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Bottom of the Loch

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Parents die, so she moves in with unknown family

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Comment from dportwood
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wierdgrace,

Goodness!

I hope the dark or fog does not prevent Hank from seeing the flag.

I did notice this:

As she sat, she stared wistfully out over the water.
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Duane

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 Comment Written 21-Jun-2010


reply by the author on 21-Jun-2010
    thank you for catching, I will put this in my second draft, your the best.