Happy Days
Cherry picking in the fifties15 total reviews
Comment from The Mom/DarleneThomson
What a fabulous story. I love cherries. I had a Mrs. Guzman in my life too. She would say I'm from the old country our girls they eat. You, your skin and bones
you need to eat. Great writing. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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What a fabulous story. I love cherries. I had a Mrs. Guzman in my life too. She would say I'm from the old country our girls they eat. You, your skin and bones
you need to eat. Great writing. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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Thank you. Wow, Mrs. Guzman used to, tell her girls, to tell me to eat because I was too skinny.
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Those Mrs. Guzman's think everyone nds ro eat LOL.
Comment from abbasjoy
Thank you for sharing this special time in your life. So much happiness is felt around a table when food is being shared with those we love.
The fifties was a great time for family. Things have so changed, and even a meal time, the kids are busy trying to use their mobile devices, unless a parent insists for them to put it away at the dining table.
An enjoyable time about eating and those lazy, hazy days of summer.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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Thank you for sharing this special time in your life. So much happiness is felt around a table when food is being shared with those we love.
The fifties was a great time for family. Things have so changed, and even a meal time, the kids are busy trying to use their mobile devices, unless a parent insists for them to put it away at the dining table.
An enjoyable time about eating and those lazy, hazy days of summer.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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Thank you. I often wish for the fifties to return. Family doesn't seem to matter to the young people in this day and age.
Comment from RodG
I can imagine how much fun this was for you as a child as you not only ate, ate, ate, but had fun with other children. 300 words is not a lot to work with, but you have 74 words left. May I suggest adding more details to describe the setting (vague how big the orchard was or if you had to climb the trees to pick the cherries) and Mrs. Guzman. You tell us she is "jolly," but we don't see her.
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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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I can imagine how much fun this was for you as a child as you not only ate, ate, ate, but had fun with other children. 300 words is not a lot to work with, but you have 74 words left. May I suggest adding more details to describe the setting (vague how big the orchard was or if you had to climb the trees to pick the cherries) and Mrs. Guzman. You tell us she is "jolly," but we don't see her.
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Comment Written 18-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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Thank you for your kind review. I always appreciate advice.
Comment from Serendipity!
sweat (,) boy(,) did we laugh. How we enjoyed those (I wonder what happened to Mrs. Gunzan in later years.)My, this sounds like a fun, happy time of life for you. Play is so much more rewarding, in my opinion, if a person first does some good old fashioned outdoor work. Food tastes better, too! You paint such a vivid picture that I wish I could have been one of the frolicking children lol.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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sweat (,) boy(,) did we laugh. How we enjoyed those (I wonder what happened to Mrs. Gunzan in later years.)My, this sounds like a fun, happy time of life for you. Play is so much more rewarding, in my opinion, if a person first does some good old fashioned outdoor work. Food tastes better, too! You paint such a vivid picture that I wish I could have been one of the frolicking children lol.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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Thank you. They were good days. Thanks for the advice and corrections
Comment from Eigle Rull
This was a well written, fun story to read, my friend. What better way to a person's heart than through the stomach. This story was interesting and it held my attention very well I enjoyed reading it. It was excellent. Best wishes to you, my friend.
Always with respect,
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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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This was a well written, fun story to read, my friend. What better way to a person's heart than through the stomach. This story was interesting and it held my attention very well I enjoyed reading it. It was excellent. Best wishes to you, my friend.
Always with respect,
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Comment Written 18-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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Thank you. Those were good days.
