senryu (on death's doorstep)
senryu( not meant to be morbid )18 total reviews
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
This isn't morbid , it is brilliant. Even Shakespeare wrote about tragedy and death. And everyone recognizes his name. Great job and a poignant message. :-) Carolyn
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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This isn't morbid , it is brilliant. Even Shakespeare wrote about tragedy and death. And everyone recognizes his name. Great job and a poignant message. :-) Carolyn
Comment Written 30-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much. I really appreciate your reviews. Take care~Debbie
Comment from humpwhistle
Very humorous, Debbie. Death is too sick to answer--
that is what you meant, right? I may be looking at it
differently, I think. I see you you on Death's doorstep ringing his bell. You're see it the other way around, right?
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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Very humorous, Debbie. Death is too sick to answer--
that is what you meant, right? I may be looking at it
differently, I think. I see you you on Death's doorstep ringing his bell. You're see it the other way around, right?
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 30-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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Thanks so much for reviewing this, Lee. And yes, you are right~Debbie
Comment from writerwish
I see how you like to write about death. Something we all face but hardly ever talked about. Good subject for a senyru. I like that. Nobody home. Don't know if your reviewing but I am writing a novel about a euthanasia home and death.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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I see how you like to write about death. Something we all face but hardly ever talked about. Good subject for a senyru. I like that. Nobody home. Don't know if your reviewing but I am writing a novel about a euthanasia home and death.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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Thank you. I look forward to reading more of your novel~Debbie
Comment from DanielEkine
Very thought provoking and true.
Great look on death from the author.
"on death's doorstep
bell rings
but too sick to answer"
great rhyme and format.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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Very thought provoking and true.
Great look on death from the author.
"on death's doorstep
bell rings
but too sick to answer"
great rhyme and format.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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Thank you! Debbie
Comment from James Chaima Phiri
I like the point mentioned in the Author Notes that 'death is part of life'. On death's doorstep is a poem which needs careful consideration before one jumps into conclusion. One has to remember that the door has two sides - the inside and outside. On which side of this poem are you? The bell is ringing but on which side is the sound coming from? Are you thinking positively or negatively? I may be standing at the death's doorstep, but the question is; "Is the bell calling me to die or calling me to recover and live on"? I may be too sick to answer but one thing is certain; I will either die or live because that is life's circle. My answer will come in one way or the other. Thank you.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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I like the point mentioned in the Author Notes that 'death is part of life'. On death's doorstep is a poem which needs careful consideration before one jumps into conclusion. One has to remember that the door has two sides - the inside and outside. On which side of this poem are you? The bell is ringing but on which side is the sound coming from? Are you thinking positively or negatively? I may be standing at the death's doorstep, but the question is; "Is the bell calling me to die or calling me to recover and live on"? I may be too sick to answer but one thing is certain; I will either die or live because that is life's circle. My answer will come in one way or the other. Thank you.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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Thank you so very much for your thought-provoking review~Debbie
Comment from kelly frederick
All I can say is I relate to being that ill. A good poem that's all showing how we do what our bodies allow. When on deaths doorstep there's not muck you can do except pray.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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All I can say is I relate to being that ill. A good poem that's all showing how we do what our bodies allow. When on deaths doorstep there's not muck you can do except pray.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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So very true. Thank you~Debbie
Comment from Treischel
A very clever and creative 4-2-6 Senryu. A valid , though unusual format. It shows death in a humorous light. The subtle humor in "but too sick to answer' is an amazing statement that was unexpected.
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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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A very clever and creative 4-2-6 Senryu. A valid , though unusual format. It shows death in a humorous light. The subtle humor in "but too sick to answer' is an amazing statement that was unexpected.
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Comment Written 30-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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Thank you. Glad you like it~Debbie
Comment from Martin Chan
A three line senryu with only twelve syllables, the poem was composed with simple words, but deep meanings. Nice presentation with a good theme. I am a fan of senryu and I enjoy reading it.
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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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A three line senryu with only twelve syllables, the poem was composed with simple words, but deep meanings. Nice presentation with a good theme. I am a fan of senryu and I enjoy reading it.
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Comment Written 30-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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Thank you. They are fun, aren't they~Debbie
