When Blood Collides
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Destiny Rides Again."A family's love is tested.
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Comment from joann r romei
This is so interesting, your sis just saw an opportunity to leave and he wasn't worth staying with, no i would not divorce for that, but it can make ones appeal diminish.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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This is so interesting, your sis just saw an opportunity to leave and he wasn't worth staying with, no i would not divorce for that, but it can make ones appeal diminish.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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When I heard she was moving on to a better job, I figured that was the real reason to discard poor Rex.
Comment from Deniz22
"Fasten your seat belts, it's going to be a bumpy night." Bette Davis, in All About Eve. http://www.imdb.com/title/tt0042192/
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"Fasten your seat belts, it's going to be a bumpy night." Bette Davis, in All About Eve. http://www.imdb.com/title/tt0042192/
Comment Written 19-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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I love that movie. Great line too. Thanks, John Boy, for the exceptional rating.
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Glad you liked it...why don't you enter my prompt contest, Save a Word? I think you would add greatly to the field. JB
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It's a nice change from the usual. I've been following some of the entries. If I think of something, I'll enter.
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Great!
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Ouch! You know you never should have said that, but once it's out of your mouth, you can't take it back. Can't wait to see the repercussions. :)
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Ouch! You know you never should have said that, but once it's out of your mouth, you can't take it back. Can't wait to see the repercussions. :)
Comment Written 19-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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They're BAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAD!
Comment from Sasha
Damn, your family sounds way too much like mine. Our communications skills relied completely on yelling and arguing an half the time we really didn't know what we were arguing about. Great chapter and I look forward to reading the next one.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Damn, your family sounds way too much like mine. Our communications skills relied completely on yelling and arguing an half the time we really didn't know what we were arguing about. Great chapter and I look forward to reading the next one.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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I don't know. From what I read of yours, you win the prize for dysfunctional families. :-)
Comment from Louise Michelle
Haha - what he doesn't know won't hurt him (referring to the expensive creams).
Hey, Shari, you're asking the wrong person. I say 'yes' those annoying nits are enough to get a divorce.
What a great page turner at the end. Can't wait for the explosion. A very enjoyable chapter. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Haha - what he doesn't know won't hurt him (referring to the expensive creams).
Hey, Shari, you're asking the wrong person. I say 'yes' those annoying nits are enough to get a divorce.
What a great page turner at the end. Can't wait for the explosion. A very enjoyable chapter. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 19-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Thanks, Lou. My sister once told me she spent a fortune on her face, but no botox or face peels, etc. Just the high priced creams.
Comment from alexisleech
Amazing what damage a few words said to the wrong person can do, so I don't doubt an 'explosion' is inevitable after confiding in your half sister. I can only assume she passed this information on to your mother, and she was understandably upset. Having friends or family to stay can be stressful at the best of times, but it sounds as though Anne pushed you over the edge. I can't wait to find out what happened next.
Alexis x
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Amazing what damage a few words said to the wrong person can do, so I don't doubt an 'explosion' is inevitable after confiding in your half sister. I can only assume she passed this information on to your mother, and she was understandably upset. Having friends or family to stay can be stressful at the best of times, but it sounds as though Anne pushed you over the edge. I can't wait to find out what happened next.
Alexis x
Comment Written 19-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Appreciate your input on this. Anne was good at pushing people. LOL
Comment from Donya Quijote
I like the tone of the divorce explanation, a matter of fact, no big deal, not a surprise. The snippets of criticism are an added touch. Isn't marriage about compromise? Finally, it looks like your sister found her space on this planet. Sadly, it did sound like Rex loved her. It is sad that many, many people operate with the idea that people and relationships are disposable, not unlike our material possessions. Tired of something, someone just put it out with trash and be done. Why did Bobby find his little chats with "stepdad" annoying? Sounds like Rex wanted to be friends, or maybe he was plugging for info?
Oops! Bad move there in the last bit. Saying that to a sister that you weren't especially close to is/did cause some fireworks. Your resentment by the way is normal. Having your mother there totally disrupted your routines. There is/was always some underlying tension. Remember the issues regarding the television and time spent with her? Anyway, when the dust settles things will more or less be back to normal, right?
Reread your description of some of Rex's quirks. Sounds a bit picky, persnickety. But I have to ask as one who likely to be a bachelorette until I depart this world, but wouldn't these annoying quirks have been discovered in a proper courtship? Wow, courtship sounds like a word that belongs to a dead language. I'm just wondering because the members of this thumb-talking generation don't spend much time getting to know each other before they get it on.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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I like the tone of the divorce explanation, a matter of fact, no big deal, not a surprise. The snippets of criticism are an added touch. Isn't marriage about compromise? Finally, it looks like your sister found her space on this planet. Sadly, it did sound like Rex loved her. It is sad that many, many people operate with the idea that people and relationships are disposable, not unlike our material possessions. Tired of something, someone just put it out with trash and be done. Why did Bobby find his little chats with "stepdad" annoying? Sounds like Rex wanted to be friends, or maybe he was plugging for info?
Oops! Bad move there in the last bit. Saying that to a sister that you weren't especially close to is/did cause some fireworks. Your resentment by the way is normal. Having your mother there totally disrupted your routines. There is/was always some underlying tension. Remember the issues regarding the television and time spent with her? Anyway, when the dust settles things will more or less be back to normal, right?
Reread your description of some of Rex's quirks. Sounds a bit picky, persnickety. But I have to ask as one who likely to be a bachelorette until I depart this world, but wouldn't these annoying quirks have been discovered in a proper courtship? Wow, courtship sounds like a word that belongs to a dead language. I'm just wondering because the members of this thumb-talking generation don't spend much time getting to know each other before they get it on.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Compromise would be difficult for Rex. Forty years old and never married, still living with Mom. Being an avid Episcopal church going and even knowing the Bishop, I doubt their courtship involved real intimacy.
Bobby felt Rex was fishing for info, and anyway, the man wasn't his choice for a buddy.
Appreciate your recognition that my feelings were normal. You'll have to wait to see what happens.
Comment from walbc
There is no doubt that you are a Supreme prose writer. This little piece, short and sweet, is written in a way that holds the reader's interest even though not a lot takes place in the story. But you have a way with words, and with dialogue, that takes the reader into the home of you and your protagonist. I'm looking forward to the explosive episode! Warm regards, Wendy.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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There is no doubt that you are a Supreme prose writer. This little piece, short and sweet, is written in a way that holds the reader's interest even though not a lot takes place in the story. But you have a way with words, and with dialogue, that takes the reader into the home of you and your protagonist. I'm looking forward to the explosive episode! Warm regards, Wendy.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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What a lovely and encouraging review. Thanks, sweetie.
Comment from IndianaIrish
Uh oh. Sounds like something you wish you could have kept to yourself. What did Anne do that made her such a know-it-all? Was she constantly on you about your house? Your looks? Your relationships? How did she wear you thin? Did she bug your Mom and Frank, too? As always, I look forward to the next chapter.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
He was devastated to think she would leave him and their cozy suburban house. (this is author intrusion I think because your story is in first person. How do you know he was devastated unless he tells you?)
Later, she confided in me his quirks, ones that a long-time independent woman didn't want to overlook. ( this reads funny to me, like it's an incomplete sentence. Maybe couldn't overlook?)
But (after or with) a great job offer in Missouri, my sister couldn't resist.
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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Uh oh. Sounds like something you wish you could have kept to yourself. What did Anne do that made her such a know-it-all? Was she constantly on you about your house? Your looks? Your relationships? How did she wear you thin? Did she bug your Mom and Frank, too? As always, I look forward to the next chapter.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
He was devastated to think she would leave him and their cozy suburban house. (this is author intrusion I think because your story is in first person. How do you know he was devastated unless he tells you?)
Later, she confided in me his quirks, ones that a long-time independent woman didn't want to overlook. ( this reads funny to me, like it's an incomplete sentence. Maybe couldn't overlook?)
But (after or with) a great job offer in Missouri, my sister couldn't resist.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Anne just knew everything and one-upped our thinking all the time. She bugged everyone! We nicknamed her Mother Superior. I made some changes and even added a vital piece of information, but will repeat it later.
Comment from Jay Squires
Fascinating. This is the 21st chapter, so I'm inching in from near the middle.
You have a fascinating voice in this book, assuming the other chapters had a similar structure to this.
I feel you could put the name "Jay" into the narrative flow. It's like you are sitting across from me, telling me your story. I even have the uncomfortable feeling that I'm eavesdropping. And that's good! That's reader involvement.
That's a six, dear Spitfire!
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Fascinating. This is the 21st chapter, so I'm inching in from near the middle.
You have a fascinating voice in this book, assuming the other chapters had a similar structure to this.
I feel you could put the name "Jay" into the narrative flow. It's like you are sitting across from me, telling me your story. I even have the uncomfortable feeling that I'm eavesdropping. And that's good! That's reader involvement.
That's a six, dear Spitfire!
Comment Written 19-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Your review blew me away, Jay. Thanks for the coveted six. You're right. Eavesdropping is good. I'm telling a lot of things that would make family disown me. LOL
