Comment from RGstar

Excellent

A good abab structure.
Good rhymes, and good subject matter.

Well the tools are definitely there and have probably helped you to write this contest contender.

Good luck with the entry,
Best wishes,

RGstar

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013

Thank you RG. As contests go, I won't hold my breath.

reply by RGstar on 13-Dec-2013

You never know.

Best wishes,
RG

Comment from 9999pool

Excellent

Would be wonderful to have virtual pens and pencils to write our thoughts with our muse. Smiles.
Perhpas even a gadget that can do auto correction as we write with our voice and the grammatical and puntucation errors are correctly penned in without the lead and ink, smiles.
Good write and well penned a stroy of our muse.
Cheerio, Ritchie. :))

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013

Thank you Ritchie. I already get that on my iPad, but I usually write it out on pad and paper first.

reply by 9999pool on 13-Dec-2013

Yes, many still prefer the pen and pad,smiles.
Great way to write too.

Comment from Deniz22

Excellent

Ah yes, the pen and pencil pouch...could it be the official nerd badge? Just kidding, this is nicely put together and is fraught with deeper meaning of an inviting nature...:)

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013

Thank you Deniz22.

Comment from Nuad1

Excellent

What a fun writing work to read on this snowy PA evening; it read out loud like a song with a beat and (for sure!) these are the tools of communication (our trade! as writers) no matter the tablets and computer screens et al. Every writer I know here in my city carries pen/paper AND uses said in their pursuit of outputting good work.

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013

Thank you Nuad. I too write it on a paper pad first, then load it into my computer.

Comment from fairydancer

Excellent

Pantoums are such a hard form because of all those repeating lines. You have done well to keep sense and flow going throughout!
Your subject is very relateable to.
Good rhymes and flow.
Good luck in your contest :)

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013

Thank you so much fairydancer.

Comment from elchupakabra

Excellent

If I had a six star rating to give, I would give it to this write. I thought it was really excellent. Your pantoum here is very relatable, but most impressively, really has a perfect ring to it. From what I've seen so far, this is the best entry. Great work here, thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013

Thank you very much elchupakabra.

Comment from rouskin

Excellent

Just a little inspiration,
Have the keys that could unlock it.
With tools of communication,
Pens and pencils in my pocket

This is a really good poem and a worthy contest entry
Best of luck in the contest

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013

Thank you rouskin.

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

This is a very good pantoum. The rules have been followed and every stanza stands alone and makes sense. You have chosen a good subject and produced an interesting read. Good luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013

Thank you Dorothy.

Comment from twinklepoems

Excellent

My favorite line is "merry Muse upon the shelf"u. I love the pantoum form of poetry with it's lilting refrains. I also like your line,"the treasures locked inside myself." The treasures we are all seeking!

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013

Thank you so much twinklepoems.

Comment from Bobby Jo

Excellent

Ok, pens and pencils not only write stories, but drawl pictures and reach deep into the heart of people. Thanks for sharing this, cute idea.

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013

Thank you Bobby Jo.