THE TRINING Book Three
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "The Almighty Master Baits Doctrex"JOURNEY INTO REDEMPTION
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Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Jay
_ HUH!! Killer last line for a hook!
_ Sooooo glad to see -MY- 'Doctrex' back. (*<*)
_ You always have to keep this series going----you know that, don't you?
_ This is a perfect time to bring in 'Truly Nolan' and exterminate good ole boy Glnot! Just sayin'.
_ OBSERVATION:
<< The way I read this---Glnot is addressing Doctrex with the...(?)
>> If that's the case, you need to put it on a separate line for Glont's reaction through Doctrex's eyes.
<< Below is my interpretation---is it incorrect?
_ "Doctrex?" ((Glnot speaking))
I glanced up in time to see him pull his eyes away from the circles I made and turn his puzzled gaze on me. ((Doctrex reaction))
"I want you to know I have no reason to tell you anything about Zarbs." ((Back to Glnot?))
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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Hi, Jay
_ HUH!! Killer last line for a hook!
_ Sooooo glad to see -MY- 'Doctrex' back. (*<*)
_ You always have to keep this series going----you know that, don't you?
_ This is a perfect time to bring in 'Truly Nolan' and exterminate good ole boy Glnot! Just sayin'.
_ OBSERVATION:
<< The way I read this---Glnot is addressing Doctrex with the...(?)
>> If that's the case, you need to put it on a separate line for Glont's reaction through Doctrex's eyes.
<< Below is my interpretation---is it incorrect?
_ "Doctrex?" ((Glnot speaking))
I glanced up in time to see him pull his eyes away from the circles I made and turn his puzzled gaze on me. ((Doctrex reaction))
"I want you to know I have no reason to tell you anything about Zarbs." ((Back to Glnot?))
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 20-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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I've done that before. Hit six when I meant a four. LOL, my goodness Jax. Thank you so much! I'll have to take a look at your concerns with this. It may take me a time just to find the references. In the meantime, bless you for the lovely chartreuse cross!
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Damn! I don't know how I did that! I'm really sorry about giving you a '4' when I meant to give you 'sixer!'(*<*)
Comment from Writeronboard
I read this, studying your dialogues and just the overall format of the story. If I see most of your work it will also help me when writing myself.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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I read this, studying your dialogues and just the overall format of the story. If I see most of your work it will also help me when writing myself.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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Thank you so much, Sonya, for the lovely 6 star rating. I hope you continue to enjoy reading my posts.
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Just posted my next chapter. I had time to figure out how I wanted the story to go over the weekend. This chapter is my favorite so far.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
So the Almighty "Master baits" Doctrex. Ha - hum!!
Great descriptions of the almighty master - he's one dangerous man. Now he's insulted Doctrex, and is about to tell him all.
He seemed to consider me, my boots, my trousers, my shirt. - I only question this because, as I understood it, they are sat at a table - one on each side and facing each other - sooooo - how could he see the trousers and boots?
Great chapter, Jay.
Margaret
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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So the Almighty "Master baits" Doctrex. Ha - hum!!
Great descriptions of the almighty master - he's one dangerous man. Now he's insulted Doctrex, and is about to tell him all.
He seemed to consider me, my boots, my trousers, my shirt. - I only question this because, as I understood it, they are sat at a table - one on each side and facing each other - sooooo - how could he see the trousers and boots?
Great chapter, Jay.
Margaret
Comment Written 20-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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May I say, the title was supposed to be a "joke" title. I thought it might draw a few readers. You were the only one who spotted it. I even pointed it out to others and they still didn't get it.
Picky, picky, picky ... so Rhuether's using his magic. LOL, I'll have to have him bend from the waist or something. What is it with me and tables. Remember the "Pumpkin Pulp" table incident?
Thanks for pointing it out.
Comment from boxergirl
Things are heating up again in this scene, Jay. Doctrex meets the Almighty Master and in his usual calm demeanor tries to gain info about his status and also Zarbs. Your descriptive details and dialogue are spot on as always. Gonot seems like a very devious character!
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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Things are heating up again in this scene, Jay. Doctrex meets the Almighty Master and in his usual calm demeanor tries to gain info about his status and also Zarbs. Your descriptive details and dialogue are spot on as always. Gonot seems like a very devious character!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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Thank you so much for the six star rating, Karen and your reference to the dialogue. My characters and I appreciate it.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I was expecting to end up in San Antonio when I saw you had posted but instead I get to read about Doctrex. I don't understand how you can run two or more novels at once. I can't. Anyway, this is a very good post and I believe every person matters.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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I was expecting to end up in San Antonio when I saw you had posted but instead I get to read about Doctrex. I don't understand how you can run two or more novels at once. I can't. Anyway, this is a very good post and I believe every person matters.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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Just about everything else I wrote was to fill in the gaps until I could get The Trining back up and running. Losing all those chapters just about did me in. I'm happy you're back enjoying this.
Comment from justafan
Somehow I have missed the beginning of this. I know now, it was that stupid tree that fell on the shop and it took forever to clear. Now, where was I?
This is very intense, Jay. I will go back and catch up, hon. It looks to be very involved so I must.
Always your biggest fan,
Missy
You are THE MAN!!! :)
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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Somehow I have missed the beginning of this. I know now, it was that stupid tree that fell on the shop and it took forever to clear. Now, where was I?
This is very intense, Jay. I will go back and catch up, hon. It looks to be very involved so I must.
Always your biggest fan,
Missy
You are THE MAN!!! :)
Comment Written 20-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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Thank you so much, Missy. Good to have you back and reading this. Watch out. You get started reading the past chapters and you may just be awarding some with ATB. I think I have 2 or 3 with 25 reviews, needing just one more for the coveted All Time Best. Seems I remember your talking about a tree that fell on your shop. Anyway, I always consider it an honor to have to read my posts.
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I gotcha hon!! My latest needs One for that as well! Mmm
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I gotcha hon!! My latest needs One for that as well! Mmm
Comment from Joy Graham
I'm jumping in cold again. This is the first I've seen of this story. It is well written as far as I can see. No spag to report to you :) This story is easy to read and get hooked on. I couldn't help thinking it was a Dr. Who episode. My fault because I've been binge watching Dr. Who and I see it everywhere lol! Binge watching will do that to a person. Looking forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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I'm jumping in cold again. This is the first I've seen of this story. It is well written as far as I can see. No spag to report to you :) This story is easy to read and get hooked on. I couldn't help thinking it was a Dr. Who episode. My fault because I've been binge watching Dr. Who and I see it everywhere lol! Binge watching will do that to a person. Looking forward to reading more.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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I always love it when I have a new reader jump on the wagon. Thank you so much, Joy.
Comment from Sasha
My goodness, I certainly was not expecting that. I am sure Doctrex wasn't either. I enjoyed you usual excellent dialogue, detailed and fascinating descriptions. I especially liked your descriptions of the Almighty Master's facial features. Your title of this chapter gave me a good chuckle, was that intended?
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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My goodness, I certainly was not expecting that. I am sure Doctrex wasn't either. I enjoyed you usual excellent dialogue, detailed and fascinating descriptions. I especially liked your descriptions of the Almighty Master's facial features. Your title of this chapter gave me a good chuckle, was that intended?
Comment Written 20-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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Hahahaha! YES! It was intended. Only you and Margaret Snowdon, picked up on it. I tried and tried and couldn't come up with a new chapter name when that hit me. I thought, "Why not!" It may draw in a few new readers. You made my day, Sasha (Yeah, that's easier... Sasha!
Comment from royowen
So, the almighty master himself has appeared at last, he seems lifelike but must be extremely dangerous, he murdered Pondria and also disposed of Supreme colonel Zarbs,. He's probably the cruellest man ever, it's staring to resemble the old trining episodes, it's starting to reveal where it came from, most enjoyable, Jay, well done, Blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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So, the almighty master himself has appeared at last, he seems lifelike but must be extremely dangerous, he murdered Pondria and also disposed of Supreme colonel Zarbs,. He's probably the cruellest man ever, it's staring to resemble the old trining episodes, it's starting to reveal where it came from, most enjoyable, Jay, well done, Blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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I am so glad you enjoyed this chapter, Roy. Do you know, in the over 400 pages of the entire series, the only swear word I used was "damn", and at that point was disappointed that I had to. I just took it as a challenge to write something without swear words.
Bless you, Roy.
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I'm so glad you don't embellish with swear words or gratuitous sex, and amazingly you still tell a good tale, before "lady Chatterly's lover" nobody, good stories then! Tolkien, CS Lewis etc. Didn't why should we? Well done, Jay.
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I'm so glad you don't embellish with swear words or gratuitous sex, and amazingly you still tell a good tale, before "lady Chatterly's lover" nobody, good stories then! Tolkien, CS Lewis etc. Didn't why should we? Well done, Jay.
Comment from LIJ Red
Time for a few notes from Good, Bad and Ugly, the Antagonist has appeared.
I guess he saw Zarbs's loyalty was compromised. When do we get a look at
Ax girl? Excellent storytelling.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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Time for a few notes from Good, Bad and Ugly, the Antagonist has appeared.
I guess he saw Zarbs's loyalty was compromised. When do we get a look at
Ax girl? Excellent storytelling.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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Hahaha! Ax Girl. I love it. She'll show up in a few chapters over dinner. It should be interesting. Glad you enjoyed the story.