THE TRINING Book Three
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "FOR THE LOVE OF JED (Pt 1)"JOURNEY INTO REDEMPTION
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Comment from LIJ Red
I will take time to catch up on the overall story, but this chapter is recounted in excellent detail, so grading it on it's own merits is easy enough. Hohoho and a happy holiday.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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I will take time to catch up on the overall story, but this chapter is recounted in excellent detail, so grading it on it's own merits is easy enough. Hohoho and a happy holiday.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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I don't think you'll want to continue the entire read, Red. It's a three part fantasy. Happy holidays to you, as well.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am anxious to see what he has to tell him. Actually, I can't wait. I hope you post the next chapter very soon. I am glad you are back to these old friends.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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I am anxious to see what he has to tell him. Actually, I can't wait. I hope you post the next chapter very soon. I am glad you are back to these old friends.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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Barbara, I hate to disappoint you, but the remaining chapters will be coming slow. They are the 10 or so chapters lost in the big crash of 2012. So they have to be recreated, which for me is much more difficult than the original. What makes it difficult is I know how good the originals were and I don't know if they can be duplicated.
Comment from padumachitta
Hi jay...well I am finally back. I see I have a lot to catch up with. I will start to back read your chapters. i may not write a review for all, if that is okay. But, I want to make sure I am properly on board!
I liked this chapter, for again, he just shows such a nice side to a 'commander in chief'.
Hope the season treats you well,
padumachitta
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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Hi jay...well I am finally back. I see I have a lot to catch up with. I will start to back read your chapters. i may not write a review for all, if that is okay. But, I want to make sure I am properly on board!
I liked this chapter, for again, he just shows such a nice side to a 'commander in chief'.
Hope the season treats you well,
padumachitta
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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Hey, Padumachitta, thanks for getting back with me. If you do read something, just a cut and paste is better than just reading and not reviewing. I have some that are only a post away from ATB rating.
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Hey Jay..I got ya, I will cut and paste if I have to...just don't tell the 'big brother' or I will get a nasty note in my email...
It was great to be away and now, well...I look forward to readig..
I hope the holidayss treat you well,
padumachitta
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Bless you, Padumachitta. Be well and writing this next year.
Comment from emrpoems
Good detailed notes and defined characters
Good storyline that has been well developed allowing the story to move at a steady pace
Good use of dialogue
Good interaction between characters
Happy Holidays
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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Good detailed notes and defined characters
Good storyline that has been well developed allowing the story to move at a steady pace
Good use of dialogue
Good interaction between characters
Happy Holidays
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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Thank you, emr. I appreciate your stopping by. Hope you come back again. I appreciate your kind words and rating.
Comment from kiwijenny
I am glad you posted this . I had been wondering what had happened.
Another good chapter...hard to read. It reminded me of World War Two books my English teacher made us read...
God bless
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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I am glad you posted this . I had been wondering what had happened.
Another good chapter...hard to read. It reminded me of World War Two books my English teacher made us read...
God bless
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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Ah, yes, Jenny. This is a start on the rewriting the lost chapters. It's much easier writing from scratch than knowing what you want to accomplish and how good it was the first time around, and then not being able to match up with it.
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Maybe the second writing will produce some gems
Comment from c_lucas
Battle injuries usually bring about shock. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making fro a interesting read. There is good imagery and descriptive scheme.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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Battle injuries usually bring about shock. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making fro a interesting read. There is good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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Yes, I'd say Jed is in shock, and dying. Thanks for your continued support, Charlie.
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You're welcome, Jay. Charlie
Comment from rjpurdy
Bravo!! I didn't realize how much I missed this story. It seems like yesterday now that we have picked it up again. Beautifully blended Jay. It's good to see Jed responding and I think Doctrex has found an ally in the doctor. Will the chapters be coming regularly again? Rod
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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Bravo!! I didn't realize how much I missed this story. It seems like yesterday now that we have picked it up again. Beautifully blended Jay. It's good to see Jed responding and I think Doctrex has found an ally in the doctor. Will the chapters be coming regularly again? Rod
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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I'd like to say I will be posting The Trining regularly, but I've run out of the finished chapters and am now in the "lost" ones. Recreating is a lot more difficult than creating. This is especially so when what I already had written (then lost, was some of my best writing. And I'm trying to live up to it.
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Sir, I suffer with you for this horrible loss. Just know Jay, every piece of writing you post, is superior in every way. I respect thge difficulty of your challenge, but I respect your finished product even more. FYI, you are the model I use when I think about improving my own craft. I want to wish you and the family a very merry Christmas this year.
~Peace & Grace my friend~ Rod
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God bless you, Rod.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
I'm so glad you posted this chapter, Jay, because I thought I had missed the ending. Now I am right back where I should be. It's still very intriguing and I can't wait to see what happens next, Giddy
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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I'm so glad you posted this chapter, Jay, because I thought I had missed the ending. Now I am right back where I should be. It's still very intriguing and I can't wait to see what happens next, Giddy
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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It may be a while before the next one posts, Giddy. I am re-writing what had been finished chapters, then lost. Thanks for loyally sticking with my novel.
Comment from royowen
A great episode Jay, Jed obviously is not out of the woods as yet, the "unguent" that Jed is being fed with appears to work, Doctrex won't hope happy if Jed dies, it's a mystery as to why the Supreme Colonel and the compliance of the medical person are working hard to please Doctrex, well done My friend, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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A great episode Jay, Jed obviously is not out of the woods as yet, the "unguent" that Jed is being fed with appears to work, Doctrex won't hope happy if Jed dies, it's a mystery as to why the Supreme Colonel and the compliance of the medical person are working hard to please Doctrex, well done My friend, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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That will be fully explained next chapter, Roy. This is the starting point toward the ending, and it has to be rewritten since it was lost in a computer crash.
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Well done, my friend, Roy.
Comment from Zue65
This is definitely an interesting chapter and I thought Doctrex's story is no longer available. Your story have now turned so interesting and more exciting compared to what I have reviewed before with his encounter with Axtilla. Your focus then is more on introducing a philosophy or perhaps the background setting that it sounded like a lecture rather than a fiction. An excellent chapter. God bless.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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This is definitely an interesting chapter and I thought Doctrex's story is no longer available. Your story have now turned so interesting and more exciting compared to what I have reviewed before with his encounter with Axtilla. Your focus then is more on introducing a philosophy or perhaps the background setting that it sounded like a lecture rather than a fiction. An excellent chapter. God bless.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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Well, thank you, Nassus1957. You were apparently on board in book I, before he got separated from Axtilla (and yet you remembered her name!) But I have to agree with you--it's much less cerebral and philosophical now. The chapters will be fewer and farther between, since I have to rewrite the lost chapters from memory. Again, thanks.
