Comment from poetbear

Excellent

This is well written with great depth and feeling.
Superb use of imagery and metaphor.
It is written on a higher level of thinking and that impresses me.
One of your best!

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014

Thank you poet bear. I really appreciate your comments.

Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER

Exceptional

Am amazing poem full of rich imagery and sentiments based on the progression of man's sin from the Garden of Eden. Well constructed despite an almost impossible set of strictures imposed upon the poet. Excellent...best yest. Congrats for a fine effort.

Regards:

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014

Thank you Stephen. I am very pleased you liked it. I just thought a simple Pleiades was way too simple, so I took it up a couple notches.

Comment from rod007

Excellent

Superb alliteration with the "s" sounds which do not detract from the powerful message conveyed in the poem. A lot of effort must have gone into composing this brilliant piece. Well done.

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014

Thank you rod. Yes. That one took an entire day to write.

Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

Hi, Treischel,
Virtual six stars. Sorry Maureen's poem came in first. The alliteration in "Sentiments"is astounding and the poem makes good sense. The rhythm is terrific and the figurative language is exceptional(Sold Eve our sorry fates to seal).
Preston

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014

Thank you Preston. She got my six too. But a virtual six is always welcome.

Comment from DonandVicki

Excellent

Well constructed poem and verse. I noticed a preponderance of the "S" use in your poem. Then it dawned on me SSSSNAKE! Loved the effort you put into your work. Don

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014

Thank you very much Don. Yup, Sssssnake

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

Holy jumping Tom, your author notes make my head spin - wow - is all that comes to mind. Perfectly formed with talent I most certainly do not possess.
Great and powerfully expressed work....I hate snakes...and squirrels.
Thanks for sharing this beauty.
Maureen

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 Comment Written 21-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014

Thank you Naureen. That one took me all day to work up.