As always, your straight-forward style of writing is so easy for me to read. So, the scourge of sister rivalry pops up? And jealousy is a bitter emotion. Looking forward to see how you handle it.
Best to you, my friend. Hugs ...
Alan
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Hi Shari ...
I can empathize with your nephew's announcement about his mother. I was diagnosed with stage 3 cancer about 3 weeks ago. Kind of a chilling moment.
As always, your straight-forward style of writing is so easy for me to read. So, the scourge of sister rivalry pops up? And jealousy is a bitter emotion. Looking forward to see how you handle it.
Best to you, my friend. Hugs ...
Alan
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Kind of! That's an understatement. How are you handling it now? Are you going through treatment? You may have told me this before. My memory is not as good as it should be.
Ever since you moved, your luck hasn't been good. Maybe your new house is all wrong for you. What is the number? What was your old house number? I'll check it out with what I learned from numerology.
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Hi Shari ...
I pretty much take things in stride ... typically don't overreact. And that's how I'm handling this. Get all bent out of shape doesn't accomplish anything ... usually makes things worse for all concerned.
Old house number was 109. This one is 1209.
I had surgery about a week ago to remove the tumor. I start chemo in January for 6 months.
Just part of what it takes to stay alive!
Best to you, my sweet friend.
Alan
Comment from CobiDawn
I enjoyed reading a continuationof your story and am looking forward to reading more. I'm sorry for your heartache. I do love your story telling and all the details you put into it. There is nothing I would change in the writing of this story. the only recommendation i would give to you would be to reread this story because you have some type-o's and mispelled words. Wishing you the best.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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I enjoyed reading a continuationof your story and am looking forward to reading more. I'm sorry for your heartache. I do love your story telling and all the details you put into it. There is nothing I would change in the writing of this story. the only recommendation i would give to you would be to reread this story because you have some type-o's and mispelled words. Wishing you the best.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
Thanks, Cobi. I think I caught them all. My bad for not using spell check even if it did miss one error.
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You're welcome. Let me know if you need anything.
Comment from barkingdog
My mom sewed my clothes too and I think I had a jumper like the ones in your picture. I didn't mind homemade clothes. I liked picking out the patterns and fabric, But when I think back, I think it put me in a different social group from all the girls who wore department store fashions.
I wasn't the least bit bored reading this chapter. Everything shouldn't have to be about dialogue when you're writing a book. A chapter to fill in background, like this one does, is meant to move the book forward. People should review it that way and not as a short story which would need dialogue.
Did you ever figure out why Barbara was jealous of your relationship with with your parents? I wonder when it started?
But the two of you were very different right from the start. Look at how you kept your side of he room vs hers and you save money while she spent it right away.
Great chapter.
:) e
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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My mom sewed my clothes too and I think I had a jumper like the ones in your picture. I didn't mind homemade clothes. I liked picking out the patterns and fabric, But when I think back, I think it put me in a different social group from all the girls who wore department store fashions.
I wasn't the least bit bored reading this chapter. Everything shouldn't have to be about dialogue when you're writing a book. A chapter to fill in background, like this one does, is meant to move the book forward. People should review it that way and not as a short story which would need dialogue.
Did you ever figure out why Barbara was jealous of your relationship with with your parents? I wonder when it started?
But the two of you were very different right from the start. Look at how you kept your side of he room vs hers and you save money while she spent it right away.
Great chapter.
:) e
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Thanks for the feedback. I value your opinion. I never thought of the clothes as putting us in a different social bracket, but you're right! More later on about when it started. Something that happened when she barely a toddler, but the memory stayed with her or else Mom told her. Thanks so much for the six.
Shari xx
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I figured it was when you were both very young. We tend to house those experiences for ever and the influence the rest of our lives. The rational we hold onto can be really stupid. I guess that's what therapy is for. lol
