THE TRINING Book Three
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "INTERROGATION OF ZURN (PART 1)"JOURNEY INTO REDEMPTION
23 total reviews
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
That was very kind-hearted of Doctrex, and to learn why he 'deserted' and how dedicated to being a soldier he really is. Well written, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2014
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That was very kind-hearted of Doctrex, and to learn why he 'deserted' and how dedicated to being a soldier he really is. Well written, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2014
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Thanks again, Debbie. I'm glad you like the way this is unfolding.
Comment from padumachitta
Hi. Well you know how much I like Zurn. I mean, really, someone would have to have a heart of silcon shit, not to like the man. And, please , please fins a way out of this mess. We need him, we need him to be our reminder of humanity.
padumachitta
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2014
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Hi. Well you know how much I like Zurn. I mean, really, someone would have to have a heart of silcon shit, not to like the man. And, please , please fins a way out of this mess. We need him, we need him to be our reminder of humanity.
padumachitta
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2014
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You may have to wait a while, but I think you'll like it, Padumachitta. Thanks for patiently being here for the story's unfoldment and for me.
Comment from krprice
It broke my heart. . . "On the other hand. . . eyes hungry for hope.
They both rapidly. . . show immense relief. Maybe: They gasped, leaning against each other, their legs wobbling.
Try to avoid using heard, smelled, saw, or felt.
Good chapter.
Karlene
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2014
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It broke my heart. . . "On the other hand. . . eyes hungry for hope.
They both rapidly. . . show immense relief. Maybe: They gasped, leaning against each other, their legs wobbling.
Try to avoid using heard, smelled, saw, or felt.
Good chapter.
Karlene
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2014
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Good to have you back, karlene. Thanks for the catches. I'll put them through the edit-grinder soon.
Comment from Oatmeal
Jay Squires,
This was well written. The conversation flowed very smoothly. The characters were well defined. I enjoyed it and look forward to reading more of this story.
No SPAG, no typos, no errors at all.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2014
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Jay Squires,
This was well written. The conversation flowed very smoothly. The characters were well defined. I enjoyed it and look forward to reading more of this story.
No SPAG, no typos, no errors at all.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much for your kind comments. Love ya too, Camille.
Comment from marijmd
Had to duck out for awhile but planning on catching up today! My job has me flying so much I cant remember what state I'm in half the time!
OOps must have missed something - he jumped in a like to die and now he is back
Zurn seems very simple - but he does see clearly!
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Had to duck out for awhile but planning on catching up today! My job has me flying so much I cant remember what state I'm in half the time!
OOps must have missed something - he jumped in a like to die and now he is back
Zurn seems very simple - but he does see clearly!
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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You might have missed the last few chapters of Book II and they are seminal chapters to the development of Book III. What kind of job has you flying, Maria. Sounds intriguing.
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I'm the VP of a clothing company - I have to travel to see our customers.
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was a very heartwarming chapter. I loved how Surn was able to recapture the respect and love of Doctrex. I was afraid Zurn would go do and do something like this, running after the brothers, but I didn't see him being court marshalled for it. I loved the moment when Zurn turned the question on Doctrex. It was so revealing about his character. You relayed well the struggle he (Zurn) has every day. Wonderful stuff!!!!!!!!!!! Gretchen
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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This was a very heartwarming chapter. I loved how Surn was able to recapture the respect and love of Doctrex. I was afraid Zurn would go do and do something like this, running after the brothers, but I didn't see him being court marshalled for it. I loved the moment when Zurn turned the question on Doctrex. It was so revealing about his character. You relayed well the struggle he (Zurn) has every day. Wonderful stuff!!!!!!!!!!! Gretchen
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Gretchen, I just love having you review my posts. You dig in and get the essence from it. Thank you once again for your generosity.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
I enjoyed the skilful interview with Zurn, enhanced by the wisdom of Doctrex. And I'm glad to be back with the troops. You have laid a good foundation for the next chapter, Giddy
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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I enjoyed the skilful interview with Zurn, enhanced by the wisdom of Doctrex. And I'm glad to be back with the troops. You have laid a good foundation for the next chapter, Giddy
Comment Written 04-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Many thanks, Giddy. When can we expect another script from you?
Comment from kiwijenny
Zurn is so precious. I love the humanity you drench your fantasy with.
I enjoyed this immensely Jay. There is a kindness and innocence that is heart warming. A very good read. I don't have any sixes yet but this deserves one
God bless
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Zurn is so precious. I love the humanity you drench your fantasy with.
I enjoyed this immensely Jay. There is a kindness and innocence that is heart warming. A very good read. I don't have any sixes yet but this deserves one
God bless
Comment Written 04-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Jenny, I was thinking about The Trining today and trying to figure out what genre it truly fits into. There are enough fantasy elements that it has to be in that realm, I suppose, but I think of yours as more thoroughly embracing that genre. One thing for certain, I REALLY appreciate your kind words about what it means to you.
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It's genre is pure Jay
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Awwww, thanks, Jenny!
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:o)
Comment from Sankey
Great chapter my friend. Can see the care coming through from Zurn's friend and superior Doctrex. Be good to see where this is all gong. Zurn appears a bit of a simple fellow and I can see he was not really military material. Just good buddy kind of fellow.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Great chapter my friend. Can see the care coming through from Zurn's friend and superior Doctrex. Be good to see where this is all gong. Zurn appears a bit of a simple fellow and I can see he was not really military material. Just good buddy kind of fellow.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Thanks, Geoff. I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter and Doctrex's humanity.
Comment from royowen
I enjoyed this fine episode, a change of pace from the previous ones, you're writing is great Jay, I must say, I can't remember one that I didn't really enjoy! I wonder if this means that Zurn is "off the hook," it's great that Doctrex has time for the individual, it humanises him, well done, Jay, great episode, blessing, Roy.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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I enjoyed this fine episode, a change of pace from the previous ones, you're writing is great Jay, I must say, I can't remember one that I didn't really enjoy! I wonder if this means that Zurn is "off the hook," it's great that Doctrex has time for the individual, it humanises him, well done, Jay, great episode, blessing, Roy.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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I'm so glad you enjoyed this, Roy. Yes, I like the way Doctrex is handling this. I appreciate your attendance at my novel.
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Well done, jay
