Comment from Emily George

Excellent

Really good suspense here. I'm waiting to see if she can stand up after those pills. You have me feeling for your character, with your well scripted inner dialogue, to her thoughts.
You have displayed her inner turmoil, which has rounded out your character by portraying her weakness too

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014

Thanks so much, Emily! 8-)

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

So she's high and thinks she can play ball. She's really messing up her chances for anything good. I can't wait to see where you take this.

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014

Thanks, Barbara. Some lessons are hard to learn.

Comment from Genya

Excellent

This was the first part I have read and I can honestly say I wish I had read the others. I really enjoyed reading this and just wish it had of been longer as I was really getting into the story when it ended. Excellent dialogue and very true to life characters. I will definitely look out for part five even though I am mot a YA. Loved it. Genya

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014

Thanks, Genya, for stopping by and reading this part. I am trying to break it up so it is easier to review. Part 5 coming soon. 8-)

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Some people are a legend in their own mind. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. Good job.

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014

Thanks so much. I appreciate your review! 8-)

reply by c_lucas on 07-Aug-2014

You're welcome, BG. Charlie

Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

I have read the earlier parts of this story, it is good with a clear message to warn people of the pitfalls of competitive sport and for people to have faith in their abilities. Strong story line, good descriptive language and characterisations. Enjoyable read. Faye

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 Comment Written 06-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014

Thanks, Faye. I am glad that you enjoyed it. Part 5 coming soon.:-)

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

umm - I wonder where this is going to go. You have captured my attention in each part of your well written story:)
Teresa

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 Comment Written 06-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014

Thanks, Teresa. It has been a work in progress, but I am trying to keep it real as well as interesting. Part 5 should finish it up.
8-)