Matilda
Without love there's nothing27 total reviews
Comment from lola29
This is a fascinating story, and I truly enjoyed the read. You are a very talented writer, and I must say, this was one of your best. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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This is a fascinating story, and I truly enjoyed the read. You are a very talented writer, and I must say, this was one of your best. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Thank you Lola:)
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
This is very well-written! This chapter makes the reader want more. Lines are smooth and very enjoyable to read. Look forward to reading the other chapters!!! GReat job. Good luck in the contest. Hugs and smiles, Susanne
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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This is very well-written! This chapter makes the reader want more. Lines are smooth and very enjoyable to read. Look forward to reading the other chapters!!! GReat job. Good luck in the contest. Hugs and smiles, Susanne
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Thanks for reading Suzanne
Comment from highlander104
This is a good introduction to Matilda's journey through life and self-discovery. You have produced a wonderful blend of humor and dialogue that moves smoothly from beginning to end.
Good luck in the contest.
Jean K.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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This is a good introduction to Matilda's journey through life and self-discovery. You have produced a wonderful blend of humor and dialogue that moves smoothly from beginning to end.
Good luck in the contest.
Jean K.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Thank you
Comment from mbroyles2
I enjoyed this story.
You took me inside Matilda's dreams and held me there throughout.
The descriptive prose with a touch of humor made for an enjoyable read.
Old lovers leaving your memory. Absolutely a novel idea to write about.
The character development was excellent.
Michael
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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I enjoyed this story.
You took me inside Matilda's dreams and held me there throughout.
The descriptive prose with a touch of humor made for an enjoyable read.
Old lovers leaving your memory. Absolutely a novel idea to write about.
The character development was excellent.
Michael
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Thank you michael
Comment from Peeping_Soul
this is good stuff.you have stimulated my interest here by creating well defined complex characters here.i am looking forward to read moe of your workr
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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this is good stuff.you have stimulated my interest here by creating well defined complex characters here.i am looking forward to read moe of your workr
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Thank you
I actually have all 9 chapters in my published book
ghost words and other echoe
Comment from wierdgrace
well I will have to keep track of this book, the characters the story line, and the diologue has been written so well I feel like I am in the story, great entry for a contest, no errors I could see.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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well I will have to keep track of this book, the characters the story line, and the diologue has been written so well I feel like I am in the story, great entry for a contest, no errors I could see.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Thank you
Comment from patmedium
Apelle... this is a clear, concise read. Transporting the reader back through time. I found myself, with one layer of my mind, reading your words... while with another layer, I was reviewing my own awakening and experiences.
Strange experience. My complements. Pat.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Apelle... this is a clear, concise read. Transporting the reader back through time. I found myself, with one layer of my mind, reading your words... while with another layer, I was reviewing my own awakening and experiences.
Strange experience. My complements. Pat.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Thanks pat
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A pleasure to read. Pat.
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I actually have all chapters in my published book
Ghost words and other echoes
Adina
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Adina... I would love to, but I can't at the moment. I spend every spare moment down the chocolate mines, gathering chocolate dollars and cents to post my own stuff.
:( Sorry, dear. Pat. xx
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I Would be happy to send you a copy if you wold like, I did not get in this business for the money LOL
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Neither did I, dear! Pat.xxx
Comment from Colin Douglas
This is terrific writing. You say it's a chapter, but I think it kind of stands well on its own. The dialogue is rich and powerful and the scene is real.
Keep writing.
Colin
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2010
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This is terrific writing. You say it's a chapter, but I think it kind of stands well on its own. The dialogue is rich and powerful and the scene is real.
Keep writing.
Colin
Comment Written 22-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2010
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Thank you Colin, I appreciate it, .
Comment from rhymer1
My principal thought from the start to the finish of the subject mental exercise of your heroine is that love is a confusing emotion grosly complicated by sex, and sex is a confusing driving physical need (at least for men with testosteron)grosly complicated by Love. However both love and sex are principally between the ears. Excellent narrative and dialog.
Slainte, rhymer1
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2010
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My principal thought from the start to the finish of the subject mental exercise of your heroine is that love is a confusing emotion grosly complicated by sex, and sex is a confusing driving physical need (at least for men with testosteron)grosly complicated by Love. However both love and sex are principally between the ears. Excellent narrative and dialog.
Slainte, rhymer1
Comment Written 22-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2010
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Thank you I am very happy you liked it, and I agree with your observation
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Apelle. do you by any chance know who Jack Kerouac was? Are you familiar with his writing at all? I swear, girl, you have the sam estyle in this story as he in all of his. and he is known as one of the v]best of all time! Look him up...In particular a book called "On The Road" My dad was good friends with him. You have a masterpiece here, Apelle. Trust me. Wow! wish I had a six! Bob
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2010
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Hi, Apelle. do you by any chance know who Jack Kerouac was? Are you familiar with his writing at all? I swear, girl, you have the sam estyle in this story as he in all of his. and he is known as one of the v]best of all time! Look him up...In particular a book called "On The Road" My dad was good friends with him. You have a masterpiece here, Apelle. Trust me. Wow! wish I had a six! Bob
Comment Written 22-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2010
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Of course I know Keurac, one of my favorites.....
I am so delighted you liked it Bob. There are 9 chapters I wrote about Matilda and they are all part of my book Ghost Words and other echoes...I poured my heart out in this story...
Adina
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Great job, Adina...Bob
