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kyoka (heavy fog covers)

kyoka--see auther notes

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Comment from adewpearl
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I just love the image of a skeleton whose ribs are strummed by a ghost - I like the kyoka form with its light-hearted approach :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2013

reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
    Thank you, Brooke. It is fun to try out new forms. Glad you enjoyed~Debbie
Comment from mountainwriter49
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Good Afternoon, Debbie

I've not written a Koya, so I'm not able to evaluate the poetic form other than I like it. You've penned a fun Halloween poem. I liked the imagery of the ghost strumming the skeleton's ribs.

A fun read. Thanks for sharing.
Ray

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2013

reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
    Thank you. I'm not sure if it is creativity or insanity. LOL. Glad you enjoyed this, my friend~Debbie
Comment from barkingdog
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I don't know if I should laugh as the skeleton maybe ticklish or run the other way at such this new 'rock' group.

What a wonderful visual, Debbie: Abandoned cemetary had me seeing lots of vines and weeds, broken headstones, large trees drooping over them.
'Abandoned' made all the difference.

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2013

reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
    Thank you. I'm not sure if it is creativity or insanity. LOL. Glad you enjoyed this, my friend~Debbie
Comment from emrpoems
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Perfect kyoka
Five lines and less than thirty one syllables

heavy fog covers
abandoned cemetery
eerie music plays
from a skeleton whose ribs
are strummed by a ghost
enjambment
Really eerie story

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2013

reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
    Thank you~Debbie
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
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A Kyoka, now that's another new one on us. But you did paint a very vivid picture for your readers to see. I don't think I'd want someone strumming on my ribs. Good job. God loves you and we do too.

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2013

reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
    It's actually a new form in the US. The Japanese have been doing them for hundreds of years. It always fun to try something new~Debbie
Comment from JW
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Oh no. I'm stuck inside of a poem That's talking about ghosts, eerie music and abandoned cemeteries. And to make it worse, I've got this huge, dark, mysterious Kyoka chasing after me.

I'm doomed! :-)

Thanks for sharing this. JW

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2013

reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
    Gotta watch out for those kyoka--they will get you every time. Thank you~Debbie
Comment from dmt1967
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This is a very nice poem I like the picture very gruesome looking great read I hope you do well in the contest and thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2013

reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
    Thank you. I'm not sure if it is creativity or insanity. LOL. Glad you enjoyed this, my friend~Debbie
Comment from michaelcahill
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I love this form. Thank you for introducing it to me. A spooky image indeed. The form allows you to get right to the heart of things. Perfect choice of words to create the perfect Halloween image. excellent piece, mikey

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2013

reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
    Thank you. I'm not sure if it is creativity or insanity. LOL. Glad you enjoyed this, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Nosha17
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You have successfully evoked the atmosphere of an eerie cemetery, coupled with humorous imagery. I wouldn't like my ribs rubbed by a ghost! I am not a Halloween fan, but you have created a novel verse within the confines of this poetic form.

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 Comment Written 18-Oct-2013

reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
    Thank you. I'm not sure if it is creativity or insanity. LOL. Glad you enjoyed this, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Maureen's Pen
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Dear Debbie,
Really creative with this one. Loved the ghost strumming ribs....spooky thought !!
Great Halloween post and strong submission for the contest.
Thanks for sharing it and good luck.
Maureen

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 Comment Written 18-Oct-2013

reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
    Thank you. I am glad you enjoyed it~Debbie