Little Billy
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Cop"memiors from my life experiences.
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Comment from LOA7
Wonderful tribute. It is amazing that in a simple poetic form that so much can be written. Welcome to Fanstory. Have fun on your new adventure!
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2010
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Wonderful tribute. It is amazing that in a simple poetic form that so much can be written. Welcome to Fanstory. Have fun on your new adventure!
Comment Written 16-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2010
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thank you for Taking the time to review my poem
Comment from patmedium
Now this one, K, is a lovely testimony to your loved and respected brother. Congratulations on a nice succinct write. Good luck with it. Pat.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2010
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Now this one, K, is a lovely testimony to your loved and respected brother. Congratulations on a nice succinct write. Good luck with it. Pat.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2010
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thank you for Taking the time to review my poem
Comment from krdeering
So really what you wrote is a clarity pyramid ode of sorts, right? It does a good job of honoring your brother. I'm not quite sure I understand the key line, "With poet's eyes they cry justice," but I like the sound of it!
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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So really what you wrote is a clarity pyramid ode of sorts, right? It does a good job of honoring your brother. I'm not quite sure I understand the key line, "With poet's eyes they cry justice," but I like the sound of it!
Comment Written 15-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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Thanks
Comment from Poetic Diamond
I don't know if this applies to NYPD cops, because there's nothing poetic about them, but I appreciate the sentiment you're trying to convey. For the most part, it's a very touching and endearing poem that pays homage to those that are bound by duty to protect and serve. Good luck in the writing prompt!
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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I don't know if this applies to NYPD cops, because there's nothing poetic about them, but I appreciate the sentiment you're trying to convey. For the most part, it's a very touching and endearing poem that pays homage to those that are bound by duty to protect and serve. Good luck in the writing prompt!
Comment Written 15-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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Thanks
Comment from Connie P
I think you have a winner here. It meets the requirements of the form and you've done a wonderful job invoking emotion and the poem has great clarity. I love your last line.
Connie
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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I think you have a winner here. It meets the requirements of the form and you've done a wonderful job invoking emotion and the poem has great clarity. I love your last line.
Connie
Comment Written 15-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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Thank you for taking the time to review my poem.
Comment from bhogg
I know nothing about this format. It looked pretty constrictive to me. Not being a poet, I can only rate things on whether or not they speak to me. Yours did. Very well done. Regards, Bill
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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I know nothing about this format. It looked pretty constrictive to me. Not being a poet, I can only rate things on whether or not they speak to me. Yours did. Very well done. Regards, Bill
Comment Written 15-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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Thank you for taking the time to review my poem.
Comment from Rama Rao
An excellent short pyramid poem which sounded good and made fine reading. I liked the line gilded by acts of love the best. I've seen some cops helping the children and the aged. I'm convinced they do a fine job in many ways. Thanks for highlighting this fact.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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An excellent short pyramid poem which sounded good and made fine reading. I liked the line gilded by acts of love the best. I've seen some cops helping the children and the aged. I'm convinced they do a fine job in many ways. Thanks for highlighting this fact.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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Thank you for taking the time to review my poem.
Comment from Mike K2
This is a wonderful entry and so true. While not on the force, I try to approach my life with the mindset and understanding that they have to have.
This poetic concept, what it states and the emotions it creates, not deserves the highest rating, but many cross links so that the world can view this.
I'll be honest, in Baltimore, we had a police officer dismissed from the force for political reasons by the police commissioner. He is the cop that tussled with a skateboarder which ended up on U-Tube. He was cleared of all wrong doing, with the exception of not filing the proper paperwork and recommended to receive a six day suspension. In reality, police are discouraged from filing incident reports on juveniles and he decided not to, to give the kid a break. It is a shame that the U-Tube video doesn't have him shaking hands with the kid in the end.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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This is a wonderful entry and so true. While not on the force, I try to approach my life with the mindset and understanding that they have to have.
This poetic concept, what it states and the emotions it creates, not deserves the highest rating, but many cross links so that the world can view this.
I'll be honest, in Baltimore, we had a police officer dismissed from the force for political reasons by the police commissioner. He is the cop that tussled with a skateboarder which ended up on U-Tube. He was cleared of all wrong doing, with the exception of not filing the proper paperwork and recommended to receive a six day suspension. In reality, police are discouraged from filing incident reports on juveniles and he decided not to, to give the kid a break. It is a shame that the U-Tube video doesn't have him shaking hands with the kid in the end.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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Thank you for taking the time to review my poem. And thank you for that wonderful six star rating you made my day.
Comment from Winslow
Dear Poet,
A well thought out clarity pyramid poem about a cop. Sometimes their jobs are not so easy.
Good luck in the contest.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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Dear Poet,
A well thought out clarity pyramid poem about a cop. Sometimes their jobs are not so easy.
Good luck in the contest.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 15-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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Thank you for taking the time to review my poem.
Comment from Ann Smith
What a wonderful tribute to all the men and women who put on the uniform to serve. I know your brother especially appreciates this poem. The line, 'informs loved ones of their loss is such a strong image.' Good luck with the contest. ann
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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What a wonderful tribute to all the men and women who put on the uniform to serve. I know your brother especially appreciates this poem. The line, 'informs loved ones of their loss is such a strong image.' Good luck with the contest. ann
Comment Written 15-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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Thank you for taking the time to review my poem.
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You are welcome. ann