The Romeo's
A lifetime of love27 total reviews
Comment from Cooper Watt
Very cute, jmdg1954, very cute indeed... Early Bird specials and Viagra: Sounds like a winning marketing campaign if you ask me! LOL. Good job, and good luck!
Coop.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2010
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Very cute, jmdg1954, very cute indeed... Early Bird specials and Viagra: Sounds like a winning marketing campaign if you ask me! LOL. Good job, and good luck!
Coop.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2010
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Cooper, thank you, sorry it took so long to respond... John
Comment from Begin Again
John
this is delicious and probably closer to the truth than most of the romantic stories...One last fling for old times sake...At least he'd go out with a bang!
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2010
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John
this is delicious and probably closer to the truth than most of the romantic stories...One last fling for old times sake...At least he'd go out with a bang!
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 15-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2010
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Carol, thank you for reading and the positive comments, sorry it took so long to respond... John
Comment from Tellis
Had a little fun with the word oops, didn't you. LoL I really enjoyed this well written tale, so keep up the great work.
Tellis
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2010
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Had a little fun with the word oops, didn't you. LoL I really enjoyed this well written tale, so keep up the great work.
Tellis
Comment Written 15-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2010
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Tellis, yes I did.. thanks for reading, sorry for the delay in responding... John
Comment from fionageorge
Very funny, yet realistic in the sense that older people do forget, or remember certain things and not others.
I loved the last couple of lines about the viagra and the life insurance.
Good luck in the contest
Warmest regards
Marijke
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2010
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Very funny, yet realistic in the sense that older people do forget, or remember certain things and not others.
I loved the last couple of lines about the viagra and the life insurance.
Good luck in the contest
Warmest regards
Marijke
Comment Written 15-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2010
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Marjike, thank you for reading and commenting... sorry for the delay in responding, John
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hey, that's not fair. I proposed to Marilyn exactly forty-nine years ago and it seems like yesterday. Are you trying to depict what will happen by my fifty-sixth anniversary? This is enough to make my seventy-five year-old toenails curl up...er...omg they already did that.
It's not good to make fun of old fools, you'll be one too if you live long enough.
Good luck in the contest can I come with the other retired ROMEOs. I need breakfast too.
Roger
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2010
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Hey, that's not fair. I proposed to Marilyn exactly forty-nine years ago and it seems like yesterday. Are you trying to depict what will happen by my fifty-sixth anniversary? This is enough to make my seventy-five year-old toenails curl up...er...omg they already did that.
It's not good to make fun of old fools, you'll be one too if you live long enough.
Good luck in the contest can I come with the other retired ROMEOs. I need breakfast too.
Roger
Comment Written 15-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2010
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Thanks for reading and getting a laugh from this one, sorry it took so long to respond... John
Comment from smileycloud
hey
good luck in the contest
interesting twists and turns
captures the ineterset and passes very smoothly from are to are
have a smiley day
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2010
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hey
good luck in the contest
interesting twists and turns
captures the ineterset and passes very smoothly from are to are
have a smiley day
Comment Written 15-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2010
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smileycloud, sorry it took so long to respond, thanks for reading and commenting... John
Comment from Belinda
You describe old people's habit well. They cannot remember last night but have terrific memories of what happened 50 years ago. Interesting valentine story.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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You describe old people's habit well. They cannot remember last night but have terrific memories of what happened 50 years ago. Interesting valentine story.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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Thank you Belinda for reading my work/ John
Comment from gypsycaravan
This is a very cute flash fiction story. I like the dialog after Alec wakes up and the ending to your story.
A couple suggestions:
1. The Romeo's agreed to take out there sweethearts."--shouldn't "there" be spelled "their"?
2. because if I wear it, it will give me goosebumpies--shouldn't it be if "she" wears it, it will give me goosebumpies?
Good luck with the contest. Very cute story. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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This is a very cute flash fiction story. I like the dialog after Alec wakes up and the ending to your story.
A couple suggestions:
1. The Romeo's agreed to take out there sweethearts."--shouldn't "there" be spelled "their"?
2. because if I wear it, it will give me goosebumpies--shouldn't it be if "she" wears it, it will give me goosebumpies?
Good luck with the contest. Very cute story. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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Thank you for reading and reviewing.. their has been corrected and the "I" was referring to what she would say... John
Comment from IndianaIrish
I really enjoyed this story of young love remembered ... and love continues. Who needs Denny's any way? Your dialogue is wonderful, John, and the story made me smile ... and hope that kind of passion exists for every couple married for 56 years. I loved the play on Romeo...very creative.
Just a couple of minor spags to look over to see if you agree...
Oops, I almost forgot, than(then) I went ...
"The boutique, where I bought that silky red(-)laced, see(-)through, oh I love it, never(-)take(-)it(-)out(-)of(-)the(-)box(-)teddy, because if I wear it, it will give me goosebumpies."(If YOU wear it...or she wears it?)
put(needs a space here)'em in
The Romeo's(Romeos) agreed to take out (their) there sweethearts.
Yea, yea, come on(,) Romeo(, commas before and after a direct address if in the middle of a sentence)
Alright, alright. (All right, all right.)
Hey(,)Jen, I
Come here(,) Romeo
Best wishes in the contest with this entertaining story.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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I really enjoyed this story of young love remembered ... and love continues. Who needs Denny's any way? Your dialogue is wonderful, John, and the story made me smile ... and hope that kind of passion exists for every couple married for 56 years. I loved the play on Romeo...very creative.
Just a couple of minor spags to look over to see if you agree...
Oops, I almost forgot, than(then) I went ...
"The boutique, where I bought that silky red(-)laced, see(-)through, oh I love it, never(-)take(-)it(-)out(-)of(-)the(-)box(-)teddy, because if I wear it, it will give me goosebumpies."(If YOU wear it...or she wears it?)
put(needs a space here)'em in
The Romeo's(Romeos) agreed to take out (their) there sweethearts.
Yea, yea, come on(,) Romeo(, commas before and after a direct address if in the middle of a sentence)
Alright, alright. (All right, all right.)
Hey(,)Jen, I
Come here(,) Romeo
Best wishes in the contest with this entertaining story.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 14-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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Thanks Indiana, you are the only one to comment on the meaning of ROMEO... I made a number of corrections already after posting.. just ran out of time this afternoon... Thanks for reading and commenting.. text ya tomorrow... John
Comment from c_lucas
This is a humorous poke at old age and sex. It is very well written with very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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This is a humorous poke at old age and sex. It is very well written with very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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Thanks c_lucas for reading and commenting.. John
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You're welcome, John. Charlie
