Those Bad Bad Bedtime Boys
A little boy blames the toy mess on others.34 total reviews
Comment from Gungalo
LOL a likely excuse, she said, eh? This is not only cute but it's funny. I really enjoyed this different foray into why a boy's room might be a mess. loL. Good job you!!!
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LOL a likely excuse, she said, eh? This is not only cute but it's funny. I really enjoyed this different foray into why a boy's room might be a mess. loL. Good job you!!!
Comment Written 01-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2010
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Thanks so much for the encouragement and review.
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My pleasure Magic!!!!
Comment from dmxn2k
This has a captivating rhythm, an interesting tale. I'm sure your grandsons will appreciate that they inspired such an entertaining thought.
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This has a captivating rhythm, an interesting tale. I'm sure your grandsons will appreciate that they inspired such an entertaining thought.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2010
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In time, I think they will. They are both quite young right now.
Thank you for the review
Comment from findingmyroom
I adore this little saga of whodunnit! It's a perfect mystery, and I like that there's no real resolution, though action takes place in the form of cleaning up. Terrific concept, great pacing and imagery. No snags anywhere for me. Great job!
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I adore this little saga of whodunnit! It's a perfect mystery, and I like that there's no real resolution, though action takes place in the form of cleaning up. Terrific concept, great pacing and imagery. No snags anywhere for me. Great job!
Comment Written 01-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2010
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Thank you so much!
Comment from juliaSjames
This clever and well-written poem from the POV of a child is just delightful. It brings to mind the quirky style of Dr. Seuss. And it echoes that heartfelt childish cry when items are lost or broken. "It wasn't me!"
I'm sure your grandkids will love reading it or having it read to them,
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This clever and well-written poem from the POV of a child is just delightful. It brings to mind the quirky style of Dr. Seuss. And it echoes that heartfelt childish cry when items are lost or broken. "It wasn't me!"
I'm sure your grandkids will love reading it or having it read to them,
Comment Written 01-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2010
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Thank you for the review and encouragement.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great job writing this poem, i enjoyed the poor little kid that got blamed with those bad bad boys deeds. i'm laughing now
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this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great job writing this poem, i enjoyed the poor little kid that got blamed with those bad bad boys deeds. i'm laughing now
Comment Written 01-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2010
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Thank you, I'm so glad you liked it. Thank you for the review.
Comment from R. K. Alan
This is a delightfully wonderful storytelling. You brought it to life with your great descriptive verse. Loved the cadence and flow. Thanks for sharing this great piece. Ray aka krylon
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This is a delightfully wonderful storytelling. You brought it to life with your great descriptive verse. Loved the cadence and flow. Thanks for sharing this great piece. Ray aka krylon
Comment Written 01-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2010
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Thank you for the great review.
Comment from adewpearl
My little girl once blamed the mess she had made on the gerbils, so this really resonates with me. LOL
What a fun rhyming story of this speaker's attempts to catch the true clutter culprits red-handed. This had me laughing aloud :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2010
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My little girl once blamed the mess she had made on the gerbils, so this really resonates with me. LOL
What a fun rhyming story of this speaker's attempts to catch the true clutter culprits red-handed. This had me laughing aloud :-) Brooke
Comment Written 01-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2010
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Now that is a cute story! Thank you for your review.
Comment from Cedar
This is a real neat poem. I really got a kick out
of reading this one. It's very funny and tells
a story that we all go through with our children and
grandchildren. Great job.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2010
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This is a real neat poem. I really got a kick out
of reading this one. It's very funny and tells
a story that we all go through with our children and
grandchildren. Great job.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2010
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Comment from percival86jack
Love this last verse...
Everything is in order. No toys on the floor.
Dare I look any further? No trucks block the door.
Bookshelves are tidy, the hallway is clean.
So I'm not the sleepwalker? Just had a weird dream?
Or am I the hero who makes the world right?
With infinite courage and my mini mag flashlight!
Sweet little ode, my dear friend... love and hugs, Jack xxxxxxxxxx
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2010
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Love this last verse...
Everything is in order. No toys on the floor.
Dare I look any further? No trucks block the door.
Bookshelves are tidy, the hallway is clean.
So I'm not the sleepwalker? Just had a weird dream?
Or am I the hero who makes the world right?
With infinite courage and my mini mag flashlight!
Sweet little ode, my dear friend... love and hugs, Jack xxxxxxxxxx
Comment Written 01-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2010
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Thank you for the great review and words of encouragement.
Comment from Joyce Laura Bailey
What fun this poem was. Could be a short story.
Very well rhymed and rhythm flowed nicely throughout.
Nice flow too. I chuckled as I read the poem. Very well thought out.
Well done.
Joyce
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2010
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What fun this poem was. Could be a short story.
Very well rhymed and rhythm flowed nicely throughout.
Nice flow too. I chuckled as I read the poem. Very well thought out.
Well done.
Joyce
Comment Written 01-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2010
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Thank you so much. Those little munchkins are always teasing me, just under the surface. Maybe they will be back.
