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Comment from Gungalo
I find I'm weeping on consecrated ground
With dark wet stones all around.
As the angry cloud bursts wildly weep with me,
You're off to eternity.
Wonderful Tom and the only thing I see wrong is the envoi should only be two line. Great subject you chose to highlight too.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2013
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I find I'm weeping on consecrated ground
With dark wet stones all around.
As the angry cloud bursts wildly weep with me,
You're off to eternity.
Wonderful Tom and the only thing I see wrong is the envoi should only be two line. Great subject you chose to highlight too.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2013
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Thank you Gungalo. I know about the Envoi, I felt I needed that extra line.
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Comment from Sararb
Excellent job with this poem about the grief and sadness one feels when losing a loved one. The rhyme scheme and flow of the poem is fantastic. So much feeling of emotion here I felt it through and through. Sararb :)
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2013
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Excellent job with this poem about the grief and sadness one feels when losing a loved one. The rhyme scheme and flow of the poem is fantastic. So much feeling of emotion here I felt it through and through. Sararb :)
Comment Written 05-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2013
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Thank you Sara.
Comment from Dean Kuch
What a poignantly penned poem. The sadness and melancholy mood is conveyed perfectly here, as the subject stands within the confines of the cemetery stones and mourns his lost beloved. Soaked to the bone by sheeting rain, it does not matter. He wants to be near to her, and refuses to leave, despite the deluge. That's love there, love than many believe can transcend the dank, cold confines of the grave. Poe did, and I felt this type of Poe-like quality evident in this.
Nicely done, Mr. 'T'...Bravo!
5 out of 5 skulls
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2013
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What a poignantly penned poem. The sadness and melancholy mood is conveyed perfectly here, as the subject stands within the confines of the cemetery stones and mourns his lost beloved. Soaked to the bone by sheeting rain, it does not matter. He wants to be near to her, and refuses to leave, despite the deluge. That's love there, love than many believe can transcend the dank, cold confines of the grave. Poe did, and I felt this type of Poe-like quality evident in this.
Nicely done, Mr. 'T'...Bravo!
5 out of 5 skulls
Comment Written 05-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2013
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Thank youbDean, you captured the essence perfectly.
Comment from Janilou
This stormy sky, suddenly as black as coal,
Reflects pain gripping my soul.
As raging sky rains wrath upon Mother Earth,
This vision contests my worth.
Such a beautiful yet deeply sad poem. Very well written. Nothing to correct.
Jan
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2013
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This stormy sky, suddenly as black as coal,
Reflects pain gripping my soul.
As raging sky rains wrath upon Mother Earth,
This vision contests my worth.
Such a beautiful yet deeply sad poem. Very well written. Nothing to correct.
Jan
Comment Written 05-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2013
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Thank you Jan.
Comment from busybee
Wow,this was a really great read.You had me crying just reading it.You have done a great job with this.It put a complete picture of the situation in my mind as if I was there also.Great job
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reply by the author on 05-Aug-2013
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Wow,this was a really great read.You had me crying just reading it.You have done a great job with this.It put a complete picture of the situation in my mind as if I was there also.Great job
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Comment Written 05-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2013
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Thank you busy bee. I appreciate your comments.
Comment from Curt Winslow
It is sad that death separates us from loved ones. There is an eternity beyond and that is what we must be ready for to see loved ones again. Great job!
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reply by the author on 05-Aug-2013
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It is sad that death separates us from loved ones. There is an eternity beyond and that is what we must be ready for to see loved ones again. Great job!
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Comment Written 05-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2013
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.Hank you Curt.