The Animal Doctor
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "The Other Side Of War"Love Among the Thorns
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Comment from emjaihammond
Beautifully written, I love where you have gone with this, and the journey he took to get there. This writing deserves more than the five stars I have left. The touch of adding a nurse to play the guitar and sing, windows open, to bring a lighter mood to the room when things are so gloomy, I thought was smart and moving. The situation with the nurse, Grace was handled beautifully. You could have easily gone too far one way or the other, but you managed to walk the line without a fall. A great job.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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Beautifully written, I love where you have gone with this, and the journey he took to get there. This writing deserves more than the five stars I have left. The touch of adding a nurse to play the guitar and sing, windows open, to bring a lighter mood to the room when things are so gloomy, I thought was smart and moving. The situation with the nurse, Grace was handled beautifully. You could have easily gone too far one way or the other, but you managed to walk the line without a fall. A great job.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much for such a magnificent review. I am so humbled by your encouraging words.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
This is a very interesting story. I like the dialogues. This is well written and flows well. I'm glad Grace and Nathan made peace with each other. I enjoyed this reading!
Thanks Amahra!
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reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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This is a very interesting story. I like the dialogues. This is well written and flows well. I'm glad Grace and Nathan made peace with each other. I enjoyed this reading!
Thanks Amahra!
:)
Comment Written 12-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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And thank you, my dear, for reviewing.
Comment from chasennov
Animal Doctor. 'Another Side Of War.' An excellent chapter you have created here, and one that I really enjoyed reading. Very well done.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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Animal Doctor. 'Another Side Of War.' An excellent chapter you have created here, and one that I really enjoyed reading. Very well done.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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Thank you Chasennov.
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You're so welcome, Amahra.
Comment from Schalk Jacobs
Glad to see Nate realised his mistake and is trying to rectify this mistake. Seems as if it has worked. Now he must work on gaining her trust back. Very good writing that captures the struggle that Nate has to endure.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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Glad to see Nate realised his mistake and is trying to rectify this mistake. Seems as if it has worked. Now he must work on gaining her trust back. Very good writing that captures the struggle that Nate has to endure.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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thanks for reviewing both chapters Jacops.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This seems well done. I am wondering if the name "Grace" has symbolic meaning as well, although I'm not sure if you are using symbols in your other chapters. I think it is realistic that she waited a while to accept Nathan's gift.
I think the line:
God! "I can't wait to get back home," Nathan sighed.
needs the quotation mark before the word 'God'
He gets everyone with that one.
Needs quotation mark after 'one.'
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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This seems well done. I am wondering if the name "Grace" has symbolic meaning as well, although I'm not sure if you are using symbols in your other chapters. I think it is realistic that she waited a while to accept Nathan's gift.
I think the line:
God! "I can't wait to get back home," Nathan sighed.
needs the quotation mark before the word 'God'
He gets everyone with that one.
Needs quotation mark after 'one.'
Comment Written 11-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your hawk eyes. Smile. Everybody missed that. Thank you so much for thoroughly reading and reviewing my work. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I picked the name and didn't realize until later what the name could mean. Thanks for picking up on it.
Comment from Christof McTarnahan
Solid chapter, it kept the wheels turning. Good stuff, I could tell you put a lot into your characters, and that is what I like.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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Solid chapter, it kept the wheels turning. Good stuff, I could tell you put a lot into your characters, and that is what I like.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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Thank you Christof.
Comment from marijmd
Well that would be a hard thing for Grace to forgive - I am glad that Nathan feels shame about it - but it does change the way you look at his character now.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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Well that would be a hard thing for Grace to forgive - I am glad that Nathan feels shame about it - but it does change the way you look at his character now.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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I hope you still like him. Good guys are flawed. Thanks for stopping by my story and taking the time to review.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Amahra. If I haven't told you before, please allow me now...you are a very fine writer. I was taken in on this chapter immediately and never stopped...had to go back to pick out a few things I especially liked:
"Grace acted as a wound up doll when she attended him...very dutiful and ceramic" (Great similie)
And: The imagery is so terrific here: "Nathan lay in the quiet flow of the music and thought of his home town of Sweet Springs. He remembered the innocence of the times before the war: he saw horses grazing in the wild and on the ranches, the children playing under tall oak trees, near freshly cut grass and colorful flower gardens. He thought of the Korens and their beautiful twin girls, Ella and Ellie. He thought of Eva...just what he'd tell her, he wasn't sure. Of course, there was Pete...with his joking and high laughter; and old Bruno, Pete's favorite smooth stepping horse. Nathan wished hard that things could be that way again. But, somehow, he knew they would not...."
Bravo, Amahra. I wish I had a six star left form you. Truly, I do. Bob :)
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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Hi, Amahra. If I haven't told you before, please allow me now...you are a very fine writer. I was taken in on this chapter immediately and never stopped...had to go back to pick out a few things I especially liked:
"Grace acted as a wound up doll when she attended him...very dutiful and ceramic" (Great similie)
And: The imagery is so terrific here: "Nathan lay in the quiet flow of the music and thought of his home town of Sweet Springs. He remembered the innocence of the times before the war: he saw horses grazing in the wild and on the ranches, the children playing under tall oak trees, near freshly cut grass and colorful flower gardens. He thought of the Korens and their beautiful twin girls, Ella and Ellie. He thought of Eva...just what he'd tell her, he wasn't sure. Of course, there was Pete...with his joking and high laughter; and old Bruno, Pete's favorite smooth stepping horse. Nathan wished hard that things could be that way again. But, somehow, he knew they would not...."
Bravo, Amahra. I wish I had a six star left form you. Truly, I do. Bob :)
Comment Written 11-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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Thank you Bob, I am so grateful for the five star. I've always admired your opinion. I'm glad you liked the chapter, the simile and descriptive paragraph. You made my day.
Comment from pickthorn
This story is well told. I love war stories, I haven't read the earlier chapters so I guess I missed out on some of the combat sequences. It looks like Nathan may score with Grace after all. Great writing
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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This story is well told. I love war stories, I haven't read the earlier chapters so I guess I missed out on some of the combat sequences. It looks like Nathan may score with Grace after all. Great writing
Comment Written 11-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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Yeah, Margaret left him pretty messed up. Hope you stay tuned. Thank you for this fine review.
Comment from MENNIPLOSS
I liked your novel: this chapter is very interesting.
Good and compelling narrative. You managed to capture my attention and I'll get to read the other chapters, because I am very interested.
A big hug and thanks for sharing!
menniploss
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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I liked your novel: this chapter is very interesting.
Good and compelling narrative. You managed to capture my attention and I'll get to read the other chapters, because I am very interested.
A big hug and thanks for sharing!
menniploss
Comment Written 11-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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Thank you ever so much for reading and especially for enjoying my novella. I am so humbled by the review and the stars.
