My Big Green Friend
quatrains in rhyming couplets182 total reviews
Comment from JM daSilva
I can't believe you were able to write a poem about a kid chewing gum and you made it so wonderful. You are a poet laureate, and it doesn't matter what mainstream thinks.
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I can't believe you were able to write a poem about a kid chewing gum and you made it so wonderful. You are a poet laureate, and it doesn't matter what mainstream thinks.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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JM, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from mshirachot
Brooke! What a delightful poem...and the look of amazement and wonder in Sawyer's eyes...priceless!
Nice turn of events in this tale of the tall green creature and his little buddy. Excellent choice of formatting with those musical quatrains.
Great alliteration with "blowing bubbles big". My favorite part was the image of the almost quivering lips...comical imagery!
Thanks for sharing!
Marsha
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Brooke! What a delightful poem...and the look of amazement and wonder in Sawyer's eyes...priceless!
Nice turn of events in this tale of the tall green creature and his little buddy. Excellent choice of formatting with those musical quatrains.
Great alliteration with "blowing bubbles big". My favorite part was the image of the almost quivering lips...comical imagery!
Thanks for sharing!
Marsha
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Marsha, so glad you enjoyed this story :-) Thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from the blue pixel
I couldn't guess out who the "big green friend" was from your title and you gave nothing away until the very end. My favourite stanza was "He wasn't biting off a limb of someone who had bothered him, but blowing bubbles big and small -- not very frightful, not at all" There were more than enough enjambments to satisfy me Brooke and there is no doubting it, kids just love bubbles but I never really thought what they might imagine lives within them. Now I know. xx Carol
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I couldn't guess out who the "big green friend" was from your title and you gave nothing away until the very end. My favourite stanza was "He wasn't biting off a limb of someone who had bothered him, but blowing bubbles big and small -- not very frightful, not at all" There were more than enough enjambments to satisfy me Brooke and there is no doubting it, kids just love bubbles but I never really thought what they might imagine lives within them. Now I know. xx Carol
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Thank you so very much, Carol :-) Brooke
Comment from amanda98653
An adorable, cute little story that's being told in poetic form. A beautiful rhyme scheme that goes with the flow. A lovely poem that reminds me of my own childhood when my grandma was still around.
- AJ.
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An adorable, cute little story that's being told in poetic form. A beautiful rhyme scheme that goes with the flow. A lovely poem that reminds me of my own childhood when my grandma was still around.
- AJ.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Thank you, AJ, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Jewell McChesney
I adore the story you tell within the lines of your perfectly written poem. The photo is delightful and the poem is full of imagery too.
Both of these guys look like they're having fun!
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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I adore the story you tell within the lines of your perfectly written poem. The photo is delightful and the poem is full of imagery too.
Both of these guys look like they're having fun!
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Thank you, Sharyn, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from TOMORAL
I do love revisiting my childhood via your wonderful poems and this is one of the best yet. If I had a seven I would give it to you. Lovely, pleasant read.
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I do love revisiting my childhood via your wonderful poems and this is one of the best yet. If I had a seven I would give it to you. Lovely, pleasant read.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Tomoral, thank you so much for your thoughtful comments and your most generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from EMB
You know, without the picture, it almost sounds like you're really good friends with The Hulk. Ha! I loved this poem, of course, and, as usual, you have a terrific picture of your greatest inspiration. :)
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You know, without the picture, it almost sounds like you're really good friends with The Hulk. Ha! I loved this poem, of course, and, as usual, you have a terrific picture of your greatest inspiration. :)
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Edward, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Nice childrens story Brooke in these rhyming quatrains and I particularly enjoyed the third verse with the chattering teeth and bug eyes and creature chewing gum. Very descriptive, and a good fun read.
valda
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Nice childrens story Brooke in these rhyming quatrains and I particularly enjoyed the third verse with the chattering teeth and bug eyes and creature chewing gum. Very descriptive, and a good fun read.
valda
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Valda, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from DALLAS01
Hi, Brooke. Great transition from scary character to a loveable character. Great rhyme and rhythm. I can see this in a children's book decked out in multi shades of green.
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Hi, Brooke. Great transition from scary character to a loveable character. Great rhyme and rhythm. I can see this in a children's book decked out in multi shades of green.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Dallas, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'My Big Green Friend' is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet is blessed to have found such a truly amazing friend! It was a pleasure to read and review this talented poet's work.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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'My Big Green Friend' is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet is blessed to have found such a truly amazing friend! It was a pleasure to read and review this talented poet's work.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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Duchess, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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Brooke, you're very welcome :-) the Duchess
