Comment from Jumbo J

Excellent

Hi Mary,
as I read this, I am reminded of what attracted me to your writing in the first instance... your amazing imagery... my minds eye see your words and translates them back into picture form... a true talent!

The rhythmic tone gave this beautiful walk a true sense of belonging... someone that is grateful to her surrounds and the nature that offers everything to those who take the time to see and feel the beauty...

loved your added notes, always great to know a little more about the history of ghost laid in yesteryear... and a beautiful photo just to make your talent complete.

Beautifully penned... and all the very best of Irish luck to you in the contest!

Kindest thoughts,
James xx

******STARS!!!!!!

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013

Thank you so much James for the absolutely fantastic review on my poem, I had originally written it in aabb style, and when I saw the contest requirement of abab, not my easiest form to write, but I worked on it, without changing what I wanted to write Thanks again Mary

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Thanks for the additional context and history in your notes. I enjoyed your alternating rhymes as you vividly described the scene. Best wishes in the contest. Cheers- Joan

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013

Thanks Joan for the wonderful review. Mary

Comment from n.rosej.

Excellent

I've said this before, but it needs to be said again...your writing flows so gracefully, and with such ease; you are truly talented. Beautiful words, and I love the way you always add 'decoration' at the top and bottom, it accentuates beautifully.

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013

Thanks for the great compliments rose, and the Star rating. Mary

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

You took a lovely photo :-)
good use of abab rhyme
nice proximate rhyme in deem/scene
good alliteration in nature knows
lovely descriptive detail throughout that creates a wonderful mood of appreciation for the beauty of this place :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013

Thanks Brooke for this great review. I really appreciate it. Mary

Comment from allborn66

Excellent

This is a wonderful poem. You communicate your theme well. The word choice is strong. The rhyming scheme enhances the piece.
Barbara

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013

Thank you for this wonderful review, I am so pleased you enjoyed it. Mary

Comment from country ranch writer

Excellent

looks like it wants to say come and join me today please stay awhile for It is lonely here and you cam be here for me on this day please stay awhile before you walk away

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013

Thanks for the wonderful comments, and great review. Mary

reply by country ranch writer on 06-Nov-2013

welcome

Comment from krys123

Excellent

A beautifully descriptive poem of a simple walk through a Wonderland of remarkable happenings. The image replaces you into a solemn and serene atmosphere that in the collective nature makes one feel at calm with themselves. Your rhyming quatrains were done very well in neither of your rhymes were forced, labored or strained. The rhythm may need a little bit of help however it is done just as well to make it very easy for me to read and understand your poem. Thank you for sharing this with your fans, myself and other readers/writers. You have a good day Mary and God bless.
AK

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013

Thanks AK for the great comments and the review. Mary

reply by krys123 on 06-Nov-2013

You are so welcome Mary

Comment from tbacha58

Excellent

as the night closes in the stars are all glowing
bright stars emerging from the blindness of day
beckoning and twinkling their luminous showing
night gazers,with telescopes come out to play

Beautiful poem with the outstanding view. It so nice and so much beauty to live around such an envierment. Hugs Terry

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013

Thanks Terry for the great comments and wonderful review I appreciate it. Mary

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

Hi Mary,

Oh, what a beautiful, breathtaking picture you paint, of Time-Stood-Still!

I've read of the Battle of the Boyne. The author notes help to put the ancient-and-modern into perspective.

Lovely!
xxx

Sonali




(breathtaking - one word) beauty of this glorious scene

the families of Deer's ... plural of deer is deer ... I.e. the families of deer ...

In order not to spoil the rhyme, suggest a minor change to the first line in the stanza:

nothing has changed here in many a year ....

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013

Hi Sonali,I appreciate the help on this, of course the plural of deer is deer, thanks for pointing it out and and the suggestion Mary

Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

nothing has changed here in so many years
the glorious sunsets, giving joy and thrills
lazily grazing are the families of (-D)deer(-'s)
as evening glow settles on the distant hills

WHat a glorious walk you've taken us on Mary. Wonderful descriptions and great telling of so many wondrous things. The wildlife is wonderful and the stargazers awesome.

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013

Thanks Pam, for the excellent review I am glad you enjoyed it. Mary.

reply by Gungalo on 05-Nov-2013

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