Joe's Choice
Joe has to make a choice about a woman he wants to marry.23 total reviews
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day mate. That is very well done. It is hard to tell a complete story in 60 words when my poems take between 480 and 600 words to do the same thing. Good luck in the contest, you have a big chance with this one. Cheers fez
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
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G'day mate. That is very well done. It is hard to tell a complete story in 60 words when my poems take between 480 and 600 words to do the same thing. Good luck in the contest, you have a big chance with this one. Cheers fez
Comment Written 16-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
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Thanks, my friend! I tend to take a lot of words to tell a story, myself. This was quite the challenge.
Comment from scd41
A good story never loses its attraction and repeating it in newer ways does not appear boring. Moreover, your well chosen story on Joseph, son of David is biblical and would interest all believers. Best of luck for the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
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A good story never loses its attraction and repeating it in newer ways does not appear boring. Moreover, your well chosen story on Joseph, son of David is biblical and would interest all believers. Best of luck for the contest.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
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Thank you for the great review! It's always nice to find out what other people think about your writing!
Comment from Jacob Collins
I liked the way how you told the story of how Joseph was told by an Angel that Mary was the pregnant with the Son of God in this piece. You captured well how he must've felt at the time. Your writing flowed well and I couldn't find any faults. Good luck in the contest...Jacob
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
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I liked the way how you told the story of how Joseph was told by an Angel that Mary was the pregnant with the Son of God in this piece. You captured well how he must've felt at the time. Your writing flowed well and I couldn't find any faults. Good luck in the contest...Jacob
Comment Written 16-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
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Thank you, Jacob! I like to take "other" views on subjects, and relate them to what everyone might can relate to. Thanks, again.
Comment from giraffmang
Hello there,
As you say, an old story told in a concise and new way. A bit sad to think of Jesus being born in a marriage not motivated by love, though.
Nicely and succinctly put.
GMG
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
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Hello there,
As you say, an old story told in a concise and new way. A bit sad to think of Jesus being born in a marriage not motivated by love, though.
Nicely and succinctly put.
GMG
Comment Written 16-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
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I tried to put in how much Joseph loved Mary, and my original version had it in place. Unfortunately, it's hard to keep everything you want in 60 words! Quite challenging for one, like me, who is used to writing novels and plenty of room to write away!
Comment from rjuselius
nice twist in the end dear friend! i definitely did not see that coming. this is a good storyline and packs a punch in the end! well done!'
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!
blessings!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2015
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nice twist in the end dear friend! i definitely did not see that coming. this is a good storyline and packs a punch in the end! well done!'
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!
blessings!
rebekka x
Comment Written 15-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2015
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Thank you, Rebekka. I was going for the surprise, which I love to do, but I was also trying to make a parallel between past and present. Thanks so much for taking your time to review the story.
Comment from Shirley B
i love this short re telling of this old-old story. i think you have the winner here and i haven't even read all the entries. This meets all the contest rules. you did a great job. best of luck to you, shirley
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2015
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i love this short re telling of this old-old story. i think you have the winner here and i haven't even read all the entries. This meets all the contest rules. you did a great job. best of luck to you, shirley
Comment Written 15-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2015
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Thanks so much for the six star review. It is so encouraging, and thanks for the the vote of confidence. I appreciate you taking the time to read it through. To be honest, I've never written anything that short before. I'm usually very wordy.
Comment from TAB_that's me
Some men won't even marry the one they got pregnant and won't be around for the baby either, other men though... well you told the story well. Great entry! Good luck to you:)
Teresa
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2015
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Some men won't even marry the one they got pregnant and won't be around for the baby either, other men though... well you told the story well. Great entry! Good luck to you:)
Teresa
Comment Written 15-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2015
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Thanks so much! And you are right, they often don't. I appreciate the good luck wish, too.
Comment from Cajungirl
This is a beautiful story. So much here in only sixty words. The love of a mere simple man who turns out to raise the Son of God. Thanks for sharing. Best of luck in the contest. Excellent job.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2015
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This is a beautiful story. So much here in only sixty words. The love of a mere simple man who turns out to raise the Son of God. Thanks for sharing. Best of luck in the contest. Excellent job.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2015
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Thanks you for the review and the kind words. I have never written anything that short before, not even a text, I don't think.
Comment from Curly Girly
I quite enjoyed reading this sixty word count tale. It is a short story with a powerful message. I have known two men in my life time who have married girls that were pregnant by somebody else. Both of those marriages turned out to be very happy ones. But this is about a particularly special pregnancy.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2015
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I quite enjoyed reading this sixty word count tale. It is a short story with a powerful message. I have known two men in my life time who have married girls that were pregnant by somebody else. Both of those marriages turned out to be very happy ones. But this is about a particularly special pregnancy.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2015
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Thanks for the great review. It was nice and encouraging. I like the way you have compared modern day choices to the story of Christ, but that really was my purpose with the extremely short story.
Comment from Tatarka2
This is indeed a unique take on the old, old story. Thanks for re-telling it in this way. You never hear the story from Joseph's side, do you? I like the use of his strong hands as a metaphor for his strong faith.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2015
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This is indeed a unique take on the old, old story. Thanks for re-telling it in this way. You never hear the story from Joseph's side, do you? I like the use of his strong hands as a metaphor for his strong faith.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2015
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Thanks for your review. It's nice when people take the time to read and review each other's work. I enjoyed writing it, but the original version, just me writing to see how many words, was about 1500. It took awhile to whittle it down and still keep the meaning, but, again, it was fun and thanks.
