What are friends for?
Two mates out on the prowl35 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
What a fun/clever/hilarious twist ending, Marijke : -) I was thinking perhaps the woman was really a guy in drag, but the guy's mother, that is even funnier :-) The back and forth exchange sounds realistically like two jerks in a bar intent on hitting on women. Nicely done :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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What a fun/clever/hilarious twist ending, Marijke : -) I was thinking perhaps the woman was really a guy in drag, but the guy's mother, that is even funnier :-) The back and forth exchange sounds realistically like two jerks in a bar intent on hitting on women. Nicely done :-) Brooke
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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Hi Brooke, thanks for that fun review. Most reviewers expected it to be a guy in drag. I almost went there - so am pleased I changed it to his mother. Warmest regards, my friend. Marijke
Comment from Helen Tan
The dialogue flowed well and is believable. The situation...well, let the guys be warned.
Great job, good luck in the contest.
"I'm sure your mum will think it was funny. She'll consider it a great compliment, actually. Here she is in her new blond wig and sexy dress, and her son tries to crack on to her!"
Brilliant closing. I just hope he didn't try to grope her before he discovered her identity. She'll probably give him a good spanking for that.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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The dialogue flowed well and is believable. The situation...well, let the guys be warned.
Great job, good luck in the contest.
"I'm sure your mum will think it was funny. She'll consider it a great compliment, actually. Here she is in her new blond wig and sexy dress, and her son tries to crack on to her!"
Brilliant closing. I just hope he didn't try to grope her before he discovered her identity. She'll probably give him a good spanking for that.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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Hi Helen, thanks for your generous and fun review on this dialogue contest. I had fun writing it. Warmest regards, Marijke
Comment from Suzie B
Wow...great scenario, how damned embarrasing would that be for all concerned.
Some mate. Sheesh. Guys would think it was funny...but the son and mother probably wouldn't get over it for a very long time.
Ahh well...boys will be boys. And Mother's will be..hmmm?
Lol.
Nice entry for this contest M. Good luck with it.
Suzie
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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Wow...great scenario, how damned embarrasing would that be for all concerned.
Some mate. Sheesh. Guys would think it was funny...but the son and mother probably wouldn't get over it for a very long time.
Ahh well...boys will be boys. And Mother's will be..hmmm?
Lol.
Nice entry for this contest M. Good luck with it.
Suzie
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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Hi Suzie, thank you for your fun review. Yes, mates will be ...!
I am pleased you enjoyed, and thank you for your good luck wishes. Warmest regards, Marijke
Comment from Donovan
Oedipus, where are you when I need you. All little boys have fantasy's about their mothers...I guess there is an age where it stops. Cute story. Crack on her...I have never heard that expression before.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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Oedipus, where are you when I need you. All little boys have fantasy's about their mothers...I guess there is an age where it stops. Cute story. Crack on her...I have never heard that expression before.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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Guys 'crack onto' gals here. Thanks for your review. I didn't know this about little boys! Thanks for fun review and generous rating. Warmest regards, Marijke
Comment from Sandollar
I loved this. I found it hilarious. This is just what I had in mind for the prompt. Great give and take dialogue,without action tags. This should make a good showing in the contest.
Best of luck.
I found no errors.
Sandollar
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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I loved this. I found it hilarious. This is just what I had in mind for the prompt. Great give and take dialogue,without action tags. This should make a good showing in the contest.
Best of luck.
I found no errors.
Sandollar
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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Hi Sandollar, thank you for your great review and generous rating. I am pleased you enjoyed and thought it hilarious. Warmest regards, Marijke
Comment from btruax
Very interesting and a nice twist. I'm not sure why the first guy took so long to figure out who he was talking to. Maybe he didn't know his friend's mother all that well. Good luck on the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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Very interesting and a nice twist. I'm not sure why the first guy took so long to figure out who he was talking to. Maybe he didn't know his friend's mother all that well. Good luck on the contest.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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I think he and she were planning to set her son up! But, we'll never know! Thanks for your review and generous rating. Warmest regards, Marijke
Comment from Rama Rao
OMG. I can't believe it was his mum.
What a twist at the end!
It sure is difficult to loosen up after this type of encounter.
The dialogues were great.
Great job. I wish you good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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OMG. I can't believe it was his mum.
What a twist at the end!
It sure is difficult to loosen up after this type of encounter.
The dialogues were great.
Great job. I wish you good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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Thank you Ramarao, for your review. Yes, you wouldn't want that to happen, would you? I appreciate your generous comments and ratings. Warmest regards, Marijke
Comment from Thesis
Oh my! Hitting on Mom, not good, lol. He should have listened to his friend.
That was a fun read and a very unexpected ending. Good luckin the voting booth, Marijke. - John
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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Oh my! Hitting on Mom, not good, lol. He should have listened to his friend.
That was a fun read and a very unexpected ending. Good luckin the voting booth, Marijke. - John
Comment Written 21-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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Hi John, and thanks for your fun review and your generous rating. I'm pleased you enjoyed. Warmest regards, Marijke
Comment from L.lora
Thank you so much for
this delightful intriquing
read, I thoroughly enjoyed
it. Your turn about at the
end was definitely not one
I expected. Your dialogue
flowed smoothly and moved the
reader down the page with ease.
no nits or spags, good luck with your
contest. Lora
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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Thank you so much for
this delightful intriquing
read, I thoroughly enjoyed
it. Your turn about at the
end was definitely not one
I expected. Your dialogue
flowed smoothly and moved the
reader down the page with ease.
no nits or spags, good luck with your
contest. Lora
Comment Written 21-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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Thank you Lora, for your great review and generous rating. I am pleased you enjoyed the twist. Warmest regards, Marijke
Comment from suneagle
LOL. Well done, Marijke. Very funny with the build up of the dialogue until the twist in the tail of the tale. It was an entertaining and enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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LOL. Well done, Marijke. Very funny with the build up of the dialogue until the twist in the tail of the tale. It was an entertaining and enjoyable read.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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Thank you Les, for your great review and generous rating. I am pleased you enjoyed the twist. Warmest regards, Marijke
