Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

I love the Bible in verse
Iike this...well penned in rhyme and truth
From Joseph to Esther and David
Sling and stone to throne
God bless

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2015

Thank you for the great review, kiwijenny. I appreciate the encouragement. Debi

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

The secret of these repeating poems is to make the repeated line appear tooccur quite naturally in the playce where the form demands that it should go. That is not alwasys easy to achieve but you have done it so well here linking the bible stories quite naturally.

Thanks too for the notes; to my eternal shame I neeeded the Esther one but the others I am proud to say were well embedded from those fay off school days. I doubt if it happens today for fear of offending the muslims!

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2015

Thank you for the comments about repeating line. It is nice to know it is not glaring. When writing, it seems so obvious that is is there. I appreciate the encouragement.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I admired your Quatern and your alternating rhymes in the quatrains along with the cascading repeats. Thank you for the synopsis of the Bible stories that are woven into your poem and the lovely artwork that compliments it. Cheers- Joan

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2015

Thank you for the great review, Joan. I appreciate the encouraging comments. Debi

Comment from Benjamin Valencia

Exceptional

Wow W.J. Debi..You definitely deserve a six from me on this one..Thank you for sharing scripture in your author notes as to review what your poem was all about. Indeed inspirational. The ending of your poem regarding the thorns on the trail was spell-binding. Good luck and cheers.

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2015

Wow, thank you for the six stars, Benjamin. And you say such nice things about the poem too. I appreciate the encouragement. I will be smiling for a while due to your kindness. Debi

Comment from Warren Rodgers

Exceptional

Hi Debi,
"the paths of faith are so diverse" is a great open and close for your wonderful quatern poem. I love your unique rhyming words, great enjambment, and smooth meter. It all makes for an enjoyable read and makes your points very well.
Your closing verse it skillfully written and sums everything up with a strong statement. Quaterns are not the easiest from to write but you've done a great job here.
All the best,
Rodger

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015

Thank you for the wonderful six stars, Rodger! You have me smiling. Thank you for the comments about the closing and opening line. Truth be told, this is my first Quatern. I decided I would spend some time dabbling in various forms this year. I had no idea there are so many and some of them are very challenging. Getting the line to move in each quatrain for the quatern and still work with theme wasn't easy. Thank you for the kind comments about the writing. I appreciate the encouragement. Debi

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Debi...

_ Excellent. (*<*)
_ The path we take in life is indeed diverse. You hit it spot on target.
_ Nice touch putting the scriptures in your notes.
_ Well done.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015

Thank you for the excellent review and your insights on the topic, Jax. I appreciate the encouragement. Debi

Comment from Terror2s

Excellent

I love your poem and the picture that accompanies it. The notes also add understanding to your words. The repetition really works very nicely to emphasize your point. Thanks for sharing. T2

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015

Thank you for the kind comments about the writing, the presentation and the repeated lines. I appreciate the encouragement. Debi

Comment from krys123

Excellent

Debi;
-I was still familiar with the parable in the Bible but you authors notes and very helpful in determining the spiritual aspects of your poem. Your authors notes was definitely helpful for me and remembering the parables.
-Good use of enjambment throughout.
-Well achieve the rhyming where each of the rhyming words were contingent to the meaning and concept of each line. This is very helpful for the rhythm to flow smoothly.
-The rhythmic meter was iambic tetrameter and the cadence, timing and tempo wall helpful in making the reading clear, fluid and very easy.
-The imagery was such as it was exquisitely expressive and vivid and demonstratively descriptive.
-Thank you for a very inspirational and enlightening piece of poetry.
-Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you forever.
Alex

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015

Hi Alex,
Thank you for the thorough review of the writing and the theme. I am so happy you found it inspirational. Thank you for the kind wishes.
Debi

reply by krys123 on 13-Jul-2015

You are so sincerely and deeply welcome my friend

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Three biblical stories woven into your quatern poem, it fairly "sings" with a wonderful list of the faithful in the scriptures, these were great fellows of faith in the Old Testament, examples, not of perfect people, but God's heroes who forged a path of faithfulness to the gospel of Christ, long before His time! Well done, written cleverly, the meter is smooth and clear, the lyrical language is really good, I enjoyed this so much, in abab rhyming, cleverly composed, well done, blessings, Roy.

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015

Thank you for the great review, Roy. I am flattered by the kind comments. I do like that the people in the scriptures have flaws and worries just like we do. It makes them easy to relate to and gives me hope. Thank you for the insights on the theme and the encouraging comments about the writing. Debi

reply by royowen on 13-Jul-2015

My pleasure Debi.

Comment from clsandau

Excellent

I liked this comparing paths in life to those of bible days of old - neat connection. Faith is always the bottom line, isn't it? Nice job on the Quatern as well. Very enjoyable and easy to read. Thanks and blessings, Carol

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015

Hi Carol. Thank you for a positive and encouraging review. I am happy you enjoyed the comparison to the bible stories. Thank you for the kind comments about the writing. Debi