Sometimes Roses, Sometimes Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Our Secret Dance"A collection of sonnets
24 total reviews
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the p[pictures. I love the poem. Some love is not meant to be. Life pulls the lovers apart. But there are still the sweet memories. Forget and forgive the bad. Hang on to the good. Great work.
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I love the p[pictures. I love the poem. Some love is not meant to be. Life pulls the lovers apart. But there are still the sweet memories. Forget and forgive the bad. Hang on to the good. Great work.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2015
Comment from Deborah Marie
Awesome! How did you put the photo on the bottom of your well penned poem? Nice photos to enhance your clever wording. Light and airy progression, rhyhtm, flow, and rhyming. Beautiful contest entry; good luck, Deb
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2015
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Awesome! How did you put the photo on the bottom of your well penned poem? Nice photos to enhance your clever wording. Light and airy progression, rhyhtm, flow, and rhyming. Beautiful contest entry; good luck, Deb
Comment Written 08-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2015
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Hi. What a wonderful review and a world of stars too. I so appreciate all of your encouragement. I'm rarely at home so I have a lot of catching up to do, your wonderful reviews and reviewing your great work too. Now with the new formatting this place won't work on my phone. ERRRRR. Well, I'll catch up eventually. Thank you so much, mikey
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This is a lovely poem, Mikey, for the love poem contest. Sad, too. Stolen moments, but honor takes over and you both have to part. Yet, the memories linger on for ever. Wonderful. Good luck in the contest! xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2015
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This is a lovely poem, Mikey, for the love poem contest. Sad, too. Stolen moments, but honor takes over and you both have to part. Yet, the memories linger on for ever. Wonderful. Good luck in the contest! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 08-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much. Sorry to be so late with a reply. I'm stuck in the real world and Fanstory doesn't work on my phone anymore. I love your great reviews and hope to tell you that someday. mikey
Comment from Sasha
This is quite lovely and I enjoyed it very much. Beautifully written, excellent rhyme and I especially like the smooth flow the the words as I read them. I especially like the imagery you convey with this one. As I said, excellent work with this. I enjoyed it immensely.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2015
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This is quite lovely and I enjoyed it very much. Beautifully written, excellent rhyme and I especially like the smooth flow the the words as I read them. I especially like the imagery you convey with this one. As I said, excellent work with this. I enjoyed it immensely.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2015
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Hi, I'm insanely behind. What a great review and I have read all of yours. I'll try and get to your work today, I MISS IT. The new Fanstory makes it so nothing comes up on my phone anymore. So, I'm worse off. See ya soon. mikey
Comment from Dean Kuch
A well composed, very wonderfully written sonnet for the love poem contest, Mikey. It speaks of love, of loss, and being able to accept and appreciate each experience.
I especially enjoyed the way your volta was incorporated into the poem, it was a bit different. Your rhyming couplet brought all of the emotions home to roost in the end.
Excellent, & best of luck. ~Dean
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2015
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A well composed, very wonderfully written sonnet for the love poem contest, Mikey. It speaks of love, of loss, and being able to accept and appreciate each experience.
I especially enjoyed the way your volta was incorporated into the poem, it was a bit different. Your rhyming couplet brought all of the emotions home to roost in the end.
Excellent, & best of luck. ~Dean
Comment Written 08-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2015
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Hi Dean, Geez, a week behind, well more than that really. So appreciate these encouraging words. I'm rarely home lately. The writing comes quickly and easily to me. Now that Fanstory doesn't work on my phone it really puts a crimp in things. I need to sneak by and read some good writing too. See ya soon hopefully, mikey
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Sure think, Mikey. I've got cardiologist appointments all week, so I know what you mean about staying busy.
~Dean
Comment from nordicgirl
This is pretty close to perfection. How true this rungs to me wheyher in reality or even just possibility. So much of love involves our character. In fact our character is often a catch 22, a beautiful closing stanza. Wonderful!!
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This is pretty close to perfection. How true this rungs to me wheyher in reality or even just possibility. So much of love involves our character. In fact our character is often a catch 22, a beautiful closing stanza. Wonderful!!
Comment Written 08-Mar-2015
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Beautiful sonnet, Mikey. Good candidate for the prize. :)
Now worlds apart we dance our dance alone
Yet still we smile to know what we have known
Isn't that the truth! All our old bf's and gf's still can make us smile at the memories, even 50 years later. So it's all worth it in the end. :)
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Beautiful sonnet, Mikey. Good candidate for the prize. :)
Now worlds apart we dance our dance alone
Yet still we smile to know what we have known
Isn't that the truth! All our old bf's and gf's still can make us smile at the memories, even 50 years later. So it's all worth it in the end. :)
Comment Written 08-Mar-2015
Comment from alf collier
Hi Mikey. Now I see what you mean!! That is beautiful, very soulful and passionate. Might I ask why you are not in the picture dancing? especially when you have entitled the piece OUR secret dance. Or is it you who is the secret and she is the dance? Loved this. Already had one person say they won't enter!! That's sad, alf
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Hi Mikey. Now I see what you mean!! That is beautiful, very soulful and passionate. Might I ask why you are not in the picture dancing? especially when you have entitled the piece OUR secret dance. Or is it you who is the secret and she is the dance? Loved this. Already had one person say they won't enter!! That's sad, alf
Comment Written 08-Mar-2015
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
OH I wish I could write sonnets.
A beautiful love piece and so elegantly done.
You never cease to amaze me at the ease of which you write any style.
Very well done as it conforms to the style of the sonnet
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OH I wish I could write sonnets.
A beautiful love piece and so elegantly done.
You never cease to amaze me at the ease of which you write any style.
Very well done as it conforms to the style of the sonnet
Comment Written 08-Mar-2015
Comment from JJ Rowe
A well done sonnet! I struggle with iambic pentameter. I don't fair well with structure, but when it is beautifully done like this one is, it is very fun to read. good luck!
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A well done sonnet! I struggle with iambic pentameter. I don't fair well with structure, but when it is beautifully done like this one is, it is very fun to read. good luck!
Comment Written 08-Mar-2015
