All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Ode to Me!"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Ode to Me!' is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. Like so many others, we're blessed to have what God has given us. It was a pleasure to read and review a work of this standard.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013
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'Ode to Me!' is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. Like so many others, we're blessed to have what God has given us. It was a pleasure to read and review a work of this standard.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013
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thx your Grace! :)S
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S, you're more than welcome.
With my best wishes, the Duchess
Comment from kiwisteveh
Your unmistakable performance style resonates through this piece. Sounds like you had a good day!
Lots of fun with sounds, not as regular rhyme as I might do but almost randomly sprinkled - think/pink/twinkling/wink is a good example.
Though you were going for a full set of senses too, but I can't find smell...
Lovely, bright, positive poem - good luck with it.
Steve
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013
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Your unmistakable performance style resonates through this piece. Sounds like you had a good day!
Lots of fun with sounds, not as regular rhyme as I might do but almost randomly sprinkled - think/pink/twinkling/wink is a good example.
Though you were going for a full set of senses too, but I can't find smell...
Lovely, bright, positive poem - good luck with it.
Steve
Comment Written 24-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013
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thx so much Steve ... all this, and SMELL too???? Some guys just don't know when to stop!
Bless you for your lovely SIX! :)Sharyn
Comment from Hollyhock
A celebration of yourself, and why not? This sings and laughs and evokes what I have always surmised is the essential you. There is a humorous irreverence here and also the self-mocking, which is so endearing. What are we celebrating? Just the joy of being an individual, losing a few pounds, indulging the soul with smells, sounds and tastes of all that is lovely in the surrounding world - such pleasure in the little things.
I loved all the pictures you painted here and the internal rhyming which popped up, apparently randomly, and welded the poem together.
I think my favourite line has to be,"in the quiet of my gold buttered afternoon" with all its implied sunshine indulgences.
Odes were originally meant to be sung, well, this one sings all the way through, and by itself!
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013
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A celebration of yourself, and why not? This sings and laughs and evokes what I have always surmised is the essential you. There is a humorous irreverence here and also the self-mocking, which is so endearing. What are we celebrating? Just the joy of being an individual, losing a few pounds, indulging the soul with smells, sounds and tastes of all that is lovely in the surrounding world - such pleasure in the little things.
I loved all the pictures you painted here and the internal rhyming which popped up, apparently randomly, and welded the poem together.
I think my favourite line has to be,"in the quiet of my gold buttered afternoon" with all its implied sunshine indulgences.
Odes were originally meant to be sung, well, this one sings all the way through, and by itself!
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013
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A pleasure to have you along for the afternoon Andrea - thank you so much! :) Sharyn
Comment from Walu Feral
That is a brilliant piece of poetry. It has absolutely every emotion in it! Crikey! I don't know what else to say but well done mate. Cheers Fez.
Good luck in the comp. That's gotta be a winner.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013
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That is a brilliant piece of poetry. It has absolutely every emotion in it! Crikey! I don't know what else to say but well done mate. Cheers Fez.
Good luck in the comp. That's gotta be a winner.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013
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oh GOOD!!! I figured you'd probably enjoy this one Fez! Whew! thanks so much for that lovely SIX!!!
Blessings ... I think I'm going to toddle off to bed rather than burn the midnight oil ... zzzzzzzzzzz. ...... Sharyn
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sleep well my friend and may your dreams be filled with love and beauty.
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likewise my dear ...
Comment from xotic flotsam
I can feel the sand, water and green stuff squishing between my toes. The sun and a beautiful day. You've given me a great visual, knowing you can have an indulgence. It feels good. Your poem was atmospheric. Well done.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013
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I can feel the sand, water and green stuff squishing between my toes. The sun and a beautiful day. You've given me a great visual, knowing you can have an indulgence. It feels good. Your poem was atmospheric. Well done.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013
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I'm delighted that you enjoyed it, e.f! and a huge double/triple thank you for that lovely six! indulgence does feel good sometimes,especially when it's in the small things that feel BIG! :)Sharyn
Comment from Joan E.
Nope, I have not had one of those days, nor the courage to write an ode to myself. I salute your seizing the moment along with your internal rhymes, alliteration and appeals to our sense of sound, sight and taste. "YEAH!" This one's for you and you earned it! Hugs- Joan
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013
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Nope, I have not had one of those days, nor the courage to write an ode to myself. I salute your seizing the moment along with your internal rhymes, alliteration and appeals to our sense of sound, sight and taste. "YEAH!" This one's for you and you earned it! Hugs- Joan
Comment Written 24-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013
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Bless you, Joan! Take a day! go on! do it! :))))Sharyn
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The days are a bit too over-scheduled at the moment, but I'll keep it in mind! Thanks for the encouragement- Joan
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I know the feeling - I think that's why my Ode day was so special. NOTHING for a whole afternoon! Wheee! :)
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I think I might have one of those next week! I'm glad you made good use of yours. Smiles- Joan
Comment from words
This one gave me a smile.
I especially liked:perhaps with luscious licking of banana bread
sticking to my honey'd tongue
because on the bathroom scales this morning, it dawned on me that
I wasn't
as fat
as I thought I was, so there!
I'm celebrating!
me!
Hugs. d
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013
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This one gave me a smile.
I especially liked:perhaps with luscious licking of banana bread
sticking to my honey'd tongue
because on the bathroom scales this morning, it dawned on me that
I wasn't
as fat
as I thought I was, so there!
I'm celebrating!
me!
Hugs. d
Comment Written 24-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013
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bless you d. - some days are just more fun than others! :)Sharyn
Comment from Perp Ihebom
I think this piece of writing deserves an exceptional rating. Yes, celebrate yourself; why not? I love the beautiful choice of words and the mood of freedom created by the poem. Great flow. kudos
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013
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I think this piece of writing deserves an exceptional rating. Yes, celebrate yourself; why not? I love the beautiful choice of words and the mood of freedom created by the poem. Great flow. kudos
Comment Written 24-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013
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Bless you, Perp - and a special "thank you" for your lovely six! :)Sharyn
Comment from donaldww
This is an interesting idea to make a poem about yourself, expounding your virtues and physical attributes.
It is great that you took your inspiration from Whitman's Song of Myself, although, that poem is a celebration of the ascendency of the democratic self in the context of the American socio-political experiment--the individual as supreme without religious or other institutional qualifiers--rather than an Ode to Walt Whitman's person. So your one-off has one-upped the old master.
Wonder of wonders!
Cheers,
DW
Good luck with the contest!
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013
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This is an interesting idea to make a poem about yourself, expounding your virtues and physical attributes.
It is great that you took your inspiration from Whitman's Song of Myself, although, that poem is a celebration of the ascendency of the democratic self in the context of the American socio-political experiment--the individual as supreme without religious or other institutional qualifiers--rather than an Ode to Walt Whitman's person. So your one-off has one-upped the old master.
Wonder of wonders!
Cheers,
DW
Good luck with the contest!
Comment Written 24-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013
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yep - what you said - Girls Just Wanna Have Fun, right? and I DID mention a nun - roll over Walt! :))))
Comment from rjuselius
i like how the poem flows from one thought to another, mind-drifting. i love that you love yourself, it's not always an easy task.
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013
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i like how the poem flows from one thought to another, mind-drifting. i love that you love yourself, it's not always an easy task.
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x
Comment Written 23-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013
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thx so much rebekka! :)S