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Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Yea"poems inspired by Psalm 23
21 total reviews
Comment from Mastery
Simply beautiful and so inspirational, debi.
"Yea, frolic with the chorus of the morn,
the meadow lark, the chipmunks, and the sheep,
the rainbow formed of trees, and flowers and plants,
the shining dew drops and the passing breeze."
Bravo! Bob
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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Simply beautiful and so inspirational, debi.
"Yea, frolic with the chorus of the morn,
the meadow lark, the chipmunks, and the sheep,
the rainbow formed of trees, and flowers and plants,
the shining dew drops and the passing breeze."
Bravo! Bob
Comment Written 10-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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Hi Bob,
Thank you for the lovely review and generous stars. I am happy you found the poem inspirational. Thank you for pointing out the stanza you liked.
I see you have another chapter out. I will drop by to read it soon. I don't read your work or Dean's late at night because then I can't sleep. I am sure it is another great chapter.
Debi
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Awww. I'm sorry. Not my intent to scare you with violence...believe me, deb. Bob :)
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It's actually a compliment that your writing creates vivid images and my mind cannot rest. Not necessarily scary, sometimes I try to figure out what might be coming next and cannot get to sleep.
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LOL...sorry but grateful...:) Bob
Comment from BeasPeas
Your entire well written and described poem to me confirms the celebration of the Lord's gifts to us right down to the smallest creature. God must have thought that all of them carried equal weight to be considered worthy of his creation.
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Your entire well written and described poem to me confirms the celebration of the Lord's gifts to us right down to the smallest creature. God must have thought that all of them carried equal weight to be considered worthy of his creation.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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Hi BeasPeas,
Thank you for you insights on the theme and the encouraging comments about the writing. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review.
Debi
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi debi - this is a lovely descriptive blank verse with good iambic pentameter maintained throughout. No end rhymes, but line 2 of your stanza 4 shows an internal rhyme displays/array. Otherwise very well written celebration to the Lord for all the gifts of nature. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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Hi debi - this is a lovely descriptive blank verse with good iambic pentameter maintained throughout. No end rhymes, but line 2 of your stanza 4 shows an internal rhyme displays/array. Otherwise very well written celebration to the Lord for all the gifts of nature. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 10-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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Hi Dorothy,
Thank you for the wonderful stars and the encouraging comments. I appreciate you catching the internal rhyme so I could fix it. This is my first blank verse and I had a hard time not making end rhymes so I didn't even notice the internal one. Thank you so much.
Debi
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Yes, blank verse is not as easy as people think - avoiding internal and end rhymes is tricky - you did well. Dx
Comment from krys123
Debi;
-this writing seems to me the requirements of a blank verse home whereas I found no rhyming internally or externally and the rhythmic meter is iambic pentameter and the cadence, timing and tempo help the reading to be clear, fluid and easy.
-Good use of enjambment which is the running out of a thought and concept from one stanza and line to the next without a syntactical break.
-Clear the imagery and message to is given from this poem is one of enlightenment, clarity and inspiration.
-Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you forever.
Alex
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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Debi;
-this writing seems to me the requirements of a blank verse home whereas I found no rhyming internally or externally and the rhythmic meter is iambic pentameter and the cadence, timing and tempo help the reading to be clear, fluid and easy.
-Good use of enjambment which is the running out of a thought and concept from one stanza and line to the next without a syntactical break.
-Clear the imagery and message to is given from this poem is one of enlightenment, clarity and inspiration.
-Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you forever.
Alex
Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the great review, Alex. It is harder not to rhyme than I thought. I appreciate the detailed review and your continued support. Bless you and thank you for stopping by to read and review.
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You are so sincerely welcome my friend
Comment from cmowen87
Loved the message of your poem. Enjoy the things around us because we won't be on this earth for long. Loved the flow and rhyme
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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Loved the message of your poem. Enjoy the things around us because we won't be on this earth for long. Loved the flow and rhyme
Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the excellent review and your insights. I appreciate the encouragement.
Comment from Janet Foor
I enjoyed reading your poem. Beautiful imagery celebrating the God created universe. Good use of alliteration with nocturne - night, whirling waltz and dew drops. Very nice.y done.
Blessings,
Janet
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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I enjoyed reading your poem. Beautiful imagery celebrating the God created universe. Good use of alliteration with nocturne - night, whirling waltz and dew drops. Very nice.y done.
Blessings,
Janet
Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the excellent review. I am happy you enjoyed it and appreciate you pointing out what you liked.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is a beautiful write, w.j. you did an excellent job writing this blank verse about finding glory in the Lord and recognizing the blessings that he gives to us. I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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this is a beautiful write, w.j. you did an excellent job writing this blank verse about finding glory in the Lord and recognizing the blessings that he gives to us. I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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Thank you. I appreciate the kind comments about the writing and am happy you enjoyed reading it. Debi
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Debi...
_ What a lovely tribute to the glory of our Lord.
_ Great artwork displaying His universe.
_ Beautiful imagery throughout.
_ Nice job, my friend.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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Hi, Debi...
_ What a lovely tribute to the glory of our Lord.
_ Great artwork displaying His universe.
_ Beautiful imagery throughout.
_ Nice job, my friend.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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Hi Jax,
Thank you for the great review. I am pleased you enjoyed it. I'll be dropping by to catch up. I'm sure you wrote a few chapters this week while I was away.
Debi
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Indeed, lots happening, but you know me. Zip-a-lock! (*>*)
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Oh, yes, but always exciting.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Yea
by w.j.debi
The Lord created heaven and Earth, the animals in the land. From the great universe to us, a small part.
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Yea
by w.j.debi
The Lord created heaven and Earth, the animals in the land. From the great universe to us, a small part.
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Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the excellent review.
Comment from Jackreese
I love how you centered the poem on God. It was a great poem that made sense it was easy to understand and follow and the picture you chose went well with the poem.
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I love how you centered the poem on God. It was a great poem that made sense it was easy to understand and follow and the picture you chose went well with the poem.
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Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the excellent review. I appreciate you stopping by to read and review.