The Greatest Love
Contemplating God's love25 total reviews
Comment from boxergirl
I enjoyed your spiritual poem about the greatest love. Your rhyme and meter seem on target and a wonderful message for us all. I liked the personal touch in verse two.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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I enjoyed your spiritual poem about the greatest love. Your rhyme and meter seem on target and a wonderful message for us all. I liked the personal touch in verse two.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much. The message was on my heart. Have a good week,
Rhonda
Comment from happykat4
Your poem just reminds all how God gave His Son to die for us so we could live. I cannot imagine giving up my child. Then to know it was his plan from the start. I am so glad that you experienced your father's peacefulness. He was relieved. Then your turn to live with the one who has loved us and not given up on us. Wonderful poem.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Your poem just reminds all how God gave His Son to die for us so we could live. I cannot imagine giving up my child. Then to know it was his plan from the start. I am so glad that you experienced your father's peacefulness. He was relieved. Then your turn to live with the one who has loved us and not given up on us. Wonderful poem.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Thank you for taking time to review and leave such wonderful comments. Have a good week,
Rhonda
Comment from Nosha17
I think you are doing very well with the poetry, Rhonda. I like the idea you are writing rhyming poetry. I make it known to lots of people that I cannot stand free or blank verse, there is something missing and it is not attractive to read aloud. This has a lovely spiritual message, we all need to have faith and believe in God's love. Excellent rhyming. Couple of suggestions: Verse 3, its depths, no apostrophe s there is no possession, it is a plural. In poetry if you have too many 's it tends to sound a bit awkward. You don't need an apostrophe s in the last verse, it is perfectly fine to say morning dew. Then in the last line celestial is an adjective and cannot take an 's, it should read 'celestial seat'. Enjoyable read. Faye
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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I think you are doing very well with the poetry, Rhonda. I like the idea you are writing rhyming poetry. I make it known to lots of people that I cannot stand free or blank verse, there is something missing and it is not attractive to read aloud. This has a lovely spiritual message, we all need to have faith and believe in God's love. Excellent rhyming. Couple of suggestions: Verse 3, its depths, no apostrophe s there is no possession, it is a plural. In poetry if you have too many 's it tends to sound a bit awkward. You don't need an apostrophe s in the last verse, it is perfectly fine to say morning dew. Then in the last line celestial is an adjective and cannot take an 's, it should read 'celestial seat'. Enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 17-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Thanks so much, Faye, I will go change it! I appreciate all of your comments, and your ever present support!
Rhonda
Comment from MelB
A very nice poem, Rhonda! Good rhyme, rhythm, and flow. You're doing a great job expanding to poetry. I started the opposite and am learning prose.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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A very nice poem, Rhonda! Good rhyme, rhythm, and flow. You're doing a great job expanding to poetry. I started the opposite and am learning prose.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much, Mel, for the wonderful review!
Rhonda
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You're welcome
Comment from gamay
Hi Rhonda, This a very nice and the picture fits to the poem. "I saw it once in father's eyes,
Its love-light shone, to my surprise,
His dying breath I saw God's peace,
On wings of grace joy's sweet release". And we thankful for his love to us. Thank you for sharing, gamay
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Hi Rhonda, This a very nice and the picture fits to the poem. "I saw it once in father's eyes,
Its love-light shone, to my surprise,
His dying breath I saw God's peace,
On wings of grace joy's sweet release". And we thankful for his love to us. Thank you for sharing, gamay
Comment Written 17-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Thank you, gamay, you have given me a very sweet 6 star review, my friend. I love the comments you have left,
Rhonda
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Very well done.
Rhyme is spot on.
Flow and meter are perfect.
A nice testimonial to share with your readers.
You did very well
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Very well done.
Rhyme is spot on.
Flow and meter are perfect.
A nice testimonial to share with your readers.
You did very well
Comment Written 16-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much, Barb, for you kind and personal review,
Rhonda
Comment from poetadeu
Absolutely love the last stanza, of course
the other two lead one to the last. They are
each beautifully written. Your reference to
your father's eyes reminded me of my mother
shortly before her passing. Thank you for
sharing these great words.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Absolutely love the last stanza, of course
the other two lead one to the last. They are
each beautifully written. Your reference to
your father's eyes reminded me of my mother
shortly before her passing. Thank you for
sharing these great words.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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And thank you for your wonderful and sweet review. I was with my father when he passed, and while it was so sad, I felt his love,
Rhonda
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It was my pleasure...LOL:} Joyce
Comment from Taffspride
Such an uplifting poem which read so beautifully aloud.
Set to music it ould be a lovely hymn of praise.
I could not find any line or stanza that stood out more than another. All were equally as good.
Iechyd da
Ann
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Such an uplifting poem which read so beautifully aloud.
Set to music it ould be a lovely hymn of praise.
I could not find any line or stanza that stood out more than another. All were equally as good.
Iechyd da
Ann
Comment Written 16-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much, and what a kind comment about putting it to music! I wish I could sing...
Rhonda
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Rhonda. This is a sweetly done piece of poetry my friend. You have found your touch and have taken to this poetry caper like a duck to water. Beautiful flow and rhyming and a super message make this production an exceptional yarn. Very well done.
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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G'day Rhonda. This is a sweetly done piece of poetry my friend. You have found your touch and have taken to this poetry caper like a duck to water. Beautiful flow and rhyming and a super message make this production an exceptional yarn. Very well done.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 16-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much, Feral, for a wonderful 6 star review. Coming from you, my idol, I take this as a wonderful compliment!
Rhonda
Comment from royowen
What a marvellous poem Rhonda! The idea that sparked that sparked this revelation obviously dates back to your dad, there is nothing better than the revelation of God's grace, love, and the myriad of benefits that flow from the Father through us, because of God's grace and love, great effort, my friend, aren't you glad you saw Christ in your dad's eyes. Well done, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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What a marvellous poem Rhonda! The idea that sparked that sparked this revelation obviously dates back to your dad, there is nothing better than the revelation of God's grace, love, and the myriad of benefits that flow from the Father through us, because of God's grace and love, great effort, my friend, aren't you glad you saw Christ in your dad's eyes. Well done, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much, Roy, and yes, it was great to see God's love in his eyes. It's hard to watch a parent pass, but to feel that peace and know where he left me to go, is a great blessing. Thanks so much for your wonderful 6 star review, my friend,
Rhonda
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Most welcome, how's it gone?
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Doing well, thank you.
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