Lonely Hearts Meet
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Comment from Readywriter52
Mr. Brown is doing everything he can to make Anna, Everett, and Paul look bad. When he failed with that, he implied that Troy has a dangerous disease that would harm Michael. I don't think Paul would let anyone harm Michael even Troy. Mr. Brown is desperate to make Anna look like an unfit mother.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2011
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Mr. Brown is doing everything he can to make Anna, Everett, and Paul look bad. When he failed with that, he implied that Troy has a dangerous disease that would harm Michael. I don't think Paul would let anyone harm Michael even Troy. Mr. Brown is desperate to make Anna look like an unfit mother.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rchitwood
Oh! My I did not look for that coming I will have to read more about this blood disease.Your story makes me want to smack the old Mrs Rodgers. Your story has good dialogue and characters and draws the reader in.Very believable and I would recommend this to others.Blessings Rita
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2011
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Oh! My I did not look for that coming I will have to read more about this blood disease.Your story makes me want to smack the old Mrs Rodgers. Your story has good dialogue and characters and draws the reader in.Very believable and I would recommend this to others.Blessings Rita
Comment Written 26-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
I'VE MISSED SOME CHAPTERS, BUT THIS IS GETTING BETTER AND BETTER. THE SITUATION IN THE COURT ROOM IS VERY REALISTIC. VERY WELL WRITTEN, BUT THE BEST OF ALL IS THE INFORMATION YOU'VE PROVIDED ABOUT THE TERRIBLE DECEASE OF HEPATITIS B.
WONDERFUL JOB!!
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2011
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I'VE MISSED SOME CHAPTERS, BUT THIS IS GETTING BETTER AND BETTER. THE SITUATION IN THE COURT ROOM IS VERY REALISTIC. VERY WELL WRITTEN, BUT THE BEST OF ALL IS THE INFORMATION YOU'VE PROVIDED ABOUT THE TERRIBLE DECEASE OF HEPATITIS B.
WONDERFUL JOB!!
Comment Written 26-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
Excellent. I knew Troy had something; felt it had to do with his blood like HIV, but I knew I was off. Bringing in Hep B is a realistic and viable twist. If Anna were real she would be even more scared hearing this.
I also like that you've used this chapter to educate us about a disease we hear about but probably don't understand unless we have or know someone who has it.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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Excellent. I knew Troy had something; felt it had to do with his blood like HIV, but I knew I was off. Bringing in Hep B is a realistic and viable twist. If Anna were real she would be even more scared hearing this.
I also like that you've used this chapter to educate us about a disease we hear about but probably don't understand unless we have or know someone who has it.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and your support.
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
This is a very good chapter, I have missed so much. I was still able to get into the storyline though and your authors notes are very informative.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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This is a very good chapter, I have missed so much. I was still able to get into the storyline though and your authors notes are very informative.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from robyn corum
Looks like major trouble for Anna. how will she pull this out? You seem to have painted her into a corner this time. Great job!
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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Looks like major trouble for Anna. how will she pull this out? You seem to have painted her into a corner this time. Great job!
Comment Written 26-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Spencerpenrod
I loved reading this. So much, in fact, that I think I am going to read your whole novel. Your writing is brilliant, and you are able to effectively establish the characters with dialogue even if the reader has had no previous association with them. Amazing job.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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I loved reading this. So much, in fact, that I think I am going to read your whole novel. Your writing is brilliant, and you are able to effectively establish the characters with dialogue even if the reader has had no previous association with them. Amazing job.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
Hi Barbara your story is well written and a well descriptive in the knowledge of the subject thanks for sharing I enjoyed it . Mary
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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Hi Barbara your story is well written and a well descriptive in the knowledge of the subject thanks for sharing I enjoyed it . Mary
Comment Written 26-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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If you thought my story was well written and you enjoyed it, why did I get a one star? I am really confused.
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Sorry I must have pressed and the guide jumped.will update to five I'm so sorry. send back
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I understand how that happens. I have done that before myself. Thank you.
Comment from Whisperofhearts
You have me intrigued by this case(story)I shall when I have more time return and read all chapters, my sister who is schizophrenic has contracted this decease by use of a bong, and has passed it on, by not being "herself" at times. Your author notes also enlightened me. Thank you. You have a new follower.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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You have me intrigued by this case(story)I shall when I have more time return and read all chapters, my sister who is schizophrenic has contracted this decease by use of a bong, and has passed it on, by not being "herself" at times. Your author notes also enlightened me. Thank you. You have a new follower.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from katpen5
Very intriguing... coming in on this chapter, I am very curious now about the whole book. You work well with dialog. I find it hard to make it sound real, myself. But I like how you did it. Very believable.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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Very intriguing... coming in on this chapter, I am very curious now about the whole book. You work well with dialog. I find it hard to make it sound real, myself. But I like how you did it. Very believable.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
