Comment from atlas-manoftherain

Excellent

I liked how this flowed so well; I don't much go for free verse personally, but it seemed to work nicely. The one word "stops" so to speak were a nice theme throughout, those one liners. What a blessed flight it'd be indeed...

 Comment Written 02-May-2013

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reply by the author on 05-May-2013

Hi atlas,

Thank you for your generous, insightful and entirely candid impressions of my poem " your kind of comfort".
I appreciate that you addressed specifics such as the poem's flow, structure defined by the use of line breaks, word choices and theme.

Crafting "your kind of comfort" is the first time I have tackled the issue of, living with chronic pain, in a poem.
Pain-related challenges are immediate and the struggles begin the moment a person opens his/her eyes.
I understand those struggles and the enormity of the effort required to face each day with goals.
Some days we achieve our goals plus a little extra.
Those are the good days.
Some days we find ourselves blindsided by physical fatigue and flagging energies before mid-afternoon.
Those are the discouraging days.
When everyone of our internal resources seems too distant to tap into and pain is a reality too harsh and unrelenting to ignore, we look to the ones who love us for another kind of comfort.

As extraordinarily tough as it is for the patient, we need to be mindful of the emotional suffering that is experienced by the ones who love us.
As our primary caregivers and often as our very best friends, they go through plenty of moments of dashed-hopes, energy-zapping physical and emotional exhaustion, and their own tears, they rarely allow us to see.

I wrote " your kind of comfort" for those who live with chronic pain and for the ones who love them.

Thank you for embracing this poem completely.

Peace,
Jill
-:)

Comment from arsinBW

Excellent

"Drafted delicious messages" that was definitely my favorite line. This was very good, it had a lot of heart and feeling in it.

 Comment Written 01-May-2013

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reply by the author on 05-May-2013

Hello arsinBW,

Writing " your kind of comfort" is the first time that I have addressed the issue of living with chronic pain in a poem.

Pain-related challenges are immediate and the struggles begin the moment a person opens his/her eyes.
I understand those struggles and the enormity of the effort required to face each day with goals.
Some days we achieve our goals plus a little extra.
Those are the good days.
Some days we find ourselves blindsided by physical fatigue and flagging energies before mid-afternoon.
Those are the discouraging days.
When everyone of our internal resources seems too distant to tap into and pain is a reality too harsh and unrelenting to ignore, we look to the ones who love us for another kind of comfort.

As extraordinarily tough as it is for the patient, we need to be mindful of the emotional suffering that is experienced by the ones who love us.
As our primary caregivers and often as our very best friends, they go through plenty of moments of dashed-hopes, energy-zapping physical and emotional exhaustion, and their own tears, they rarely allow us to see.

I wrote " your kind of comfort" for those who live with chronic pain and for the ones who love them.

Thank you for embracing this poem completely and for sharing your generous and thoughtful impressions.

Peace,
Jill
-:)
p.s. " drafting delicious messages of sensual promises" is also my favorite line!

Comment from Treischel

Excellent

A beautifully written free verse poem that is very compelling. The imagery is wonderful. Oh how I feel the plea for your suffering.. The desire to escape the pain. My wife lives every day with chronic back pain that is OK in the morning but gets increasingly worst as the day progresses. On a good day she can make it to 7pm, on a bad day 3 - 5 pm, until she is debilitated, bedridden, and in tears. I can't do much for her but love and comfort her. So, I know what you are meaning here. Yes a ride out of pain on a Unicorn would be great. I wrote a couple of poems about it, probably buried in my profile. I know they are booked in Family Poems. One is called A Prayer, The other is named, Heal the Pain.

 Comment Written 01-May-2013

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reply by the author on 05-May-2013

My dear friend,

Thank you for your remarkably insightful and entirely-candid impressions of my poem " your kind of comfort".
I too find myself wishing for the existence of the-fabled unicorn....they are indeed such beautiful creatures and bring to mind a healing magic

Crafting "your kind of comfort" is the first time I have tackled the issue of, living with chronic pain, in a poem.
Pain-related challenges, as i know that you are sadly -aware are immediate and the struggles begin the moment a person opens his/her eyes.
I understand those struggles and the enormity of the effort required to face each day with goals.
Some days we achieve our goals plus a little extra.
Those are the good days.
Some days we find ourselves blindsided by physical fatigue and flagging energies before mid-afternoon.
Those are the discouraging days.
When everyone of our internal resources seems too distant to tap into and pain is a reality too harsh and unrelenting to ignore, we look to the ones who love us for another kind of comfort.

As extraordinarily tough as it is for the patient, we need to be mindful of the emotional suffering that is experienced by the ones who love us.
As our primary caregivers and often as our very best friends, they go through plenty of moments of dashed-hopes, energy-zapping physical and emotional exhaustion, and their own tears, they rarely allow us to see.

I wrote " your kind of comfort" for those who live with chronic pain and for the ones who love them.

Thank you for loving this one!

Peace,
Jill
-:)
p.s I intend to read the poems that you mentioned as soon as I finish with my responses to reviews. Like you, so many other FanStory writers, have shared the pain-related stories from their personal histories. I am honored that they have chosen to do so.

Comment from dmt1967

Excellent

I like the picture and the way it is written very well presented I like the pinkish background I am not too sure what the poem is about though thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 01-May-2013

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reply by the author on 05-May-2013

Hi Debbie,

Thank you for your generous and entirely-candid impressions of my poem " your kind of comfort".
I too find myself wishing for the existence of the-fabled unicorn....they are indeed such beautiful creatures and bring to mind a healing magic

Crafting "your kind of comfort" is the first time I have tackled the issue of, living with chronic pain, in a poem.
Pain-related challenges are immediate and the struggles begin the moment a person opens his/her eyes.
I understand those struggles and the enormity of the effort required to face each day with goals.
Some days we achieve our goals plus a little extra.
Those are the good days.
Some days we find ourselves blindsided by physical fatigue and flagging energies before mid-afternoon.
Those are the discouraging days.
When everyone of our internal resources seems too distant to tap into and pain is a reality too harsh and unrelenting to ignore, we look to the ones who love us for another kind of comfort.

As extraordinarily tough as it is for the patient, we need to be mindful of the emotional suffering that is experienced by the ones who love us.
As our primary caregivers and often as our very best friends, they go through plenty of moments of dashed-hopes, energy-zapping physical and emotional exhaustion, and their own tears, they rarely allow us to see.

I wrote " your kind of comfort" for those who live with chronic pain and for the ones who love them.

Thank you for loving this one!

Peace,
Jill
-:)

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Yes my friend this is well written sometimes we would do anything to escape the painful things in life all we need though is the understanding sometimes of a friendly ear well done regards Jill

 Comment Written 01-May-2013

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reply by the author on 05-May-2013

Hi Jill,

Thank you for your generous and remarkably insightful impressions of my poem " your kind of comfort".
There are days when I find myself wishing for the existence of the-fabled unicorn....they are indeed such beautiful creatures and bring to mind a healing magic

Crafting "your kind of comfort" is the first time I have tackled the issue of, living with chronic pain, in a poem.
Pain-related challenges are immediate and the struggles begin the moment a person opens his/her eyes.
I understand those struggles and the enormity of the effort required to face each day with goals.
Some days we achieve our goals plus a little extra.
Those are the good days.
Some days we find ourselves blindsided by physical fatigue and flagging energies before mid-afternoon.
Those are the discouraging days.
When everyone of our internal resources seems too distant to tap into and pain is a reality too harsh and unrelenting to ignore, we look to the ones who love us for another kind of comfort.

As extraordinarily tough as it is for the patient, we need to be mindful of the emotional suffering that is experienced by the ones who love us.
As our primary caregivers and often as our very best friends, they go through plenty of moments of dashed-hopes, energy-zapping physical and emotional exhaustion, and their own tears, they rarely allow us to see.

I wrote " your kind of comfort" for those who live with chronic pain and for the ones who love them.

Thank you for loving this one!

Peace,
Jill
-:)

Comment from Curtis Hatch

Excellent

Jill,

The poem is skillfully written, and it tells a story of sorrow and need. The protagonist has a deep yearning for love and affection, but the object of her love cannot return it. The graphics help make this a nice presentation.

Curtis

 Comment Written 01-May-2013

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reply by the author on 05-May-2013

Hi Curtis,

Thank you for your remarkably- insightful impressions of my poem " your kind of comfort".
There are days when I find myself wishing for the existence of the-fabled unicorn....they are indeed such beautiful creatures and bring to mind a healing magic

Crafting "your kind of comfort" is the first time I have tackled the issue of, living with chronic pain, in a poem.
Pain-related challenges are immediate and the struggles begin the moment a person opens his/her eyes.
I understand those struggles and the enormity of the effort required to face each day with goals.
Some days we achieve our goals plus a little extra.
Those are the good days.
Some days we find ourselves blindsided by physical fatigue and flagging energies before mid-afternoon.
Those are the discouraging days.
When everyone of our internal resources seems too distant to tap into and pain is a reality too harsh and unrelenting to ignore, we look to the ones who love us for another kind of comfort.

As extraordinarily tough as it is for the patient, we need to be mindful of the emotional suffering that is experienced by the ones who love us.
As our primary caregivers and often as our very best friends, they go through plenty of moments of dashed-hopes, energy-zapping physical and emotional exhaustion, and their own tears, they rarely allow us to see.

I wrote " your kind of comfort" for those who live with chronic pain and for the ones who love them.

Thank you for loving this one!

Peace,
Jill
-:)

Comment from Jim Lorson Sr

Excellent

Jill, 8 years ago I fell from that "I need your comfort zone" and the reason, tired of lies and being hurt. I realized the only comfort I needed came from my Creator and myself. This is an intensely emotional poem filled with the wanted and needed comfort of someone that was deeply hurt. You did an excellent job in composing this. I like the way you formatted this to make an easy read that flowed well. Well done my friend,,,,,,,Jim

 Comment Written 01-May-2013

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reply by the author on 05-May-2013

Hi Jim,

Thank you for your generous and remarkably-insightful impressions of my poem " your kind of comfort".
There are days when I find myself wishing for the existence of the-fabled unicorn....they are indeed such beautiful creatures and bring to mind a healing magic

Crafting "your kind of comfort" is the first time I have tackled the issue of, living with chronic pain, in a poem.
Pain-related challenges are immediate and the struggles begin the moment a person opens his/her eyes.
I understand those struggles and the enormity of the effort required to face each day with goals.
Some days we achieve our goals plus a little extra.
Those are the good days.
Some days we find ourselves blindsided by physical fatigue and flagging energies before mid-afternoon.
Those are the discouraging days.
When everyone of our internal resources seems too distant to tap into and pain is a reality too harsh and unrelenting to ignore, we look to the ones who love us for another kind of comfort.

As extraordinarily tough as it is for the patient, we need to be mindful of the emotional suffering that is experienced by the ones who love us.
As our primary caregivers and often as our very best friends, they go through plenty of moments of dashed-hopes, energy-zapping physical and emotional exhaustion, and their own tears, they rarely allow us to see.

I wrote " your kind of comfort" for those who live with chronic pain and for the ones who love them.

Thank you for loving this one!

Peace,
Jill
-:)
p.s I do have faith in the existence of some kind of higher power.
though I pray, as I have always done, I realized not long ago, that rarely do I pray for myself or even my own physical healing.
My prayers have always been for the ones I love.
Finally in this past year, as my physical pain reached new highs ( or is that actually referred to as lows?), at the urging of a dear friend, I began to insert my own requests for answers to hard-questions and pleas for relief from the very worst of my pain.
You are obviously a champion of faith and clearly the hard-earned sage wisdom that you offer is a result of battles both won and lost.
I would welcome the opportunity to discuss this issue and anything else about being a winner and triumphing at the toughest game of all: life
If that idea appeals to you, please be in touch by private message.
I truly hope that you do.

Comment from JM daSilva

Excellent

Wanting something that you can't have is the worse torture if the object of your desire is near you. What I thought of as I read your poem was somebody pining for someone. I might be wrong. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 01-May-2013

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reply by the author on 05-May-2013

Hi JM,

Thank you for your generous and insightful impressions of my poem " your kind of comfort"

Crafting "your kind of comfort" is the first time I have tackled the issue of, living with chronic pain, in a poem.
Pain-related challenges are immediate and the struggles begin the moment a person opens his/her eyes.
I understand those struggles and the enormity of the effort required to face each day with goals.
Some days we achieve our goals plus a little extra.
Those are the good days.
Some days we find ourselves blindsided by physical fatigue and flagging energies before mid-afternoon.
Those are the discouraging days.
When everyone of our internal resources seems too distant to tap into and pain is a reality too harsh and unrelenting to ignore, we look to the ones who love us for another kind of comfort.

As extraordinarily tough as it is for the patient, we need to be mindful of the emotional suffering that is experienced by the ones who love us.
As our primary caregivers and often as our very best friends, they go through plenty of moments of dashed-hopes, energy-zapping physical and emotional exhaustion, and their own tears, they rarely allow us to see.

I wrote " your kind of comfort" for those who live with chronic pain and for the ones who love them.

Thank you for asking your questions.
I hope that my clarification is helpful.

Peace,
Jill
-:)

reply by JM daSilva on 05-May-2013

Youre clarifications were great. Thanks for that.

Comment from Indie Skreet

Excellent

sorry sweetheart, but I am all out of sixes. You relate your pain and loneliness and lack of understanding from one who should understand better, expertly in this poem. Sometimes, the one we need is so caught up in their own shit they are unavailable to us, and only when it is too late, the light's switched on. A clever reference in 'you are my sunshine'. Warmly Indie xx

 Comment Written 01-May-2013

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reply by the author on 05-May-2013

Hi Indie,

Thank you for your warm and candid impressions of my poem " your kind of comfort".

I appreciate that you mentioned my attempt to soften the emotional tone with my " you are my sunshine" singing reference.

There are days when I find myself wishing for the existence of the-fabled unicorn....they are indeed such beautiful creatures and bring to mind a healing magic

Crafting "your kind of comfort" is the first time I have tackled the issue of, living with chronic pain, in a poem.
Pain-related challenges are immediate and the struggles begin the moment a person opens his/her eyes.
I understand those struggles and the enormity of the effort required to face each day with goals.
Some days we achieve our goals plus a little extra.
Those are the good days.
Some days we find ourselves blindsided by physical fatigue and flagging energies before mid-afternoon.
Those are the discouraging days.
When everyone of our internal resources seems too distant to tap into and pain is a reality too harsh and unrelenting to ignore, we look to the ones who love us for another kind of comfort.

As extraordinarily tough as it is for the patient, we need to be mindful of the emotional suffering that is experienced by the ones who love us.
As our primary caregivers and often as our very best friends, they go through plenty of moments of dashed-hopes, energy-zapping physical and emotional exhaustion, and their own tears, they rarely allow us to see.

I wrote " your kind of comfort" for those who live with chronic pain and for the ones who love them.

Thank you for loving this one!

Peace,
Jill
-:)
p.s Indie, please don't feel badly that you cannot award me a six star review.
My reward is the gift of your constructive and supportive review!

reply by Indie Skreet on 05-May-2013

ah, thank you Jill for your lovely comments, wish you good health, Indie

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

love all the details, the silver roses, monotone rendition of you are my sunshine. sometimes when we are in that place where day is pain and night the same, nothing that worked before or that can be imagined to work will. I am a bit puzzled about the unicorn, if it is just a picture of bliss or if the unicorn is in the poem. the you in "you cannot give her"- anything to do with the unicorn? sorry, i'm not normally this dense.

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 05-May-2013

Good afternoon my friend raven,

Thank you for your generous and remarkably-insightful impressions of my poem " your kind of comfort".

I appreciate that you addressed specifics such as word choices, my attempt to soften the emotional tone of the poem with the reference to " you are my sunshine", and best of all, the questions that you posed.

There are days when I find myself wishing for the existence of the-fabled unicorn....they are indeed such beautiful creatures and bring to mind a healing magic.
To answer your question about the unicorn: the unicorn is not actually in the poem. The selection of a celestial image of a magical unicorn is very much a picture of imagined longed-for bliss.

I am very glad that you asked the question and I hope that my answer offers helpful clarification.

Crafting "your kind of comfort" is the first time I have tackled the issue of, living with chronic pain, in a poem.
Pain-related challenges are immediate and the struggles begin the moment a person opens his/her eyes.
I understand those struggles and the enormity of the effort required to face each day with goals.
Some days we achieve our goals plus a little extra.
Those are the good days.
Some days we find ourselves blindsided by physical fatigue and flagging energies before mid-afternoon.
Those are the discouraging days.
When everyone of our internal resources seems too distant to tap into and pain is a reality too harsh and unrelenting to ignore, we look to the ones who love us for another kind of comfort.

As extraordinarily tough as it is for the patient, we need to be mindful of the emotional suffering that is experienced by the ones who love us.
As our primary caregivers and often as our very best friends, they go through plenty of moments of dashed-hopes, energy-zapping physical and emotional exhaustion, and their own tears, they rarely allow us to see.

I wrote " your kind of comfort" for those who live with chronic pain and for the ones who love them.

Thank you for loving this one!

Peace,
Jill
-:)
p.s. you are NEVER dense!
Your reviews are always constructive, detailed and supportive.
I pay attention to your questions and suggestions
Please keep them coming