It Consumes My Breath
Dealing with Anger Issues.33 total reviews
Comment from pickthorn
A chilling dissertation of a troubled mind. The pain and suffering expressed in this piece seems very real and frightning. You have crafted a thought provoking expression of the conflict taking place in your mind.
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A chilling dissertation of a troubled mind. The pain and suffering expressed in this piece seems very real and frightning. You have crafted a thought provoking expression of the conflict taking place in your mind.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2012
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I thank you for understanding the pain that I was going through within this piece...dark lord
Comment from jadapenn
This is a vivid poem of anger. Even the attempts at control wane and the beast takes over to conquer and destroy. You've handled the conflict well and the poem carries a lot of action.
Well written dark side piece. lol. I enjoyed. luv jada
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This is a vivid poem of anger. Even the attempts at control wane and the beast takes over to conquer and destroy. You've handled the conflict well and the poem carries a lot of action.
Well written dark side piece. lol. I enjoyed. luv jada
Comment Written 29-Jan-2012
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I thank you so much for the wonderful review...dark lord.
Comment from TammyGail
Excellent work on crafting this poem
I loved your forth stanza
it was a perfect just as powerful as your other lines
only a few steps above. Thanks for sharing it was a pleasure
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Excellent work on crafting this poem
I loved your forth stanza
it was a perfect just as powerful as your other lines
only a few steps above. Thanks for sharing it was a pleasure
Comment Written 29-Jan-2012
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Thank you so much for the glowing review, I do appreciate it...dark lord
Comment from Galactia
great poem
favourite stanza
The strength to hold back no longer exists.
The yellow tint in my exhausted eyes tells a horrid tale.
Stirring within the soul, the rancid monster lets out a blood
Curdling cry that shakes the foundation of my existence.
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2012
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great poem
favourite stanza
The strength to hold back no longer exists.
The yellow tint in my exhausted eyes tells a horrid tale.
Stirring within the soul, the rancid monster lets out a blood
Curdling cry that shakes the foundation of my existence.
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 29-Jan-2012
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Thank you so very much for the great review, I do appreciate it...dark lord
Comment from Chris Tee
This is another absolutely dark poem you have composed here for us old sport.
Well done indeed and I suggest you start a dark club for others to write this style of poetry. Gungalo had one last year, but she dropped it.
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This is another absolutely dark poem you have composed here for us old sport.
Well done indeed and I suggest you start a dark club for others to write this style of poetry. Gungalo had one last year, but she dropped it.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2012
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As always, thank you for the continued support of my writing...dark lord
Comment from Rose Hearth
This is a stirring rendition of anger. The attempts to control it followed by the consequences of letting it control you. The words beast and rancid monster create quite the image.
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This is a stirring rendition of anger. The attempts to control it followed by the consequences of letting it control you. The words beast and rancid monster create quite the image.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2012
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WOW! thank you for the fab review, it really warms my heart...dark lord
Comment from Veronica Grace
This is a very grim poem but very well executed. Your choice of words and phrasing made it eerie and dark as the character falls inot darkness. Excellent
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This is a very grim poem but very well executed. Your choice of words and phrasing made it eerie and dark as the character falls inot darkness. Excellent
Comment Written 29-Jan-2012
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Thank you so very much for the great review...dark lord
Comment from HPicasso
Imagery is excellent and great read.
I liked your rather dark poem.
It was very graphic in wording and description.
Poetry is a way of freeing the soul and truly you let your feeling flow. Congratulation!
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Imagery is excellent and great read.
I liked your rather dark poem.
It was very graphic in wording and description.
Poetry is a way of freeing the soul and truly you let your feeling flow. Congratulation!
Comment Written 28-Jan-2012
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Thank you very much for the great review...dark lord
Comment from Amanda Laiq
This piece leaves the reader with a terrible feeling. That feeling relates to the guilt of acknowledging that we go through this every time we become angry. Excellent piece. No corrections or suggestions. Wonderfully painful! -Sarah
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This piece leaves the reader with a terrible feeling. That feeling relates to the guilt of acknowledging that we go through this every time we become angry. Excellent piece. No corrections or suggestions. Wonderfully painful! -Sarah
Comment Written 28-Jan-2012
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Thank you for the wonderful review...dark lord
Comment from bard owl
This poem is terribly dark and a horrifying example of how the beast within sometimes cannot be controlled. The use of colors red and black are very effective in conveying the nature of your poem. Chillingly executed evil. Excellent. Blessings, Linda
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This poem is terribly dark and a horrifying example of how the beast within sometimes cannot be controlled. The use of colors red and black are very effective in conveying the nature of your poem. Chillingly executed evil. Excellent. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 28-Jan-2012
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Thank you so very much for the kind review, I do appreciate it...dark lord
