Tantalizing Eyes
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Comment from rmdelta
barbara,
Great action and a strong ending. Very nicely written throughout, BArabara. Thoroughly enjoyable reading and I wish you the best of luck with this. It should do nicely.
REggie
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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barbara,
Great action and a strong ending. Very nicely written throughout, BArabara. Thoroughly enjoyable reading and I wish you the best of luck with this. It should do nicely.
REggie
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from RuberRuth
A great read. This is the first chapter I have read and there's goes my rule for reading a novel...I never read the last chapter first, however, I shall be making an exception here! Fast, pacy, an enjoyable read!
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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A great read. This is the first chapter I have read and there's goes my rule for reading a novel...I never read the last chapter first, however, I shall be making an exception here! Fast, pacy, an enjoyable read!
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from bob cullen
A truly fabulous read. Every instalment I've read contained the professional touches only a good write can create. Your writing is certainly worthy of publication.
Have you yet found an agent or a publisher.
I wish you success in this regard
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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A truly fabulous read. Every instalment I've read contained the professional touches only a good write can create. Your writing is certainly worthy of publication.
Have you yet found an agent or a publisher.
I wish you success in this regard
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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I will be looking for an agent this summer. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from minopavlic
Ms Wilkey, what a gifted writer. Literally I was dodging bullets myself as they flew. My only suggestion might be--when the gunplay started, instead of the men moving Leya to a corner, I think for more realism, Leya should have been been laid on the ground. Either way is fine, just a thought. I'll keep you in my prayers for a speedy recovery from surgery.
no_obstacle
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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Ms Wilkey, what a gifted writer. Literally I was dodging bullets myself as they flew. My only suggestion might be--when the gunplay started, instead of the men moving Leya to a corner, I think for more realism, Leya should have been been laid on the ground. Either way is fine, just a thought. I'll keep you in my prayers for a speedy recovery from surgery.
no_obstacle
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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Thank you for the well wishes. Thank you for your kind review.
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My pleasure Ms Wilkey
Comment from Georgina Lenty
With your writing, I could easily envision everything happening like it was a movie in my head. This could open up a new genre - action/romance! Great job!
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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With your writing, I could easily envision everything happening like it was a movie in my head. This could open up a new genre - action/romance! Great job!
Comment Written 11-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from Ruthi Hurwitz
I am writing this as a reader, not a writer... I would just like to say that although this is the first chapter I have read of your book (I understand it is the last), I was enthralled. Your style is up there with the best of them. This is the genre of book I usually read, and I would buy this one in a wink. This chapter is very fast-paced and keeps one attention throughout, which is not to be taken for granted at all. Throughout my years of reading, I've frequently picked up a book, leafed through it, and put it right back on the shelf after understanding that I would not enjoy reading it. Well written, and I wish you the best of luck with the book.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2010
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I am writing this as a reader, not a writer... I would just like to say that although this is the first chapter I have read of your book (I understand it is the last), I was enthralled. Your style is up there with the best of them. This is the genre of book I usually read, and I would buy this one in a wink. This chapter is very fast-paced and keeps one attention throughout, which is not to be taken for granted at all. Throughout my years of reading, I've frequently picked up a book, leafed through it, and put it right back on the shelf after understanding that I would not enjoy reading it. Well written, and I wish you the best of luck with the book.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2010
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Your review means a lot to me. I took some major hits on this chapter and one reviewer told me he was disappointed in my writing skills, that as a teacher I should know better. That hurt. Thank you again.
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I think all authors receive some bad reviews at various stages of their careers. I think that you need to step back and decide whether a particular bad review is constructive and justified. If honestly you feel it is not, you should not let it get you down. It is one of the hazards of the profession. It is your readers who will give the final vote. Again, I wish you the best of luck :)
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Barbara.Wilkey ....
I have not read previous chapters of your book but, this is well written with a fast pace to keep the attention of your readers.
There are just a few small changes to recommend ...
* You have - If Steven were dead .... this should be -
If Steven was dead ... (it would be - if you were dead ...
but .... if he was dead ....)
* You have - had gotten louder. I suggest -
had got louder ... OR ... had become louder ....
* You have - It sounds like some of Carlos's men are getting closer. I suggest - It sounds as if some of Carlos' men are getting closer.
Now that your book is complete, I wish you success with it and hope you find a Publisher.
With love from ..... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2010
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Hullo Barbara.Wilkey ....
I have not read previous chapters of your book but, this is well written with a fast pace to keep the attention of your readers.
There are just a few small changes to recommend ...
* You have - If Steven were dead .... this should be -
If Steven was dead ... (it would be - if you were dead ...
but .... if he was dead ....)
* You have - had gotten louder. I suggest -
had got louder ... OR ... had become louder ....
* You have - It sounds like some of Carlos's men are getting closer. I suggest - It sounds as if some of Carlos' men are getting closer.
Now that your book is complete, I wish you success with it and hope you find a Publisher.
With love from ..... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2010
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Thank you for catching those. I can't believe after all those reviews they were caught. I appreciate your review.
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Thank you for catching those. I can't believe after all those reviews they were caught. I appreciate your review.
Comment from DScribe
exciting ending - I found it interesting how you brought in Leya's thoughts (in italics) even though the story wasn't written from her point of view.
I have obviously come in very late in the story but was quickly absorbed in it, and congratulations on finishing a work of this magnitude.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2010
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exciting ending - I found it interesting how you brought in Leya's thoughts (in italics) even though the story wasn't written from her point of view.
I have obviously come in very late in the story but was quickly absorbed in it, and congratulations on finishing a work of this magnitude.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from jwlee211
great story. You move the action well and your words pull the reader into the story. Great work. I also like your dialogue. Great read
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2010
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great story. You move the action well and your words pull the reader into the story. Great work. I also like your dialogue. Great read
Comment Written 11-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Daytonight
I really enjoyed this chapter! Great writing. The story had just enough technical jargon to make it believable without boring someone with no knowledge. It made me want to read the whole book. The only thing I had difficulty with was trying to figure out who all of the characters were. Excellent story!
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2010
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I really enjoyed this chapter! Great writing. The story had just enough technical jargon to make it believable without boring someone with no knowledge. It made me want to read the whole book. The only thing I had difficulty with was trying to figure out who all of the characters were. Excellent story!
Comment Written 11-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2010
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The characters where all explained in earlier chapters. Thank you for your kind review.
