When Blood Collides
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Know When to Fold "A family's love is tested.
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Comment from IndianaIrish
You must have been glad she started college classes. I love the drawing of you, Shari. Good chapter for your book. Just two things to look at...
bumble bees(bumblebees) and daisies for a friend's children's(childrens') story. (Or maybe a story for the children of a friend?)
Alas.(,) (c)Consistent low ratings caused FOX to cancel
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2015
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You must have been glad she started college classes. I love the drawing of you, Shari. Good chapter for your book. Just two things to look at...
bumble bees(bumblebees) and daisies for a friend's children's(childrens') story. (Or maybe a story for the children of a friend?)
Alas.(,) (c)Consistent low ratings caused FOX to cancel
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment Written 17-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2015
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Thanks, Karyn. The nits are gone. Yes, I was pleased that she had an alternative goal unlike the boyfriend.
Comment from alexisleech
Yet another interesting, and beautifully written journey down memory lane. The more you tell us about Jeff, the more convinced I am that the relationship will end in tears. At least he can draw a decent cartoon!
Alexis x
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2015
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Yet another interesting, and beautifully written journey down memory lane. The more you tell us about Jeff, the more convinced I am that the relationship will end in tears. At least he can draw a decent cartoon!
Alexis x
Comment Written 17-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2015
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It's great to get feedback on everyone's guess about the relationship. It'll always be a mystery to me.
Comment from Eigle Rull
I am liking this Jeff guy less and less as time goes by. He sounds like a loafer to me.
This well written chapter was interesting with the job changes and the audition for Jeff. I wish they would hit the right opportunity and make good. This, as the others, held my attention well. I enjoyed the narration also. It was a good chapter, my friend.
Always with respect,
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2015
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I am liking this Jeff guy less and less as time goes by. He sounds like a loafer to me.
This well written chapter was interesting with the job changes and the audition for Jeff. I wish they would hit the right opportunity and make good. This, as the others, held my attention well. I enjoyed the narration also. It was a good chapter, my friend.
Always with respect,
Comment Written 17-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2015
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It's really tough to make it in Hollywood unless you know someone or have a special look. Competition is humongous.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Judging from the drawing, Jeff does have talent as an illustrator. Now your sister's marriage is breaking up. Your family hasn't had the best luck with men... maybe it's bad choices or maybe it's just too many selfish, lazy men. :)
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015
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Judging from the drawing, Jeff does have talent as an illustrator. Now your sister's marriage is breaking up. Your family hasn't had the best luck with men... maybe it's bad choices or maybe it's just too many selfish, lazy men. :)
Comment Written 16-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015
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I'm one of three who never got a divorce to date.
Comment from joann r romei
HE must have been a good looking guy, and artistic, the pic he did was cute, and it is strange that you are an owl on the site, cant wait to hear more,
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015
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HE must have been a good looking guy, and artistic, the pic he did was cute, and it is strange that you are an owl on the site, cant wait to hear more,
Comment Written 16-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015
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Thanks, joann, for the review and excellent rating. Artistic, yes. Good looking? No. But it's all in the eye of the beholder.
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he had to have had something appealing if thev hired him, but then again maybe he was the only one who auditioned. h
Comment from walbc
Hey Spitfire. I most definitely wanted to give you 6 stars for this but no, there are none in my drop-down box. Your prose is nothing short of outstanding. Your story is about an almost mundane topic, but it just forces me to keep reading. You have a way with words that is totally original and totally you. You just....what....you hold my interest totally with your words. You are a very talented writer, and I mean that sincerely. Warmest, Wendy.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015
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Hey Spitfire. I most definitely wanted to give you 6 stars for this but no, there are none in my drop-down box. Your prose is nothing short of outstanding. Your story is about an almost mundane topic, but it just forces me to keep reading. You have a way with words that is totally original and totally you. You just....what....you hold my interest totally with your words. You are a very talented writer, and I mean that sincerely. Warmest, Wendy.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015
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That's so good to hear. Not much drama in this chapter, but I do need to keep the reader aware of what's going on for future reference.
Hugs,
Shari
Comment from kiwijenny
Wow this keeps me intrigued. This is hard to do I think to lay out your life for review.brave ...but then you have tattooed your eyelids YOU ARE BRAVE
Well done
God bless
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015
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Wow this keeps me intrigued. This is hard to do I think to lay out your life for review.brave ...but then you have tattooed your eyelids YOU ARE BRAVE
Well done
God bless
Comment Written 16-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015
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Well, I will say this about my story. I don't intend to publish it for fear of offending my daughter. I'd be mince meat if she knew I was sharing all this. My mother too. Both of them private people.
Comment from Deniz22
It looks like the man had artistic talent...he capture you perfectly! :) What did you really think of the caricature? Your daughter's story sounds like par for the course of Hollywood wannabes...and yet, I recently read that John Wayne kicked around for 10+ years in B movies before he became the big star he was...I'll be interested to read the next installment...hope you are doing well re shingles...every time they advertise a product to prevent or cure it, I think of you. We have finally gotten rid of the last trace of snow! God bless, ckakajbakasm :)
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015
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It looks like the man had artistic talent...he capture you perfectly! :) What did you really think of the caricature? Your daughter's story sounds like par for the course of Hollywood wannabes...and yet, I recently read that John Wayne kicked around for 10+ years in B movies before he became the big star he was...I'll be interested to read the next installment...hope you are doing well re shingles...every time they advertise a product to prevent or cure it, I think of you. We have finally gotten rid of the last trace of snow! God bless, ckakajbakasm :)
Comment Written 16-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015
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ckakajbakasm????
Never had shingles, just hives. In fact, I did get the shot last year to help keep it away. As for the drawing-- well, maybe that's how he sees me. After all, look at the way I see him. ha,ha.
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good point! Hives...shingles...are they related? Glad you are free of them in either case...:) JB
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No relation. And Shingles is worse. As for the hives, if I stop taking Zyrtec,they come right back. Sigh...
Comment from Donya Quijote
Another interlude between events. You are building up. Will it be Barbara or Nichole? Personally, and based on what you have reveled about your sister, I am not surprised by her divorce announcement.
Found the following nit in need of your attention...
I could imagine hims telling her >drop the -s in hims
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015
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Another interlude between events. You are building up. Will it be Barbara or Nichole? Personally, and based on what you have reveled about your sister, I am not surprised by her divorce announcement.
Found the following nit in need of your attention...
I could imagine hims telling her >drop the -s in hims
Comment Written 16-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015
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Yikes, I thought I corrected that. Hate the new system of editing. Love your comment about my sister. You can probably guess the reason why. :-)
Comment from Shirley McLain
Good story line and it certainly enticed me to want to find out more about this story. You left a great big hook at the end. I didn't find any obvious spag.
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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015
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Good story line and it certainly enticed me to want to find out more about this story. You left a great big hook at the end. I didn't find any obvious spag.
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Comment Written 16-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015
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Thanks, Okiegal. Always like to see a new name.