Little Poems
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Comment from surrender
I got to know about gertrude from your Author Notes, and enjoyed the poem. Written with a lot of skill and good sense of rhyme and rhythm. Yes, I also noticed the two syllable rhymes in it. A difficult task to acomplish, but you've done it well.
The third stanza doesn't exactly follow the scheme you've mentioned.
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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I got to know about gertrude from your Author Notes, and enjoyed the poem. Written with a lot of skill and good sense of rhyme and rhythm. Yes, I also noticed the two syllable rhymes in it. A difficult task to acomplish, but you've done it well.
The third stanza doesn't exactly follow the scheme you've mentioned.
Comment Written 19-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Thank you surrender. Yeah, I did deviate.
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Ok, I fixed it. Thanks for pointing that out.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
An interesting style of poetry and a humourous subject choice.
I say that with tongue in cheek for many things are funny if they happen to someone else.
There are many things in life that have the same effect but cannot receive the same antidote.Lol.
I have banished the clock elsewhere or removed batteries on many an occassion.
You have stayed true to the stated guidelines for a Gertrude poem and given me a laugh along the way.
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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An interesting style of poetry and a humourous subject choice.
I say that with tongue in cheek for many things are funny if they happen to someone else.
There are many things in life that have the same effect but cannot receive the same antidote.Lol.
I have banished the clock elsewhere or removed batteries on many an occassion.
You have stayed true to the stated guidelines for a Gertrude poem and given me a laugh along the way.
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 19-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Thank you Shirley. I guess then, I accomplished my mission.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
LOL! This is tooo darn cute! Very cleverly written, I think we've all been there, so we can appreciate this for sure.
Love the line, 'Back to bed with face on pillow'. Of course, you ended it most satisfactorily!
Cheer on job well done.
Keep Smilin'... Jax
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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LOL! This is tooo darn cute! Very cleverly written, I think we've all been there, so we can appreciate this for sure.
Love the line, 'Back to bed with face on pillow'. Of course, you ended it most satisfactorily!
Cheer on job well done.
Keep Smilin'... Jax
Comment Written 19-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Thank you Jax. Your review had me smiling.
Comment from yolieday
Enjoyed the Gertude piece. First time I have heard of it. Thank you for that introduction. I believe the poem is cleaver, has a great flow and a good ending. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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Enjoyed the Gertude piece. First time I have heard of it. Thank you for that introduction. I believe the poem is cleaver, has a great flow and a good ending. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 18-May-2014
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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Thank you yolieday.
Comment from adewpearl
I like the rhyme scheme and cadence of this form
good consonance in ticking clock/couldn't block cause
excellent use of enjambment
good alliteration in back to bed
I'm still laughing at the final line :-) Brooke
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reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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I like the rhyme scheme and cadence of this form
good consonance in ticking clock/couldn't block cause
excellent use of enjambment
good alliteration in back to bed
I'm still laughing at the final line :-) Brooke
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Comment Written 18-May-2014
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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Thank you Brooke. I am please you could see the humor in it.
Comment from zanya
Another glimpse into the human condition and how we can react in the small hours of the night when our precious nightime slumber is disturbed -atmospheric 'sound was eerie'
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Another glimpse into the human condition and how we can react in the small hours of the night when our precious nightime slumber is disturbed -atmospheric 'sound was eerie'
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Comment Written 18-May-2014
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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Thank you Zanya. Sometimes I notice the clock ticking, but mostly i don't.
