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Dawn of Chaos

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Comment from papa55mike
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Hatred should bring a tear to our eye. I personally avoid the news at all cost, too negative. Many acts of kindness exist in this world that don't get told. Thank you for sharing. Have a great day and God bless.
mike

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2016


reply by the author on 10-Feb-2016
    Indeed many things not told. They do worry me. Thanking you for your thoughts and generous rate upon this write.
Comment from Joyce Long
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"I was touched by the recall of a memory." At the present time, those words are so sad. My sister just saw on the television that they are going to reopen her son's unsolved murder after twenty years. His picture just appeared on the television and she was unaware it was even being considered. I don't know what your memory was about, but you did a great job of describing your feelings about it. Very well done. Thanks for sharing.
Joyce 02-09-16

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2016


reply by the author on 10-Feb-2016
    Pleased for your sister, hope justice prevails. Glad aspects of this write found appeal. Thanking you for generous rate and touching statements.
Comment from Nosha17
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I try not to let myself get distressed, and don't often cry. Missing my dogs makes me cry, I cried all through the writing of my dog poem. Good descriptions and imagery of the stages of sadness. Hope your pain is gone. Faye

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2015


reply by the author on 27-Aug-2015
    When right prevails over hell I will hold no pain. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from OLA THOMAS
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What a gory state of mind to be, feeling all alone in a tensed up world without a sympathiser around. This is a total outburst of emotion leading to outpouring of welled up tear. Well, things will change in no time.

ola thomas

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2015


reply by the author on 27-Aug-2015
    Death bringing silence and ends cries. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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A Tear
by TPAC

What are divine touching statements? Random thoughts about tears. Very Esoteric.

....sparkling sad thought..... >this is kind of interesting.
.....arrows touching strikes my tenders,
anxieties to my crushed mind,..>weird.
Thoughts of hell

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2015


reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
    I think imaginative perhaps enhances a write somewhat rather then being plain in statement -all my works in my view weird love the term. Thankyou for over generous rate and thoughts of considerance.
Comment from Gloria ....
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Wow, Tpac, this is a wonderful poem. I like how you've deeply explored a sorrowful tear (emotions) making its way down a cheek. The personification is magnificent and with its escape so of your rage was siphoned off.

Very, very well written.

Gloria

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2015


reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
    Thank you for such kind thoughts and captivating thought-provoking insights about this work and over generous rate
Comment from Unspoken94
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This is probably a 6 star and I apologize if I have undervalued one of the best I've read today and that is many. I am especially caught by your skill of personifying the tear as it laughs and dances out of you. Your emotion with that tear is also filled with character. I offer no suggestions except to consider putting the poem into segments/stanzas so that the reader can absorb each thought. There is so much here!
Bill Stephenson

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2015


reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
    Good sound out will try appreciate feed and hope I applied your acts with others thanks for generous rate of six
Comment from anabellapongasi
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Hi there.
What a powerful and disturbing expression of inner turmoil written in poetic form. Whatever it is that is causing you this pain and helplessness I hope and pray that you are over it by now or you'll get over it soon and may you find peace in your inner spirit. Writing and shedding tears are good for release and can bring relief to troubled emotions.
Anabella

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2015


reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
    Yeah my writes make me react too, like a perching sword in the side, makes you move. As for me claiming a nightmare my placement in hell said its plain. Thanking you for great comment and generous rate.
Comment from Selina Stambi
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Hello TPAC,

Profound lines. They speak of deep, agitated emotion.

That tear has quite an odyssey in its course from the 'eye bed' down the cheek.

You veer from past to present tense - was this intentional?

Hope you have a great week.

Until next time,

Sonali :)

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2015


reply by the author on 04-Aug-2015
    no these are pits which has to be addressed in this work, a common mishap, thanking you for generous rate and pleasing comment
Comment from The Mom/DarleneThomson
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Alex,
Your poem is so vivid and stunning. Painful. In the USA we say weeping in the UK they say greeting very confusing. That was just an FYI. I always enjoy your writing. I never have any suggestions because it is always perfect. Very vivid in its imagery.

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2015


reply by the author on 04-Aug-2015
    Thanking you for generous rate, and this work does hold pits