Act of Endurance
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Comment from Earl Corp
Your explanation in the notes tied it all together for me. I found this poem to be very deep filled with double entendres. The graphic you chose is great.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2018
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Your explanation in the notes tied it all together for me. I found this poem to be very deep filled with double entendres. The graphic you chose is great.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2018
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Thanking you for your generous rate and touching remarks.
Comment from Lance Polin
Visually, this is fantastic. You evoke the feeling of damnation very well. I have read a number of you pieces previously and I have to admit that I have some trouble with your general poetic style. It seems to have a lot of pauses in between racing past itself in sound. It comes across (to me, anyway) as rather awkward, the rhythm itself all over the place. This is not to say it is a bad piece--far from it--but I do not like the flow. I'm giving you five star for potential, but this is a four at best in its current state.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2018
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Visually, this is fantastic. You evoke the feeling of damnation very well. I have read a number of you pieces previously and I have to admit that I have some trouble with your general poetic style. It seems to have a lot of pauses in between racing past itself in sound. It comes across (to me, anyway) as rather awkward, the rhythm itself all over the place. This is not to say it is a bad piece--far from it--but I do not like the flow. I'm giving you five star for potential, but this is a four at best in its current state.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2018
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Appreciate that flag up, its statements such as your which encourage further revisions. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed response.
Comment from Ricky1024
"Destiny" was well written and Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and Flowed well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content and Objective Content were both excellent and exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2018
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"Destiny" was well written and Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and Flowed well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content and Objective Content were both excellent and exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 29-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2018
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Thanking you for your generous rate and touching remarks.
Comment from sydney brown
Wow this is amazing! I have no words for the depth of this work. You really hit a nerve with the amazingness of it. You remind me of Emily Dickenson. Good job!
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2018
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Wow this is amazing! I have no words for the depth of this work. You really hit a nerve with the amazingness of it. You remind me of Emily Dickenson. Good job!
Comment Written 25-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2018
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I hope that's a good thing: Emily. I see certain features in this write was appealing to your interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
Comment from kiwijenny
Man...builders of the pyramids were taken for granite. Pun intended...this poem rocks...it's got a rocky feel...halting..Across dust land we to move big granite....it mirrors the way they built...one bit at a time
God bless
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2018
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Man...builders of the pyramids were taken for granite. Pun intended...this poem rocks...it's got a rocky feel...halting..Across dust land we to move big granite....it mirrors the way they built...one bit at a time
God bless
Comment Written 25-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2018
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Glad you feel this way about this particular write, hopefully my other write will do just as well. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching views.
Comment from Artasylum
Hi TPAC... as always very thorough and to the point... you are a really good technical writer... I guess God is simply first over all!... thanks so much for the read. yours, diana
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2018
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Hi TPAC... as always very thorough and to the point... you are a really good technical writer... I guess God is simply first over all!... thanks so much for the read. yours, diana
Comment Written 25-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2018
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Wow! I wish I was half of the things you acclaimed, but appreciate these memories of probabilities of accomplishing them. Thanking you for your generous rate and warm sentiments.
Comment from Gloria ....
Very good, TPAC. I always enjoy your brilliant exposition of image after image that gives no moment for pause until the very end.
Exceptional imagery and overall excellent poem.
Gloria
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2018
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Very good, TPAC. I always enjoy your brilliant exposition of image after image that gives no moment for pause until the very end.
Exceptional imagery and overall excellent poem.
Gloria
Comment Written 26-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2018
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I do appreciate such a comment from such an artist as you. Maybe I'm learning again proper expression. Always been crazy. Thanking you for your kind response and generous rate.
Comment from royowen
I think that knowing God is the most wonderful break through twhat man can have. We tend to look at experior appearances not at the hidden, more subtle nuances of existence. Beautifully written my friend, in generally non rhyming triplets, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2018
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I think that knowing God is the most wonderful break through twhat man can have. We tend to look at experior appearances not at the hidden, more subtle nuances of existence. Beautifully written my friend, in generally non rhyming triplets, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 26-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2018
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Far from your shapeness, incredible viewpoints I found inspiring and soothing to my core. Thanking you for your honest response and generous rate.
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Well done
Comment from kahpot
What an intriguing read, to try and answer your note, I think God should be learned at a bit later stage then the learning and acceptance can be one's own and not (forced or implanted) before learning or acceptance has been acknowledged, hope this makes sense, I will have to read your words in this story again, many thanks****kahpot
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2018
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What an intriguing read, to try and answer your note, I think God should be learned at a bit later stage then the learning and acceptance can be one's own and not (forced or implanted) before learning or acceptance has been acknowledged, hope this makes sense, I will have to read your words in this story again, many thanks****kahpot
Comment Written 26-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2018
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The Text states we do not know God or Jesus, what are we teaching? God defined by me meaning an Instructor is my first course. Its from his book the world pulse beat not humanity schemes. Prechecked, destined and forthcoming to us. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed views.
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Thank you I shall as said read this again to understand****kahpot
Comment from karenina
Alright...one cannot quickly read this poem and come out enlightened. One may not be enlightened even after slowly dissecting every line...it is as though you are several levels higher on a cosmic ladder and I am found lacking in the capacity to grasp the deepest meaning....but I do grasp the essence....and puzzle enough together to see you are a searcher of greater truth. We are subservient to the unknown and faith bridges the gap. How tenuous our grasp is the question at hand!
Karenina
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Alright...one cannot quickly read this poem and come out enlightened. One may not be enlightened even after slowly dissecting every line...it is as though you are several levels higher on a cosmic ladder and I am found lacking in the capacity to grasp the deepest meaning....but I do grasp the essence....and puzzle enough together to see you are a searcher of greater truth. We are subservient to the unknown and faith bridges the gap. How tenuous our grasp is the question at hand!
Karenina
Comment Written 14-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Wow. This write seems to have fired you up with high spirits. Glad its faults didn't detour the intent. Thanking you for your generous rate and splendid views.
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I get excited with challenging innovative work....