My P. T. and Me
romance at the health club27 total reviews
Comment from Adri7enne
Good story. Kept me reading. I didn't spot any spags and I'm half-way through. I'm impressed! I'm liking the relationship between your characters. Very adversarial. Fun!
Ah, gee! That was fun. I'll have to watch for the voting booths on this one. Well done, indeed, author.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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Good story. Kept me reading. I didn't spot any spags and I'm half-way through. I'm impressed! I'm liking the relationship between your characters. Very adversarial. Fun!
Ah, gee! That was fun. I'll have to watch for the voting booths on this one. Well done, indeed, author.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much for sharing my story. So pleased you enjoyed the relationship between the characters.
Comment from onebrit
Well I didnt see that one coming....I thought that he would get fit and meet someone, just not her. So, nice surprise. Good dialogue, very believable, he is a much more likable character than her, at least to me.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Well I didnt see that one coming....I thought that he would get fit and meet someone, just not her. So, nice surprise. Good dialogue, very believable, he is a much more likable character than her, at least to me.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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I am delighted this story caught you by surprise. Thank you so much for your feedback.
Comment from Pyrrho
Well written narrative and dialog. You have an excellent craft developed with your dialog. it is natural and that is a talent tough for some to acquire.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Well written narrative and dialog. You have an excellent craft developed with your dialog. it is natural and that is a talent tough for some to acquire.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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I am delighted you enjoyed the story, especially the dialog. Thanks so much for reviewing.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent wirte, mystery writer, I enjoyed reading this tale of what seemed like woe to a comedy of errors, lol. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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this is an excellent wirte, mystery writer, I enjoyed reading this tale of what seemed like woe to a comedy of errors, lol. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Thank you for sharing my story and for your lovely praise and best wishes.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
An excellent contest entry about romance between opposites. Well developed plot with believable motivation and hurdles. Good luck. :) nancy
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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An excellent contest entry about romance between opposites. Well developed plot with believable motivation and hurdles. Good luck. :) nancy
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Thank you, Nancy, for taking the time to read this and for your wonderful praise. I am delighted you enjoyed the story.
Comment from livelylinda
Author: a good story aptly written. A slice of life with nothing terribly interesting, just a man's point of view when meeting a new woman. Good luck in the contest. livelylinda
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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Author: a good story aptly written. A slice of life with nothing terribly interesting, just a man's point of view when meeting a new woman. Good luck in the contest. livelylinda
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Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Yes, livelylinda, this is definitely a male's point of view, but I certainly appreciate your reading my story. Thank you for your kind praise and best wishes.
Comment from Spiritual Echo
Really great story. too bad there are so few entries, with more you'd glow wattage. this story has all the elements of being purchased by a magazine.
Great dialogue and likeable characters, so much so you've got the reader cheering for them, a perfect answer to the prompt.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Really great story. too bad there are so few entries, with more you'd glow wattage. this story has all the elements of being purchased by a magazine.
Great dialogue and likeable characters, so much so you've got the reader cheering for them, a perfect answer to the prompt.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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I, too, regret there are not more entries, but I certainly appreciate your taking the time to read this and I am delighted with your response. Thank you!
Comment from CHIGYSISKI
I liked reading this.It captivated me throughout and I was keen to find out if Miss Stone face would smile and since I am in the process of shedding some ugly flab myself(hopefully), I read patiently to see if his hard work will pay off. Well done and best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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I liked reading this.It captivated me throughout and I was keen to find out if Miss Stone face would smile and since I am in the process of shedding some ugly flab myself(hopefully), I read patiently to see if his hard work will pay off. Well done and best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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What could please any writer more than to know his story "captivated" the reader throughout? I truly appreciate your kind praise and best wishes.
Comment from Max Edon
I thought that this was a very charming story. The characters were realistic and interesting. Who would of thought that romance could happen at a YMCA!
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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I thought that this was a very charming story. The characters were realistic and interesting. Who would of thought that romance could happen at a YMCA!
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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I told a friend of mine about this story while I was working out at the Y this morning, and he, too, said, "Unrealistic! That can't happen HERE." Thank you so much for your kind praise.
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You are welcome
Comment from GeraldS
This is a nice down-to-earth story that could even be a non-fiction reminiscence. I know it's fiction though because there's no way he would lose love handles in little over a month, especially in view of what he orders for breakfast. Still, this is a nice story and, I think, a good entry for this contest. Good luck in the voting!
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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This is a nice down-to-earth story that could even be a non-fiction reminiscence. I know it's fiction though because there's no way he would lose love handles in little over a month, especially in view of what he orders for breakfast. Still, this is a nice story and, I think, a good entry for this contest. Good luck in the voting!
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Gerald, you are too wise. Indeed there is no way Rick could lose those love handles that fast, but I am pleased a little unreality did not deter you from enjoying the story. Thanks so much for reviewing.