Autumn Slumber
Short poem about first frost17 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
What a stunning photo!
If your goal is to be descriptive, you're doing great! :-)
I like your appeal to more than one sense and the imagery of the curtain being drawn
lovely use of personification
that creates a lovely, serene atmosphere
This is delightful and brimming full of descriptive detail :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
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What a stunning photo!
If your goal is to be descriptive, you're doing great! :-)
I like your appeal to more than one sense and the imagery of the curtain being drawn
lovely use of personification
that creates a lovely, serene atmosphere
This is delightful and brimming full of descriptive detail :-) Brooke
Comment Written 12-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
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Thank you so very much. Gretchen
Comment from Sueellen11
Very nicely written,, the curtains drawn what a beautiful was to describe night ,,and over the lunch green valley,, to pull the frosty covers,, excellent use of the chosen metaphors,, I so enjoyed this poem,, well done,,blessings sueellen
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Very nicely written,, the curtains drawn what a beautiful was to describe night ,,and over the lunch green valley,, to pull the frosty covers,, excellent use of the chosen metaphors,, I so enjoyed this poem,, well done,,blessings sueellen
Comment Written 12-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
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Thank you for the great review. Gretchen.
Comment from FrannyG
This is a beautifully sustained metaphor for Autumn going to bed. I love 'curtains drawn' and 'pulls frosted covers up'. Really well done.
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This is a beautifully sustained metaphor for Autumn going to bed. I love 'curtains drawn' and 'pulls frosted covers up'. Really well done.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
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thank you so much. Gretchen
Comment from Cajungirl
You stepped out perfectly. Autumn Slumber is very descriptive and beautiful. Your poem flowed very well. The picture enhanced your poem. Thanks for sharing. Truly, this is excellent.
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You stepped out perfectly. Autumn Slumber is very descriptive and beautiful. Your poem flowed very well. The picture enhanced your poem. Thanks for sharing. Truly, this is excellent.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
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Thank you for the wonderful review. Gretchen
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Well I personally think you've nailed descriptive lines with - green valley pulls frosted covers up - It does give a sense of the cool autumn evening
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Well I personally think you've nailed descriptive lines with - green valley pulls frosted covers up - It does give a sense of the cool autumn evening
Comment Written 11-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
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Thank you so much for the great review. Gretchen
Comment from Nevermore713
Not a bad poem. Just too short, in my opinion. The image you have chosen is very good. I just don't think you should have ended it so abruptly. You need to trust yourself enough to get out of your comfort zone. You have talent. Just believe in yourself. -nevermore713
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Not a bad poem. Just too short, in my opinion. The image you have chosen is very good. I just don't think you should have ended it so abruptly. You need to trust yourself enough to get out of your comfort zone. You have talent. Just believe in yourself. -nevermore713
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Comment Written 11-Nov-2013
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Thank you for the great and encouraging review. Gretchen
Comment from barkingdog
I love this metaphoric visual of a valley. Fine personification as she pulls up her frosty covers for 'late autumn slumber'(good continued 'l' consonance from previous lush/ valley pulls)
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I love this metaphoric visual of a valley. Fine personification as she pulls up her frosty covers for 'late autumn slumber'(good continued 'l' consonance from previous lush/ valley pulls)
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Comment Written 11-Nov-2013
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Thank you for the great review. Gretchen
