Little Billy
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Comment from june prescott
Thank you for sharing this unfamiliar poetry format. I learned something new & I thank you for that! You have well executed this format... although I may call it villianelle, in this case. The "voice" you have projected is sinister, for sure. The phrase "Mother's great prince could have been crowned," leads me to believe he was murdered by the now grown boy in the stanza before, who is continuing an abusive/murderous cycle. Not sure I have it right, but surely the morbid tone and the agony of living is well represented. Thanks so much! JP
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Thank you for sharing this unfamiliar poetry format. I learned something new & I thank you for that! You have well executed this format... although I may call it villianelle, in this case. The "voice" you have projected is sinister, for sure. The phrase "Mother's great prince could have been crowned," leads me to believe he was murdered by the now grown boy in the stanza before, who is continuing an abusive/murderous cycle. Not sure I have it right, but surely the morbid tone and the agony of living is well represented. Thanks so much! JP
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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thank you for the excellent review.
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My pleasure! :) Cheers, JP
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thank you for the excellent review.
Comment from fairydancer
Hi keimosobie,
some very unusual lines in this unique poem.
I am not sure I fully understood your meaning, but have a feeling I wasn't supposed to.
Absolutely love this line:
"Reality's paces tie imagination's laces." - classic!
Well written - Cally :)
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Hi keimosobie,
some very unusual lines in this unique poem.
I am not sure I fully understood your meaning, but have a feeling I wasn't supposed to.
Absolutely love this line:
"Reality's paces tie imagination's laces." - classic!
Well written - Cally :)
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Ailo
Interesting, creepy poem. Maybe its b/c I just watched and episode of "Bones," but this really comes off like the psyche of a serial killer...washing away all traces of death...twisted faces being the killer. Lol, beside my out-take, its a well written poem. :)
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Interesting, creepy poem. Maybe its b/c I just watched and episode of "Bones," but this really comes off like the psyche of a serial killer...washing away all traces of death...twisted faces being the killer. Lol, beside my out-take, its a well written poem. :)
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Yes. its supposed to keep you wonderimg about the reality of it.
Not knowing is more frightening then knowing
Comment from Renee' J Thomas
this is very interesting and I enjoyed reading it, the artwork you chose is quite interesting and I enjoyed the rhyme scheme you chose.
nice job
Renee'
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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this is very interesting and I enjoyed reading it, the artwork you chose is quite interesting and I enjoyed the rhyme scheme you chose.
nice job
Renee'
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Thank you and your welcome.
Comment from Poetic Friend
I have to give maximum stars for the poetic form alone. This poetic form is one of the most challenging, and you executed it superbly. Simultaneously, providing a profound message as well. Bravo, for this one!
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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I have to give maximum stars for the poetic form alone. This poetic form is one of the most challenging, and you executed it superbly. Simultaneously, providing a profound message as well. Bravo, for this one!
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Thank you. Its good to see someone appriciates the difficulty of this poem. I appriciate it.
Comment from msdebra
Very nice. I learn something new here every day. I had never heard of a Villanelle so I had to go look it up. It seems very difficult to make it work out and you seem to have done a very nice job. Thank you so much for teaching me something new today.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Very nice. I learn something new here every day. I had never heard of a Villanelle so I had to go look it up. It seems very difficult to make it work out and you seem to have done a very nice job. Thank you so much for teaching me something new today.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Your welcome. give it a try its not that difficult.
Comment from words
Well and darkly done.
Felt like I was taking a walk round the mind of a serial killer.
I especially liked:I somehow covered all my bases.
Mother's great prince could have been crowned.
Twisted faces in hiding places.
Rain poured down and washed away all traces
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Well and darkly done.
Felt like I was taking a walk round the mind of a serial killer.
I especially liked:I somehow covered all my bases.
Mother's great prince could have been crowned.
Twisted faces in hiding places.
Rain poured down and washed away all traces
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Wow everyone keeps quoting diffrent lines they love. thank you.
Comment from AnnaLinda
keimosobie,
I am not familiar with the Villanelle form,
however, I enjoyed your reflective thoughts
within it, the rhymes and your intrigueing
presentation.
Very nicely done!
Linda
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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keimosobie,
I am not familiar with the Villanelle form,
however, I enjoyed your reflective thoughts
within it, the rhymes and your intrigueing
presentation.
Very nicely done!
Linda
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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I put the rules in my authors notes for you I hope you get a chance to look at them and thanks.
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Keimosobie ...
Real or imagined? That is the sum total of your Notes at the end of this writing presented in the Villanelle. Unfortunately, you did not include in your Notes, the requirements for this format.
I cannot pretend to like what you have written and find myself wondering what it was that inspired your words.
From a writing point of view, all is well.
Love from ..... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Hullo Keimosobie ...
Real or imagined? That is the sum total of your Notes at the end of this writing presented in the Villanelle. Unfortunately, you did not include in your Notes, the requirements for this format.
I cannot pretend to like what you have written and find myself wondering what it was that inspired your words.
From a writing point of view, all is well.
Love from ..... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Well the inspiration is supposed to come from the readers imagination. every gets a diffrent meaning and thats what I love about it. Like a clue to a murder mystery. anyway I put the description im my authors notes since most people said what you did about the form.
Comment from PUPA
A dark poem filled with mystery, can't say I understood what the poet wants to say, but I enjoyed the lovely style of writing, the villanelle, well written and presented.
Love
Pupa
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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A dark poem filled with mystery, can't say I understood what the poet wants to say, but I enjoyed the lovely style of writing, the villanelle, well written and presented.
Love
Pupa
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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thank you.